Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific examples and reasons using linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, such as candy, chocolate, and spicy foods. I enjoy these snacks because they help me feel joyful and relaxed after a busy day.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Make sure to finish your sentences and organise your ideas logically. Use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and provide specific reasons to support your opinion.

Example: I think eating a small amount of snacks like candy or chocolate can be healthy because it helps reduce mental stress. However, eating too many snacks can be unhealthy and may cause weight gain.

Suggestion: Use the past tense consistently when talking about the past. Also, avoid repetition and clarify your ideas with specific details. Linking words like 'because' and 'so' are good but try to use them correctly and avoid redundancy.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I felt stressed from my studies. Eating snacks helped me to relax and reduce pressure during that time.

Suggestion: Avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'And'. Use correct vocabulary ('snack' instead of 'snake'). Try to be concise and avoid repeating words. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples and reasons using linking words.

Example: I like to eat snacks such as chocolate, candy, and spicy foods because they help me feel relaxed and joyful when I am stressed.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because nowadays I have high pressure in my study life and and my academic life.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because nowadays I have high pressure in my study life and my academic life.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Often eat' should be in the past tense 'often ate' to match 'when I was young'. This maintains consistent tense usage.

× So I need to eat snakes to reduce my pressure.

✓ So I need to eat snacks to reduce my pressure.

The word 'snakes' is a misspelling of 'snacks'. Using 'snakes' changes the meaning entirely. Correct spelling is necessary for clarity.

× And I like snake, for example, chocolate candy or spicy food because because it can reduce my my pressure.

✓ And I like snacks, for example, chocolate, candy, or spicy food because it can reduce my pressure.

'Snake' should be plural 'snacks' to refer to various types of food. Also, 'chocolate candy' is better separated into 'chocolate' and 'candy' for clarity.

× I will feel relaxed and joyful and happiness.

✓ I will feel relaxed, joyful, and happy.

'Happiness' is a noun, but the sentence requires an adjective to describe feelings. 'Happy' is the correct adjective form to use here.