Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'eat' multiple times, vary your vocabulary and clarify your reasons more clearly.

Example: I usually eat snacks in the morning because eating them later in the day, such as in the afternoon or at midnight, makes me feel dizzy and sleepy. Therefore, I try to avoid snacking at those times to maintain my energy levels.

Suggestion: Your response is relevant but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organise your ideas logically using linking words and improve grammar. Also, avoid vague phrases and be more specific about how snacks affect you.

Example: I don't think eating snacks is healthy, especially for older people. When I eat snacks, I tend to feel lazy and find it hard to concentrate on important tasks, which affects my focus and productivity.

Suggestion: Your answer provides some details but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Use past tense correctly and clarify your ideas. Also, link your sentences to make the answer more coherent.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks like chocolate and cookies when I was young. Around the age of 10, my father used to ride his bicycle to the convenience store to buy snacks for me, which helped me relieve stress from my busy school life.

Suggestion: Your answer is understandable but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid awkward phrasing and improve sentence structure. Provide specific examples of healthy snacks you enjoy.

Example: I prefer to eat healthy snacks, which are low in sugar and free from unhealthy ingredients. For example, I often choose nuts or fruit snacks that are labelled as healthy.

× I eat snacks in the morning because I don't want to increase my blood sugar rate.

✓ I eat snacks in the morning because I don't want to increase my blood sugar level.

The phrase 'blood sugar rate' is incorrect; the correct term is 'blood sugar level' when referring to the concentration of sugar in the blood.

× If I eat in midnight or in afternoon, I will feel very dizzy and want to sleep.

✓ If I eat at midnight or in the afternoon, I will feel very dizzy and want to sleep.

The correct preposition for specific times like 'midnight' is 'at', and for parts of the day like 'afternoon' is 'in the afternoon'. Also, 'the' is needed before 'afternoon'.

× So I started to avoid to eat at that time.

✓ So I started to avoid eating at that time.

After 'avoid', the verb should be in the gerund form (-ing), not the infinitive with 'to'.

× No it's not healthy for old people to eat snacks.

✓ No, it's not healthy for old people to eat snacks.

A comma is needed after 'No' to separate the interjection from the rest of the sentence for clarity.

× I think for me like when I eat snacks I will be more lazy and more couldn't do the things I need to finish.

✓ I think for me, when I eat snacks, I become lazier and cannot do the things I need to finish.

The phrase 'more lazy' should be 'lazier' (comparative adjective). 'More couldn't do' is incorrect; it should be 'cannot do'. Also, commas are needed for clarity.

× Like cannot focus on one major problem it affect on people's mind and people's thinking and people attention.

✓ For example, I cannot focus on one major problem; it affects people's minds, thinking, and attention.

The original sentence lacks a subject and proper verb agreement. 'Affect' should be 'affects' to agree with singular subject. Also, 'people's mind' should be plural 'minds' and the sentence needs clearer structure.

× So I don't think it is.

✓ So I don't think it is healthy.

The sentence is incomplete and needs an object to clarify what 'it' refers to.

× Definitely I eat like chocolate or cookers.

✓ Definitely, I ate things like chocolate or cookies.

The question is about past habits, so the past tense 'ate' should be used. Also, 'cookers' is incorrect; the correct word is 'cookies'.

× When I was here when I around 10 years old, my father always drove a bicycle to the convenience store to bought some cookies and snacks for release.

✓ When I was around 10 years old, my father always rode a bicycle to the convenience store to buy some cookies and snacks to relieve my stress.

The sentence has redundant 'when' and incorrect verb forms: 'drove a bicycle' should be 'rode a bicycle', and 'bought' should be 'buy' after 'to'. Also, 'for release' is unclear; 'to relieve my stress' is appropriate.

× My stress and the whole busy school.

✓ Because of my stress and the busy school schedule.

The original fragment is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'Because of' and 'schedule' clarifies the meaning.

× Rather, I like to eat some healthy snack.

✓ Rather, I like to eat some healthy snacks.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' when preceded by 'some'.

× For healthy snack, it means that it didn't have the higher sugar and don't have food like I will eat some snacks which is labeled as healthy.

✓ For healthy snacks, it means that they don't have high sugar and don't contain unhealthy ingredients. I eat snacks that are labeled as healthy.

The sentence has tense inconsistency ('didn't have' should be 'don't have'), incorrect article usage ('the higher sugar' should be 'high sugar'), and awkward phrasing. Also, 'food like' is unclear and replaced with 'unhealthy ingredients' for clarity.