Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit long and contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'Oh my died'. Try to keep your answer concise and clear, directly answering the question with proper sentence structure. Also, avoid unnecessary expressions and focus on clarity.

Example: I usually do not eat snacks now because my parents encourage me to eat healthy food. However, if I get a chance when I am alone at home, I might eat some snacks.

Suggestion: There are some pronunciation and word choice errors, such as 'snakes' instead of 'snacks' and awkward phrasing like 'exploit your daily food consuming habits'. Try to use clear and accurate vocabulary and explain your ideas logically with linking words.

Example: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because it can disrupt your regular eating habits and may lead to obesity and other health problems.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but fragmented. Try to combine short sentences into coherent ones using linking words. Also, use correct grammar and avoid sentence fragments.

Example: Yes, when I was in the 5th grade, I often ate snacks like samosas, which are traditional Indian dishes made of refined flour filled with potatoes and fried in hot oil.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains incomplete sentences and confusing phrases like 'burger should be begged'. Try to give a clear and complete answer with proper sentence structure and vocabulary relevant to the context.

Example: I like to eat healthy snacks that are not fried. For example, I enjoy eating grilled burgers instead of fried ones.

× For now I do not eat any snacks but if I get opportunity I will definitely eat when no one will be at my home as my mother and father are very strict.

✓ For now I do not eat any snacks but if I get an opportunity I will definitely eat when no one is at my home as my mother and father are very strict.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'will be' in the time clause 'when no one will be at my home'. In English, future tense is not used in time clauses introduced by 'when'; instead, the present tense is used. Also, the article 'an' is missing before 'opportunity'. The correct form is 'if I get an opportunity'.

× Oh my died. They always say me to eat healthy diet not snacks.

✓ Oh my God. They always tell me to eat a healthy diet, not snacks.

The phrase 'Oh my died' is incorrect; it should be 'Oh my God'. Also, 'say me' is incorrect; the verb 'say' does not take an indirect object without a preposition. The correct verb here is 'tell me'. Additionally, 'healthy diet' needs an article 'a' before it.

× No, as I am a fitness enthusiast, eating snakes can exploit your daily food consuming habits and can cause you obesity and overeating diseases.

✓ No, as I am a fitness enthusiast, eating snacks can disrupt your daily food consumption habits and can cause obesity and overeating-related diseases.

The word 'snakes' is a spelling error; it should be 'snacks'. The verb 'exploit' is incorrectly used; the correct verb is 'disrupt' to indicate disturbance. 'Food consuming habits' is awkward; 'food consumption habits' is better. 'Cause you obesity' is incorrect; 'cause obesity' is correct. 'Overeating diseases' is unclear; 'overeating-related diseases' is more precise.

× Yes, when I was in my 5th grade, I used to eat snacks such as samosa.

✓ Yes, when I was in my 5th grade, I used to eat snacks such as samosas.

The word 'samosa' should be plural 'samosas' because it refers to snacks in general, which are countable and plural here.

× It is an Indian traditional dish. Made-up of refined flour, potato filling. And fried it in a hot oil.

✓ It is a traditional Indian dish made up of refined flour and potato filling, and it is fried in hot oil.

The original sentences are fragmented and incomplete. 'Made-up of refined flour, potato filling.' is a fragment and should be combined with the previous sentence. 'And fried it in a hot oil.' is also a fragment and incorrectly structured. The corrected sentence combines these ideas into a complete, grammatically correct sentence.

× I love to eat snacks which are. Healthy and not fried.

✓ I love to eat snacks which are healthy and not fried.

The sentence is incorrectly split into two fragments. 'which are.' is incomplete and should be connected to the following phrase to form a complete sentence.

× The snacks which I love to eat. Our burger.

✓ The snack which I love to eat is a burger.

The original sentences are fragments and incorrectly structured. 'Our burger' is unclear and likely a typo for 'a burger'. The corrected sentence forms a complete sentence with subject and verb.

× Burger should not be fried, it should be begged.

✓ A burger should not be fried; it should be baked.

The word 'begged' is a spelling error; the correct word is 'baked'. Also, 'burger' needs an article 'a' before it. The two independent clauses should be separated properly, here by a semicolon.