Snacks— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more fluent and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your sentences clear and concise. For example, instead of repeating 'when', you can say 'I usually eat snacks while watching movies or reading, and sometimes when I'm hungry, I prefer snacks over heavy meals.'

Example: I usually eat snacks while watching movies or reading. Additionally, when I feel hungry between meals, I prefer having snacks instead of preparing heavy food.

Suggestion: Focus on organizing your ideas clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to contrast ideas and be specific about what kinds of snacks are healthy. For example, you can say, 'Generally, snacks are not very healthy; however, some snacks made from fruits like bananas or apples can be good for you.'

Example: Generally, snacks are not very healthy. However, some snacks made from fruits like bananas or apples can be good for you.

Suggestion: Avoid unclear phrases like 'Absolutely a lie' which confuse the meaning. Use complete sentences and linking words to explain your ideas clearly. For example, say 'Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially while watching movies or reading, because they helped me concentrate. I liked snacks such as popcorn, peanuts, chickpeas, fruits, and boiled vegetables.'

Example: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially while watching movies or reading, because they helped me concentrate. I liked snacks such as popcorn, peanuts, chickpeas, fruits, and boiled vegetables.

Suggestion: Try to combine your ideas into fewer sentences and use linking words to improve flow. Also, be specific about why you like these snacks. For example, 'I enjoy eating snacks like popcorn, chickpeas, fruits, peanuts, boiled eggs, and vegetables because they give me energy and help me focus on my work.'

Example: I enjoy eating snacks like popcorn, chickpeas, fruits, peanuts, boiled eggs, and vegetables because they give me energy and help me focus on my work.

× Most of the time I eat snacks whenever I watch any kind of movies or while reading.

✓ Most of the time, I eat snacks whenever I watch any kind of movie or while reading.

The phrase 'any kind of movies' is incorrect because 'kind' is singular and should be followed by a singular noun. Therefore, 'movie' is correct here. Also, a comma after 'Most of the time' improves sentence clarity.

× Apart from this sometime when I.

✓ Apart from this, sometimes when I...

The sentence is incomplete and 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' to indicate frequency. Also, a comma is needed after 'Apart from this' for clarity.

× When I'm hungry at that time also I prefer to eat snacks instead of making heavy food.

✓ When I'm hungry, I also prefer to eat snacks instead of making heavy food.

The phrase 'at that time also' is redundant and awkward. Placing a comma after 'When I'm hungry' and reordering improves clarity and flow.

× Instead of snacks we can eat heavy like vegetables or heavy food.

✓ Instead of snacks, we can eat heavy foods like vegetables or other heavy meals.

The phrase 'eat heavy like vegetables or heavy food' is unclear. 'Heavy' is an adjective and needs a noun to modify. 'Heavy foods' or 'heavy meals' is appropriate. Also, a comma after 'snacks' is needed.

× But sums next definitely alredy like if they make from banana apple.

✓ But some snacks are definitely healthy if they are made from bananas or apples.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'sums next' should be 'some snacks'; 'alredy' is misspelled; 'like if they make from banana apple' is ungrammatical. The corrected sentence clarifies meaning and corrects grammar.

× In that case is some snacks are healthy I think so.

✓ In that case, some snacks are healthy, I think.

The original sentence has redundant 'is' and awkward structure. Removing 'is' and adding commas improves clarity and correctness.

× Absolutely a lie.

✓ Absolutely not.

'Absolutely a lie' is an incomplete and incorrect response. 'Absolutely not' is a proper negative response to the question.

× I loved to eat snacks when I was young while watching movies or while reading because it helps me to concentrate more on my work.

✓ I loved to eat snacks when I was young while watching movies or reading because it helped me to concentrate more on my work.

The verb 'helps' should be in past tense 'helped' to match the past context. Also, 'while reading' is sufficient without repeating 'while'.

× I eat snacks like popcorn. Peanuts. Chickpeas. A fruits and boiled vegetables and so on.

✓ I ate snacks like popcorn, peanuts, chickpeas, fruits, boiled vegetables, and so on.

The original sentence is fragmented and inconsistent in tense. It should be a single sentence in past tense with proper punctuation and no article before 'fruits'.

× I love to eat snacks because it helps me to be more energetic and helps me to focus on any work more.

✓ I love to eat snacks because they help me to be more energetic and to focus better on any work.

The pronoun 'it' should be 'they' to agree with plural 'snacks'. Also, 'helps me to focus on any work more' is awkward; 'to focus better on any work' is clearer.

× I eat snacks for example. Popcorn, chick peas, fruits, peanuts, boiled eggs and boiled vegetables and so on.

✓ For example, I eat snacks like popcorn, chickpeas, fruits, peanuts, boiled eggs, and boiled vegetables.

The original sentence is fragmented. Starting with 'For example,' and combining into one sentence improves clarity and flow. Also, 'chick peas' should be 'chickpeas'.