Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to be more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you could say: "I usually eat snacks around 10 pm, just before bedtime. However, I know it's not a very healthy habit."

Example: I usually have snacks around 10 pm, just before I go to bed. However, I realise this isn't very healthy.

Suggestion: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and lacks coherence. Use correct verb forms and linking words to improve clarity. For example, say: "To be honest, definitely not. Sometimes I eat too many snacks, and I feel a bit guilty before I go to sleep."

Example: To be honest, definitely not. Sometimes I eat too many snacks, and I feel a bit guilty before I go to sleep.

Suggestion: Your answer provides good content but has grammar errors and some unclear phrasing. Use past tense consistently and link ideas clearly. For example: "Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my father worked in a food manufacturing company. He would often bring home large portions of snacks, which we finished in just a few days."

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my father worked in a food manufacturing company. He would often bring home large portions of snacks, which we finished in just a few days.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some awkward phrases. Try to be more precise and avoid unnecessary fillers. Also, use linking words to connect ideas. For example: "My favourite snack is a cheesy puff called Super Ring. It's quite popular, and even Lisa from the K-pop group Blackpink likes it."

Example: My favourite snack is a cheesy puff called Super Ring. It's quite popular, and even Lisa from the K-pop group Blackpink likes it.

× I usually eat snacks at night time which is around before bedtime, so around 10:00 in at night, but I guess it's not really a healthy habit.

✓ I usually eat snacks at night time, which is around before bedtime, so around 10:00 at night, but I guess it's not really a healthy habit.

The phrase 'in at night' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate time of day is 'at night'. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the clauses properly.

× I feels like I'm eating too much snacks at some time and before I slept I was kind of feels a bit guilty.

✓ I feel like I'm eating too many snacks sometimes and before I sleep I kind of feel a bit guilty.

The verb 'feels' does not agree with the subject 'I'; it should be 'feel'. 'Too much snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is countable, so 'too many snacks' is correct. 'At some time' is better expressed as 'sometimes'. 'Before I slept' should be 'before I sleep' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Was kind of feels' is incorrect; it should be 'kind of feel'.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because my my father was working in a food manufacturing company.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my father was working in a food manufacturing company.

The verb 'eat' should be in the past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame 'when I was young'. Also, 'my my' is a repetition and should be corrected to 'my'.

× So often times he would bring back a few big portion of uh snacks and will actually have them finish in just few days.

✓ So often times he would bring back a few big portions of snacks and we would actually finish them in just a few days.

'Portion' should be plural 'portions' to agree with 'a few'. 'Will actually have them finish' is incorrect; it should be 'we would actually finish them' to correctly express habitual past action. Also, 'in just few days' needs the article 'a' before 'few'.

× My favorite snacks would be a cheese fat word snacks called super Ring and it is very famous as Lisa from the blackpink K pop team also likes it a lot.

✓ My favorite snack would be a cheesy, fat-flavoured snack called Super Ring, and it is very famous because Lisa from the Blackpink K-pop team also likes it a lot.

'Cheese fat word snacks' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'cheesy, fat-flavoured snack'. 'Snacks' should be singular 'snack' to match 'a'. 'Very famous as' is incorrect; it should be 'very famous because'. Proper nouns like 'Super Ring', 'Blackpink', and 'K-pop' should be capitalised.