Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Also, provide a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

Example: I'm currently on a diet, so I rarely eat snacks these days. However, when I do, I usually have them around 3:00 PM in the afternoon.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. To improve, use clearer vocabulary and correct sentence structures. Also, explain your opinion with specific examples and linking words.

Example: I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me because I often eat unhealthy options like potato chips or cake. However, eating fruits as snacks can be good for health.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: When I was a child, I used to eat snacks often. However, my mother was concerned about my health, so I usually ate fruits or other healthy snacks instead.

Suggestion: Your answer is brief and could be improved by adding more details and using linking words to make it more natural and effective.

Example: If I don't have to worry about my health, I would prefer to eat cheesecakes and potato chips because they taste delicious and satisfy my cravings.

× Actually I'm on a diet right now, so recently I'm not eating snacks but when I eating when I eat snacks I often eat 3:00 PM.

✓ Actually I'm on a diet right now, so recently I'm not eating snacks but when I eat snacks I often eat at 3:00 PM.

The phrase 'when I eating' is incorrect because after 'when' we need a subject and a verb in the correct form. The verb should be 'eat' not 'eating' here. Also, the time expression '3:00 PM' needs the preposition 'at' before it to be grammatically correct.

× Actually I'm on a diet right now, so recently I'm not eating snacks but when I eating when I eat snacks I often eat 3:00 PM.

✓ Actually I'm on a diet right now, so recently I'm not eating snacks but when I eat snacks I often eat at 3:00 PM.

The time expression '3:00 PM' requires the preposition 'at' to indicate the specific time when the action happens.

× Normally I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks 'cause all I often eat snot potato chips or cake for snacks.

✓ Normally I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks because I often eat some potato chips or cake for snacks.

The word 'snot' is a typo and should be 'some' to indicate an unspecified quantity. Also, 'cause' is informal; 'because' is more appropriate in this context.

× But when we eat first flurries for snacks it is good for health.

✓ But when I eat fruit flurries for snacks, it is good for health.

The pronoun 'we' is inconsistent with the rest of the answer which is in first person singular 'I'. Also, 'first flurries' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'fruit flurries' or 'fruit' is more appropriate. A comma is needed after the introductory clause.

× When I was a child I often I used to eat snacks but my mother considered my hour healthy so I I used to I often used to eat fruits or healthy snacks.

✓ When I was a child, I often used to eat snacks but my mother considered my diet healthy so I often used to eat fruits or healthy snacks.

The sentence has redundant phrases like 'I often I used to' and 'I I used to I often used to'. These should be simplified to 'I often used to'. Also, 'my hour healthy' is incorrect; it should be 'my diet healthy'. A comma is needed after 'When I was a child'.

× When I was a child I often I used to eat snacks but my mother considered my hour healthy so I I used to I often used to eat fruits or healthy snacks.

✓ When I was a child, I often used to eat snacks but my mother considered my diet healthy so I often used to eat fruits or healthy snacks.

Repeated pronouns 'I' are unnecessary and cause confusion. They should be removed for clarity and correctness.

× If I don't have to think about my healthy, I would prefer to eat cheesecakes and potato chips.

✓ If I don't have to think about my health, I would prefer to eat cheesecakes and potato chips.

The word 'healthy' is an adjective, but here a noun is needed to refer to the state of being healthy, which is 'health'.