Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to correct grammar mistakes and make your answer more natural by using correct verb forms and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas more smoothly.

Example: I usually eat snacks when there is no food at home or when no one has cooked. Since I don't know how to cook, I often buy snacks to satisfy my hunger.

Suggestion: Improve sentence clarity and grammar, and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Avoid vague phrases and be more specific about why snacks are unhealthy.

Example: Honestly, eating snacks is unhealthy for me because they are often high in sugar and fat. However, I find them addictive since they taste good and are convenient. Because I am lazy, I prefer snacks over proper meals.

Suggestion: Use past tense consistently and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Also, avoid repeating the same idea and be more concise.

Example: When I was a child, I didn't eat many snacks because my mother always watched me closely to prevent unhealthy eating. Now that I am an adult, she is less strict, so I eat more snacks.

Suggestion: Try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural. Also, correct minor grammar mistakes like plural forms and article usage.

Example: I really enjoy eating chips because they are crunchy and have a nice texture. Moreover, there are many flavors to choose from, such as BBQ, pizza, and cheese, and they are quite affordable. That's why I prefer chips over other snacks.

× And as someone who don't know how to cook any meal at all, I would munch on snacks to buy sometimes and to reduce my hunger.

✓ And as someone who doesn't know how to cook any meal at all, I would munch on snacks to buy sometimes and to reduce my hunger.

The subject 'someone' is singular, so the verb should be 'doesn't' instead of 'don't' to agree in number. In English, singular third person subjects require verbs with 's' or 'es' in the present tense.

× Honestly it is very unhealthy for me to eat snacks but I just cannot stop eating it because it's very addictive.

✓ Honestly it is very unhealthy for me to eat snacks but I just cannot stop eating them because they're very addictive.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but 'snacks' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' to correctly refer to the plural noun. Also, 'they're' is used to refer to 'snacks' in plural form.

× Snacks taste very good and it's already prepared for you in a package and like proper healthy meals.

✓ Snacks taste very good and they're already prepared for you in a package, unlike proper healthy meals.

'Snacks' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they're' instead of 'it's'. Also, 'like' is incorrectly used; 'unlike' is appropriate to contrast snacks with proper healthy meals.

× And as someone who is lazy, I tend to go to snacks more than a proper meals.

✓ And as someone who is lazy, I tend to go to snacks more than proper meals.

The phrase 'a proper meals' is incorrect because 'meals' is plural and cannot be preceded by 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the quantifier usage.

× As a kid, I don't eat as much snack as I do right now.

✓ As a kid, I didn't eat as much snack as I do right now.

The sentence refers to past time ('As a kid'), so the verb should be in past tense 'didn't eat' instead of present 'don't eat'.

× As a kid, I don't eat as much snack as I do right now.

✓ As a kid, I didn't eat as many snacks as I do right now.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to countable items. Also, 'many' is used with countable plural nouns instead of 'much'.

× For example, when I was a kid, my mom will look after me 24/7 making sure I don't eat unhealthy stuff, especially snacks and candy, which can affect my health.

✓ For example, when I was a kid, my mom would look after me 24/7 making sure I didn't eat unhealthy stuff, especially snacks and candy, which could affect my health.

The sentence refers to past habitual action, so 'will' should be 'would' and 'don't' should be 'didn't' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Because I'm an adult I can do things myself so I eat more snacks.

✓ Because I'm an adult, I can do things myself, so I eat more snacks.

Commas are added for clarity and correct sentence structure; no pronoun error here but punctuation improves readability.

× I really enjoy eating chips because it's crunchy, the texture is just nice and the flavor is on top.

✓ I really enjoy eating chips because they're crunchy, the texture is just nice, and the flavor is on top.

'Chips' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'they're' instead of 'it's' to agree in number.

× You get to choose different flavor from BBQ to pizza to cheese and it's very cheap as well.

✓ You get to choose different flavors from BBQ to pizza to cheese, and they're very cheap as well.

'Flavor' should be plural 'flavors' because multiple options are mentioned. Also, 'it's' should be 'they're' to agree with plural 'flavors'.

× And that is why I chose chips instead of any other snacks.

✓ And that is why I choose chips instead of any other snacks.

The sentence is in present tense context, so 'chose' (past tense) should be 'choose' (present tense) to match the current preference.