Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit long and somewhat repetitive. Try to be more concise and use clearer sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy like "around afternoon time" and "around afternoon." Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I have my meals on time. Therefore, I feel a bit hungry and prefer healthy snacks to keep me energized until dinner.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete, especially the ending "but I wouldn't." Make sure to finish your thoughts. Also, use more precise vocabulary and avoid vague phrases like "something that has a beneficial value."

Example: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy if they are in the right portion and contain nutrients like protein, vitamins, or minerals. These help with digestion and overall health.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by using simpler and more natural expressions. For example, "indulged in snacking" and "deleterious habits" sound formal and less natural in speaking. Also, clarify "concise food" which is unclear.

Example: Yes, I used to snack a lot as a child, mostly junk food. However, over the years, I have changed my habits and now eat healthier snacks.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains some grammatical errors, such as "balanced night" instead of "balanced diet." Try to organize your answer clearly and use correct vocabulary. Also, avoid unnecessary details that do not directly answer the question.

Example: In the past year, I have focused on my diet to lose weight. Therefore, I prefer healthy snacks like nuts and seeds that are high in protein.

× I usually prefer having nibbled around afternoon time because I do my lunch and other meals in time.

✓ I usually prefer having a nibble around afternoon time because I eat my lunch and other meals on time.

The phrase 'having nibbled' is incorrect because 'nibbled' is the past tense or past participle form of the verb 'nibble'. After 'prefer having', the correct form is the gerund 'nibbling' or a noun like 'a nibble'. Also, 'do my lunch' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'eat'. Additionally, 'in time' should be 'on time' to indicate punctuality.

× So I grab some thing healthy to fill my stomach and that way it also provides me with sufficient energy for me to wait till the dinner time which is usually around.

✓ So I grab something healthy to fill my stomach and that way it also provides me with sufficient energy for me to wait till dinner time, which is usually around then.

The phrase 'some thing' should be one word 'something'. Also, 'the dinner time' is better as 'dinner time' without 'the' because it refers to a general time of day. Adding 'then' clarifies the timing.

× Yes, I feel like it's healthy for us to have nibbles if it is of right proportion and with and something that has a beneficial value.

✓ Yes, I feel like it's healthy for us to have nibbles if they are in the right proportion and include something that has beneficial value.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'nibbles', which is plural, so 'they' should be used. Also, 'of right proportion' should be 'in the right proportion'. The phrase 'with and something' is incorrect and should be 'include something'.

× For instance, having something that is rich in protein or vitamins or minerals can be helpful and it is also essential for our gut and digestion, but I wouldn't.

✓ For instance, having something that is rich in protein, vitamins, or minerals can be helpful and is also essential for our gut and digestion, but I wouldn't.

The conjunction 'or' is repeated unnecessarily; listing items with commas and a final 'or' is clearer. Also, 'but I wouldn't' is incomplete and unclear; it should be completed or omitted for clarity.

× Yes, as far as I remember as a child I was indulged in snacking.

✓ Yes, as far as I remember, as a child I indulged in snacking.

The phrase 'was indulged' is passive and incorrect here; the correct active past tense is 'indulged'. Also, a comma after 'remember' improves readability.

× But over the years I have worked on my deleterious habits and eat more nutritious and concise food lately.

✓ But over the years I have worked on my harmful habits and have been eating more nutritious and wholesome food lately.

'Deleterious' is a formal adjective not commonly used in speech; 'harmful' is more natural. 'Concise' is incorrect for food; 'wholesome' or 'healthy' is appropriate. Also, 'eat' should be 'have been eating' to match 'lately' indicating recent continuous action.

× For the past one year I've actually been focusing on my diet because I wanted to reduce my weight for which I am having a balanced night which is full of protein and so I prefer having nuts and other forms of seed for snacks lately.

✓ For the past year, I've actually been focusing on my diet because I want to reduce my weight, for which I am having a balanced dinner that is full of protein, and so I prefer having nuts and other forms of seeds for snacks lately.

'Wanted' should be 'want' to maintain present relevance. 'Balanced night' is incorrect; it should be 'balanced dinner'. 'Forms of seed' should be plural 'forms of seeds'. Adding commas improves clarity.