Patience— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Please try to make your answer more natural and fluent by avoiding unnecessary pauses and sentence fragments. Also, be careful with exaggerations like "418 times" which may sound unrealistic. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I have shown perseverance in my studies. For example, when I was preparing for the CPA exam, it took me three years and several attempts before I finally passed.

Suggestion: Try to use complete sentences and link your ideas clearly. Also, pay attention to grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely. Avoid short, choppy sentences and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I feel impatient when I have to wait for something important. For instance, when I am stuck in traffic congestion and might be delayed for a meeting, I get quite impatient.

Suggestion: Focus on making your sentences complete and clear. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' properly to connect your ideas. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary to express feelings like boredom and impatience.

Example: I usually feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because it can be tiring. For example, if I work for too long without taking a break, I find it hard to stay patient.

Suggestion: Try to organize your answer with clear sentences and use linking words to explain your ideas logically. Also, improve your grammar and vocabulary to express your thoughts more effectively.

Example: Yes, my job requires a lot of patience because I work with numbers. Being patient helps me stay focused and calm, which is important to avoid mistakes that could take a long time to correct.

Suggestion: Work on making your sentences more fluent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to connect your ideas and express your thoughts clearly. Also, try to avoid vague phrases and be more specific.

Example: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to get annoyed easily, but as I have grown up, I have learned to be more patient to complete important tasks successfully.

× Yes, I am because.

✓ Yes, I am because I have shown a lot of perseverance in my studies.

The sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. It should be connected to the following explanation to form a complete sentence.

× For example, when I was taking.

✓ For example, when I was taking a CPA exam.

The sentence is incomplete and needs the object 'a CPA exam' to complete the thought.

× It took me 3 years and I had to retake the exam. 418 times before I finally pass.

✓ It took me 3 years and I had to retake the exam 418 times before I finally passed.

The verb 'pass' should be in past tense 'passed' to agree with the past context. Also, the period after 'exam' should be removed to connect the sentence properly.

× I feel impatient when I have to wait for something that is very important. For example. When I am in the congestion. After traffic. And I might be delaye for the meeting.

✓ I feel impatient when I have to wait for something that is very important. For example, when I am in traffic congestion and I might be delayed for the meeting.

The phrase 'in the congestion' is incorrect; it should be 'in traffic congestion'. 'After traffic' is unclear and unnecessary. 'Delaye' is a typo and should be 'delayed'. The sentences should be combined for clarity.

× Maybe it made me get bored. Because doing something in a long time. Could. Give me a boredom.

✓ Maybe it makes me bored because doing something for a long time could make me feel bored.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect verb forms. 'Made me get bored' should be 'makes me bored' to match present tense. 'In a long time' should be 'for a long time'. 'Give me a boredom' is incorrect; 'make me feel bored' is appropriate.

× If I start this for too long without taking a break.

✓ If I do this for too long without taking a break,

The verb 'start' is incorrect here; 'do' is more appropriate. The sentence is incomplete and should be connected to the next clause.

× I would not be able to be patient.

✓ I would not be able to be patient.

This sentence is correct but should be connected to the previous conditional clause for completeness.

× My job is focusing on numbers.

✓ My job focuses on numbers.

The phrase 'is focusing' is awkward here; the simple present 'focuses' is more appropriate to describe a habitual action.

× Being patient will make me. Be able to come and not anxious.

✓ Being patient will make me able to stay calm and not anxious.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Be able to come' is incorrect; likely intended 'stay calm'. The sentence should be combined and clarified.

× Because my work it. Needed to be focused.

✓ Because my work needs to be focused on.

The sentence is fragmented and has incorrect verb form. 'Needed' should be 'needs' to match present tense. 'It' is unnecessary.

× Or otherwise it would take a long time to redo it again.

✓ Otherwise, it would take a long time to redo it.

The phrase 'Or otherwise' is redundant; 'Otherwise' suffices. 'Redo it again' is redundant; 'redo' already implies 'again'.

× But after I have grown up.

✓ But after I grew up,

The phrase 'after I have grown up' is awkward; 'after I grew up' is more natural in past tense narrative. The sentence is incomplete and should be connected to the next clause.

× I feel like we don't have to be annoyed and the patience to get something done end to pass something very important to be done.

✓ I feel like we don't have to be annoyed and need patience to get something done and to pass something very important.

The sentence is confusing and ungrammatical. 'The patience' should be 'need patience'. 'End to pass' is unclear; likely intended 'and to pass'. The sentence should be restructured for clarity.