Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như cách dùng từ chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: I usually eat snacks when I watch movies or hang out with friends at night. Sometimes, if I skip lunch or dinner, I have snacks for supper. However, I rarely eat snacks at home because my mom doesn't allow it.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp, ví dụ như từ 'slavery' không đúng ngữ cảnh. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu trả lời rõ ràng, có cấu trúc hợp lý.

Example: No, I don't think snacks are healthy. Even if they are made with good ingredients and proper hygiene, eating too many snacks can harm the stomach and liver, and may cause weight gain.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng thì quá khứ một cách chính xác. Câu trả lời nên mạch lạc hơn và có liên kết giữa các câu để người nghe dễ hiểu.

Example: When I was a child, I often ate sweet snacks. My favorites were dried fruits and durian waffles, which I bought from a local store in my hometown.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy tránh dùng các cụm từ không tự nhiên như 'if you as well as feel my hungry stomachs'.

Example: I prefer salty snacks over sweet ones. For example, I like Lay's potato chips and sometimes homemade chips. Although they are not very healthy, I eat them when I feel hungry.

× I fancy eating snacks while watching movies, hanging out with friends, night talk.

✓ I fancy eating snacks while watching movies, hanging out with friends, and having night talks.

The phrase 'night talk' is incorrect as it lacks the gerund form and conjunction. It should be 'having night talks' to match the parallel structure and correct verb form.

× Sometimes I skip lunch or dinner so I might have snacks for supper.

✓ Sometimes I skip lunch or dinner, so I might have snacks instead of supper.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used here. 'Instead of' is more appropriate to indicate replacement of supper with snacks.

× However, I rarely enjoy snacks at home because my mom really doesn't allow it in the household.

✓ However, I rarely enjoy snacks at home because my mom really doesn't allow them in the household.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'snacks'. It should be 'them' to agree in number.

× Despite slavery, good ingredients and hygiene standards, snacks are still harmful for our stomach, liver and easily lead to overweight.

✓ Despite strict regulations, good ingredients, and hygiene standards, snacks are still harmful to our stomach, liver, and can easily lead to overweight.

The word 'slavery' is incorrect and likely a mistranslation. It should be 'strict regulations' or similar. Also, conjunctions and commas are adjusted for clarity.

× snacks are still harmful for our stomach, liver and easily lead to overweight.

✓ snacks are still harmful to our stomach and liver and can easily lead to being overweight.

The preposition 'for' should be 'to' when indicating harm. Also, 'overweight' needs to be preceded by 'being' to form a correct phrase.

× Dating back to my childhood, sweet chips were my favorite.

✓ Dating back to my childhood, sweet chips had been my favorite.

To indicate a past preference continuing up to a point in the past, past perfect tense 'had been' is more appropriate.

× So I usually have sweet chips in my childhood like baby tree dried fruit and durian waffle.

✓ So I usually had sweet chips in my childhood like baby tree dried fruit and durian waffle.

The phrase refers to past habitual action, so past tense 'had' should be used instead of present tense 'have'.

× Those were bought at local store in my hometown.

✓ Those were bought at a local store in my hometown.

The singular noun 'store' requires an article 'a' before it.

× I think that between sweet and salty snacks, I prefer the salty one.

✓ I think that between sweet and salty snacks, I prefer the salty ones.

Since 'snacks' is plural, the pronoun should be plural 'ones' to agree in number.

× Those are not good for health but if you as well as feel my hungry stomachs anyway.

✓ Those are not good for health, but if you also feel my hungry stomach anyway.

The phrase is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'You as well as feel my hungry stomachs' is incorrect; it should be 'you also feel my hungry stomach' with singular 'stomach'.