Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta efektif. Hindari pengulangan dan pastikan kalimat tidak terlalu panjang. Misalnya, gunakan 'I usually snack during my breaks at work, especially when I feel a bit hungry or dizzy. Also, I enjoy eating snacks when I'm with my friends because it makes our time together more enjoyable.'

Example: I usually snack during my breaks at work, especially when I feel a bit hungry or dizzy. Also, I enjoy eating snacks when I'm with my friends because it makes our time together more enjoyable.

Suggestion: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat agar jawaban lebih koheren. Contohnya, 'I think it depends on the type of snacks we eat. If I choose fruits, it's healthier; however, I often eat sugary snacks, which are not very healthy.'

Example: I think it depends on the type of snacks we eat. If I choose fruits, it's healthier; however, I often eat sugary snacks, which are not very healthy.

Suggestion: Jawaban sudah cukup baik, tapi bisa diperluas dengan detail tambahan menggunakan kata penghubung. Misalnya, 'Not really, because my parents were strict about sweet snacks, so I rarely had the chance to eat them.'

Example: Not really, because my parents were strict about sweet snacks, so I rarely had the chance to eat them.

Suggestion: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan kejelasan kalimat. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih terstruktur dan jelas, misalnya, 'I love sugary snacks like chocolate, candy, and cake, but I try not to eat them too often because they can hurt my health.'

Example: I love sugary snacks like chocolate, candy, and cake, but I try not to eat them too often because they can hurt my health.

× I usually snacking during my break at works, especially when I am a little bit hungry or dizzy, and also I love to eat snacks when I'm hanging out with my friends because it makes the time more enjoyable with them.

✓ I usually snack during my break at work, especially when I am a little bit hungry or dizzy, and also I love to eat snacks when I'm hanging out with my friends because it makes the time more enjoyable with them.

The verb 'snacking' is incorrectly used here; the correct form is the base verb 'snack' after 'usually' to indicate habitual action. Also, 'works' should be singular 'work' as it refers to the place of employment.

× I usually snacking during my break at works, especially when I am a little bit hungry or dizzy, and also I love to eat snacks when I'm hanging out with my friends because it makes the time more enjoyable with them.

✓ I usually snack during my break at work, especially when I am a little bit hungry or dizzy, and also I love to eat snacks when I'm hanging out with my friends because it makes the time more enjoyable with them.

The preposition 'at works' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'at work' to indicate the place where the action happens.

× I think it depends what are the snacks that we eat. If I choose to eat fruit as a snack it can be healthier but most of the time I eat sugar so it's not that healthy when it comes with.

✓ I think it depends on what snacks we eat. If I choose to eat fruit as a snack, it can be healthier, but most of the time I eat sugary snacks, so it's not that healthy.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'depends what are the snacks' should be 'depends on what snacks'. Also, 'when it comes with' is incomplete and unclear, so it is corrected to a clearer expression. Commas are added for clarity.

× Not really because my parents were strict about the sweet snacks.

✓ Not really, because my parents were strict about sweet snacks.

The sentence is mostly correct, but adding a comma after 'Not really' improves readability. 'The sweet snacks' is better as 'sweet snacks' without 'the' for general reference.

× I love to eat some sugary snacks, for example chocolate, candy and cake but I hurt but I'm not eating that for that often.

✓ I love to eat some sugary snacks, for example chocolate, candy, and cake, but I get hurt, so I don't eat them that often.

The phrase 'I hurt but I'm not eating that for that often' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It is corrected to 'I get hurt, so I don't eat them that often' to convey the intended meaning clearly. Commas are added for proper sentence structure.