Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding incomplete sentences and redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. For example, start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

Example: I usually eat snacks when I feel bored or have free time because I crave something tasty. For example, I like to eat pizza and French fries, and I often drink milk tea with them.

Suggestion: Improve your answer by using complete sentences and clearer explanations. Use linking words such as 'however' or 'but' to contrast ideas. Also, provide specific examples and explain why some snacks are healthy or unhealthy.

Example: I think eating snacks can be healthy or unhealthy depending on the type of food. For example, eating junk food with preservatives is unhealthy, but eating vegetables as snacks is good for your body.

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural by using past tense consistently and avoiding incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'so' or 'because' to explain reasons clearly. Also, be specific about the snacks you liked.

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because if I had extra money, I would buy junk food and candies from the store to enjoy as my snacks.

Suggestion: Try to organize your answer better by stating your preference clearly and avoiding contradictory statements. Use linking words like 'because' to explain your opinion and avoid informal expressions like 'Oh my God'.

Example: The snacks I like to eat depend on my mood. Sometimes I prefer healthy snacks, but I also enjoy burgers because they contain vegetables, meat, and bread, which makes them healthy for me.

× I usually eat snacks when I get bored and.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I get bored.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which creates an incomplete sentence. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× I also eat snaps when.

✓ I also eat snacks when I have free time.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'I have free time' completes the thought and corrects the sentence structure.

× I have free time if I have cravings that is why I eat my favorite snacks like pizza and French fries with the with drinks milk tea.

✓ If I have free time and cravings, that is why I eat my favorite snacks like pizza and French fries with drinks like milk tea.

The original sentence has pronoun and conjunction misuse causing confusion. Reordering and clarifying pronouns and conjunctions improves clarity and grammar.

× I think eating snacks, it's healthy for me, but it's depends on the food that you are going to eat.

✓ I think eating snacks is healthy for me, but it depends on the food that you eat.

The sentence has unnecessary commas and incorrect verb form 'it's depends'. Removing the comma and correcting to 'it depends' fixes the sentence.

× For example, you're going to eat junk foods, preservative foods for you to have snacks.

✓ For example, if you eat junk food or preserved foods as snacks.

The sentence is awkward and uses incorrect pronouns and phrasing. Rephrasing improves clarity and grammar.

× So that is one of the thing that is unhealthy for your body and.

✓ So that is one of the things that is unhealthy for your body.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with 'one of the'. Also, the sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which should be removed.

× If you eat like veggies.

✓ If you eat vegetables, it is healthier.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young because when my mother asked me to buy in the store, if there is a change or extra money, I am going to buy some snacks, for example junk foods and candies so that.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because when my mother asked me to buy at the store, if there was change or extra money, I would buy some snacks, for example junk food and candies.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Changing 'eat' to 'ate', 'is' to 'was', and 'am going to' to 'would' corrects the tense consistency.

× Food I bought is for my snacks.

✓ The food I bought was for my snacks.

The sentence lacks proper verb tense and article usage. Adding 'The' and changing 'is' to 'was' corrects the sentence.

× The snacks that I like to eat, it's depend on my mood because sometimes I like healthy snacks, for examples burger.

✓ The snacks that I like to eat depend on my mood because sometimes I like healthy snacks, for example, burgers.

'It's depend' is incorrect; it should be 'depend'. Also, 'for examples burger' should be 'for example, burgers' to correct pronoun and plural usage.

× But burger is not healthy.

✓ But burgers are not healthy.

'Burger' should be plural 'burgers' to match general statement, and verb should be plural 'are'.

× But for me is healthy.

✓ But for me, it is healthy.

The sentence is missing the subject 'it' and a comma after 'me' for clarity.

× Oh my God, it's a combination of veggies, meat and bread.

✓ Oh my God, it is a combination of vegetables, meat, and bread.

'Veggies' is informal; 'vegetables' is more appropriate. Also, adding commas improves clarity.