Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: I usually eat snacks at different times of the day. For example, I have cup noodles at night, but in the afternoon, I prefer potato chips or similar snacks. The type of snack I choose depends on the time of day.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific reasons. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary relevant to health and food.

Example: I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me because I usually choose unhealthy options like potato chips and sausages. Although there are healthy snacks available, I don't prefer them since I find them less tasty.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific details and use linking words to make your response coherent and logical.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I had a healthy body and didn't worry about the effects. However, I believe adults should eat fewer snacks as they can be harmful over time.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by correcting grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your preferences.

Example: I like eating potato chips because they come in various flavours, such as tomato and original. They are tasty, convenient, and I can choose whichever flavour I prefer whenever I want a snack.

× And I want to eat snacks, I will just eat the snack but in all the time morning, afternoon or at night I will eat some snack.

✓ When I want to eat snacks, I just eat some, but at any time—morning, afternoon, or night—I will eat some snack.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear structure and awkward phrasing. Starting with 'And' is unnecessary and the sentence lacks proper connectors. The correction improves clarity by restructuring the sentence and using appropriate conjunctions and punctuation.

× But the snack in different time is different.

✓ But the snacks at different times are different.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to different types of snacks. Also, 'in different time' is incorrect; it should be 'at different times' to indicate different periods.

× Like I will have a cup noodle at night but in the afternoon I will just eat some potato chips or some.

✓ For example, I will have a cup of noodles at night, but in the afternoon I will just eat some potato chips or something similar.

The phrase 'a cup noodle' is incorrect; it should be 'a cup of noodles'. Also, 'or some' is incomplete and unclear; 'or something similar' clarifies the meaning.

× No, because when I eat snacks I would prefer some snack I'm healthy, for example potato chips or sausages and these are very unhealthy.

✓ No, because when I eat snacks, I prefer snacks that are unhealthy, for example, potato chips or sausages, and these are very unhealthy.

The original sentence is confusing and contains grammatical errors. 'I would prefer some snack I'm healthy' is incorrect and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning and improves sentence flow.

× Although some there are some healthy snacks but I don't prefer them because healthy snacks are not delicious.

✓ Although there are some healthy snacks, I don't prefer them because healthy snacks are not delicious.

The phrase 'Although some there are some' is redundant and incorrect. Removing the extra 'some' and adjusting the sentence improves clarity and grammar.

× Yes I of course I have a healthy bodies and I don't care when I am eating snacks because eating snacks may be harmful to your body.

✓ Yes, of course, I have a healthy body and I don't care when I am eating snacks because eating snacks may be harmful to your body.

'Bodies' should be singular 'body' because it refers to the speaker's own body. Also, the sentence needs commas for clarity.

× When you are an adult you cannot eat many snacks but when you are a teenager or Just cause 18 you can eat very much snacks.

✓ When you are an adult, you cannot eat many snacks, but when you are a teenager or just about 18, you can eat a lot of snacks.

'Just cause 18' is incorrect; it should be 'just about 18'. Also, 'very much snacks' is incorrect; 'a lot of snacks' is the correct quantifier. Commas are added for clarity.

× I like to eat some potato chips because potato chips have varieties of different flavors like the tomatoes or just the original 1 and it's very tasty for me and I can choose whenever I want to eat and it's very easy to.

✓ I like to eat potato chips because they come in various flavors like tomato or just the original, and they are very tasty to me. I can choose whenever I want to eat, and it's very easy.

'Varieties of different flavors' is awkward; 'various flavors' is better. 'The tomatoes' should be 'tomato'. 'Original 1' is incorrect; 'original' suffices. The sentence is long and run-on; breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity.