Weather— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 자연스럽고 효과적이지만, 'tangible'이라는 단어는 날씨를 묘사할 때 적절하지 않습니다. 대신 'variable'이나 'distinct' 같은 단어를 사용하는 것이 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한, 문장 간 연결을 위해 'however' 같은 연결어를 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

Example: The weather in my city is quite variable throughout the year. For example, summers are usually very hot and humid, which can become uncomfortable at times. However, winters are extremely cold, often with strong winds that make it feel even colder.

Suggestion: 답변이 명확하고 구체적이며 연결어도 적절히 사용되었습니다. 다만, 'I usually prefer hot weather to extremely cold weather' 대신 'I prefer hot weather over cold weather'와 같이 더 간결한 표현을 사용할 수 있습니다.

Example: I prefer hot weather over cold weather because during winter I often feel very uncomfortable due to the low temperatures. For example, I tend to catch colds more easily and find it challenging to go outside. In contrast, hot weather allows me to enjoy outdoor activities.

Suggestion: 'breath'는 동사 형태이고, 여기서는 명사 'breathe'가 맞습니다. 또한 'come comfortably'는 어색한 표현입니다. 'comfortably'만 사용하거나 문장을 재구성하는 것이 좋습니다. 문장 연결을 위해 'because' 앞뒤 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하세요.

Example: I definitely prefer wet weather to dry weather because in dry conditions I often have to breathe in a lot of dust, which makes it hard for me to breathe comfortably. For example, during the dry season my allergies tend to get worse.

Suggestion: 마지막에 'Unpredictable.'이라는 단어가 문맥상 어색하게 독립적으로 나와 있습니다. 불필요한 단어는 제거하고, 문장 길이를 5문장 이내로 유지하세요. 또한, 'every morning'과 'whenever I go outside' 사이에 연결어를 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

Example: I always check the weather forecast because the weather in my city is very unpredictable and can change quickly. For example, it often rains suddenly, so I make sure to check it every morning and carry an umbrella whenever I go outside. This habit helps me avoid getting caught in the rain.

Suggestion: 답변이 명확하고 구체적이며 연결어도 적절히 사용되었습니다. 다만, 'the climate change' 대신 'climate change'라고 하는 것이 자연스럽습니다.

Example: These days, due to climate change, the weather has become more unpredictable and erratic. For example, sudden and intense rainfall often occurs, which can cause flooding. Additionally, weather forecasts have become less reliable, making it harder for people to prepare for this change.

Suggestion: 'different climate'는 'different climates'로 복수형을 사용해야 하며, 마지막 문장이 미완성되어 있습니다. 문장을 완성하고, 문장 간 연결어를 추가하여 더 자연스럽게 만드세요.

Example: Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates. Especially during the summer in East Asia, the weather tends to be very hot and humid, which can be quite uncomfortable for me. Therefore, I am interested in going to Australia because the climate there is generally drier than here.

× The weather in my city is quite tangible throughout the year.

✓ The weather in my city is quite variable throughout the year.

The adjective 'tangible' means 'perceptible by touch' and is not appropriate to describe weather. The correct adjective here is 'variable', meaning the weather changes or varies throughout the year.

× I definitely prefer wet weather to dry weather because in dry conditions I often have to breath in a lot of dust, which makes it hard for me to breathe come comfortably.

✓ I definitely prefer wet weather to dry weather because in dry conditions I often have to breathe in a lot of dust, which makes it hard for me to breathe comfortably.

The verb 'breath' is incorrect; the correct form is 'breathe' (verb). Also, 'breathe come comfortably' is incorrect; it should be 'breathe comfortably'. The adverb 'comfortably' correctly modifies the verb 'breathe'.

× This habit helps me avoid getting caught in the rain. Unpredictable.

✓ This habit helps me avoid getting caught in the rain, which is unpredictable.

The word 'Unpredictable' is a sentence fragment and does not connect properly to the previous sentence. It should be integrated to clarify that the rain is unpredictable.

× These days, due to the climate change, the weather has become more unpredictable and erratic.

✓ These days, due to climate change, the weather has become more unpredictable and erratic.

The phrase 'the climate change' is incorrect because 'climate change' is an uncountable noun and does not require the definite article 'the' in this context.

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climate.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities with different climates.

The noun 'climate' should be plural 'climates' because it refers to multiple cities each having different types of climate.

× Therefore, I am interested in going to Australia because the climate there is generally drier than.

✓ Therefore, I am interested in going to Australia because the climate there is generally drier than where I live.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'drier than' without completing the comparison. It needs an object to complete the comparison, such as 'where I live'.