Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có cấu trúc rõ ràng, tuy nhiên bạn nên chú ý đến việc sử dụng số nhiều và số ít cho đúng (ví dụ: "completing task" nên là "completing tasks"). Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như "usually" nhiều lần.

Example: I usually eat snacks at night after finishing my work because I want to reward myself for completing tasks successfully. For instance, I enjoy having my favorite snack while watching TV. However, recently, I've been trying to cut down this habit since I want to stay healthier.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "essential nutritions" nên là "essential nutrients", "hunger at Bay" nên là "hunger at bay" (viết thường). Ngoài ra, câu "snacks like popcorn is not good" nên dùng số nhiều "are not good". Bạn cũng nên tránh câu bị ngắt quãng không hoàn chỉnh như "because."

Example: Well, I think it depends on the type of snack. For example, healthy snacks like nuts, bananas, and apples are very good because they provide essential nutrients and help to keep hunger at bay. However, snacks like popcorn are not very healthy and should be eaten in moderation.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "snack used to be" nên là "snacks used to be", "I have found memories" nên là "I have fond memories", "good behave" nên là "good behavior". Ngoài ra, câu trả lời có thể rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn bằng cách sử dụng các từ nối và cấu trúc câu phù hợp.

Example: Yes, snacks used to be an irreplaceable part of my childhood. I have fond memories of saving my pocket money to buy my favorite snacks, such as candies or rice cakes, and sharing them with my friends after school. Moreover, my mother often bought snacks for me as a reward for my good behavior.

Suggestion: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ, ví dụ "essential nutritions from my body" nên là "essential nutrients for my body", "hunger at Bay" nên là "hunger at bay", "popcorn's" nên là "popcorn" không có dấu 's'. Ngoài ra, câu cuối nên được nói dưới dạng chủ động và rõ ràng hơn. Bạn cũng nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: Well, I like eating healthy snacks such as fruits like bananas and apples, as well as nuts. I think they provide essential nutrients for my body and help keep my hunger at bay between meals. Therefore, I try to avoid unhealthy snacks like popcorn as much as possible.

× I want to reward myself for completing task successfully.

✓ I want to reward myself for completing tasks successfully.

The word 'task' should be plural 'tasks' because it refers to multiple tasks in general, not a single task. In English, when talking about tasks in general, the plural form is used.

× They provide essential nutritions and help to keep hunger at Bay.

✓ They provide essential nutrition and help to keep hunger at bay.

The word 'nutritions' is incorrect because 'nutrition' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized. Also, 'Bay' should be lowercase 'bay' as it is not a proper noun here.

× However, snacks like popcorn is not good and should be eaten in moderation.

✓ However, snacks like popcorn are not good and should be eaten in moderation.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× Yes, snack used to be an irreplaceable part of my childhood.

✓ Yes, snacks used to be an irreplaceable part of my childhood.

The noun 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to snacks in general during childhood.

× I have found memories of saving my pocket money to buy my favorite snacks, for example for candies or rice cake, and share them with my friends after school.

✓ I have fond memories of saving my pocket money to buy my favorite snacks, for example candies or rice cakes, and share them with my friends after school.

The phrase 'found memories' is incorrect; it should be 'fond memories'. Also, 'candies' is acceptable but 'rice cake' should be plural 'rice cakes' to match the plural context.

× Moreover, my mother used to buy snacks for me as a reward for my good behave.

✓ Moreover, my mother used to buy snacks for me as a reward for my good behavior.

The word 'behave' is a verb; the correct noun form here is 'behavior' to describe conduct.

× Try to avoid unhealthy snacks such as popcorn's as much as possible.

✓ Try to avoid unhealthy snacks such as popcorn as much as possible.

The word 'popcorn's' is incorrect; 'popcorn' is an uncountable noun and should not have a possessive apostrophe or be pluralized.