Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“they were with added sugars”应为“they contain added sugars”，且句子结构较为复杂，建议简化句子并注意时态一致性。此外，回答中缺少连接词，导致表达不够连贯。

Example: I don't often eat snacks now because they contain added sugars and are not very healthy. However, when I feel stressed, I sometimes eat chocolates to feel better.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误，如“made me gain weight”应为“make me gain weight”，且句子较长且缺少连接词，建议分句并使用连接词使表达更流畅。同时，词汇使用较简单，可以尝试使用更丰富的表达。

Example: I don't think eating too many snacks is healthy because they increase my calorie intake and can make me gain weight. However, eating a small amount occasionally is fine.

Suggestion: 回答较为清晰，但时态使用不够准确，“I remembered”应为“I remember”或“I used to remember”。此外，可以增加连接词使句子更连贯。

Example: No, I didn't. I remember my mom didn't allow me to eat snacks like cookies or cakes because she said they were processed foods and unhealthy.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“under big pressure”应为“under a lot of pressure”，“Chocolates have high calorie”应为“Chocolates are high in calories”。此外，句子结构简单，缺少连接词，建议使用更自然的表达和丰富的词汇。

Example: When I am under a lot of pressure, I like to eat chocolates. They are high in calories and give me energy to keep going.

× I don't often eat snacks now since they were with added sugars and from my perspective they are not very healthy, but when I feel when I under pressure I will eat some chocolates.

✓ I don't often eat snacks now since they have added sugars and from my perspective they are not very healthy, but when I feel under pressure I will eat some chocolates.

这里的“were”用错了时态，应该用现在完成时态“have”，因为指的是现在零食中含有添加糖。

× but when I feel when I under pressure I will eat some chocolates.

✓ but when I feel under pressure I will eat some chocolates.

“when I feel when I under pressure”中多余了一个“when”，应去掉。

× I do not think it is healthy for me to eat too much snacks since they will raise my calorie intake and made me gain weight and I can't keep slim but if I eat a few I think that's OK.

✓ I do not think it is healthy for me to eat too many snacks since they will raise my calorie intake and make me gain weight and I can't keep slim but if I eat a few I think that's OK.

“too much snacks”中“much”用于不可数名词，零食是可数名词，应使用“too many”。

× since they will raise my calorie intake and made me gain weight

✓ since they will raise my calorie intake and make me gain weight

“made”应与“will”连用保持一致，改为“make”。

× No, I didn't. I remembered that my mom didn't allow me to eat snacks, including cookies or cakes.

✓ No, I didn't. I remember that my mom didn't allow me to eat snacks, including cookies or cakes.

“remembered”是过去时，但这里表达的是现在回忆的事实，应使用一般现在时“remember”。

× She told me that they were processed food and they are not healthy.

✓ She told me that they were processed food and they were not healthy.

前半句是过去时，后半句应保持时态一致，改为过去时“were”。

× Chocolates have high calorie.

✓ Chocolate has high calories.

“Chocolates”复数形式通常指巧克力制品，表达整体时用不可数名词“Chocolate”，且“calorie”应为复数“calories”。

× It can give me many energy and push me to go further.

✓ It can give me a lot of energy and push me to go further.

“many energy”错误，energy是不可数名词，应使用“a lot of energy”。