Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答要更直接且信息更丰富。避免频繁的填充词（如“hmm”、“maybe”），并用一到两句说明写作的频率和目的。例如说明每周写几次、主要为备考或练习写作技能等。保持句子简洁，不超过五句。

Example: Yes, I write quite often. I usually practice by writing English articles for exams, about two or three times a week, to improve my vocabulary and grammar.

Suggestion: 结构混乱且含有大量犹豫语。应先直接回答喜欢写什么，然后给出清晰原因并提供具体细节（例如喜欢科幻小说的哪类情节或主题）。避免模糊短语如“maybe in computer”。

Example: I would like to write novels, especially science fiction, because I enjoy exploring futuristic ideas and technology. For example, I like stories about artificial intelligence and how it affects society.

Suggestion: 答案不清晰且有语法错误。应先直接回答“会/不会”，然后说明原因并给出具体情境（例如写作语言、题材会随经历变化）。避免重复和杂音词，控制在三到四句内。

Example: Yes, I think my writing will change. Right now I mostly write in English for exams, but after studying abroad I expect to write more about my experiences and perhaps switch between English and my native language.

Suggestion: 总体表达可理解但被犹豫词打断。回答要更流畅，删掉填充词，并在一两句内加入具体例子（例如用电脑、手机或打字速度）。

Example: I prefer typing because my handwriting is messy and typing is much faster. For example, I write essays on my laptop and can edit them quickly with spell check.

Suggestion: 回答含糊且未完成。需直接说明频率（例如从不、偶尔或每天），并给出具体原因和情境（例如害怕隐私被看到或觉得没时间）。避免重复和语法错误。

Example: I don't keep a diary anymore. I used to, but I stopped because I feel shy about others reading it and I don't have enough time to write regularly.

Suggestion: 表达基本清楚但语法和流畅度可改进。去掉不必要的犹豫词，使用更准确的短语并给出具体例子（例如用手机、社交媒体或云备份）。

Example: I prefer to use my phone to take photos and videos because they capture moments more vividly than writing. I often upload them to cloud storage or share short clips on social media.

× I usually write the English article for the exams recently.

✓ I have been writing English articles for exams recently.

句子使用了表示最近一段时间的时间状语“recently”，应使用现在完成进行时或现在完成时来表述持续或最近发生的动作。原句用一般现在时“write”与时间状语不匹配。建议使用“have been writing”或“have written”。

× Hmm, maybe that's all.

✓ Maybe that's all.

原句中开头的“Hmm,”是口语填充词，书面回答可以省略，且句子结构本身无重大语法错误，仅为冗余。根据指示只修正列出的问题类型，这里做轻微精简以更符合书面表达。

× Hi hmm, in my view if I have changed to write write I want to write novels cause the novels are so interesting and I love novels especially scientific novels. Maybe in computer?

✓ In my view, if I could change what I write, I would like to write novels because they are so interesting. I especially like science fiction novels — maybe something about computers.

原句存在句子结构混乱和口语填充词（“Hi hmm”）以及重复词（“write write”）和非标准因果连接“cause”。使用虚拟语气（if I could change... I would like...）更符合假设情形，且将“scientific novels”改为常见用法“science fiction novels”。同时把“Maybe in computer?”改为更完整的短语“maybe something about computers”。这些调整属于句子结构和表达修正。

× Do you think the things you write would change?

✓ Do you think the things you write will change?

原句中使用“would”表假设或礼貌语气，但考官问的是对未来变化的看法，更自然用一般将来时“will change”。根据题意将“would”改为“will”。

× Yeah, my rights must be changed.

✓ Yeah, my writing must change.

原句“my rights”拼写错误并且语义不符合，应该是“my writing”（我的写作）。“must be changed”被动结构不自然，改为主动“must change”更符合意图。此为主谓搭配/词形选择问题。

× Umm, just uh, now I'm, uh, now I usually, uh, write something in English, umm, and then I study abroad.

✓ Just now I usually write something in English, and later I will study abroad.

句中时间混杂，“now”与“usually”并列不自然。若说常态用“一般现在时”，若谈及将来计划应使用将来时。根据语境把后半句改为将来时“will study abroad”。（说明：保留口语填充词不影响语法，已简化。）

× I read something in English as well, but would like come to my country, I must write something.

✓ I read things in English as well, but if I return to my country, I must write something.

原句时态和结构不清，“would like come to my country”缺少不定式和连接词，且时态混用。根据语境改为条件从句“If I return to my country”并用“must write”。

× Umm, to be honest, umm, I prefer typing umm.

✓ To be honest, I prefer typing.

原句实际语法正确，但多余的口语填充词干扰表述。保留“prefer typing”即可。此处标注为动名词形式问题（提出为参考），建议熟练使用动名词作为动词prefer的宾语。

× This is because my handwriting, umm is a little ugly and typing is more convenient because of the development of technology.

✓ This is because my handwriting is a little messy, and typing is more convenient thanks to technological development.

原句中“a little ugly”对handwriting不自然，改为“a little messy/untidy”。“because of the development of technology”冗长，改为更自然的“thanks to technological development”。这属形容词选择和冠词使用的修正。

× How often do you keep diaries? -> I don't write Diaries anymore 'cause, umm, I'm a little shy about it.

✓ I don't keep diaries anymore because I'm a little shy about it.

“Diaries”不应大写。动词使用“keep diaries”更自然，且将口语缩写和多余填充词省略。时态保持一般现在时，表示习惯。

× I MMM MMM, I afraid that some somebody to.

✓ I'm afraid that somebody might read them.

原句片段不完整且语序错误，缺少谓语动词。根据语境补全为“I'm afraid that somebody might read them.” 表达担心他人看到日记。此为句子结构修正。

× Yeah, record my life, umm, maybe I used to phone to take some photos or take some videos umm they are more vivid and colorful than words, any sentence.

✓ To record my life, I usually use my phone to take photos or videos; they are more vivid and colorful than words or sentences.

原句中“used to phone to take”结构不正确，应为“use my phone to take”。将不定式和习惯用法改正为一般现在时“usually use”。“any sentence”不自然，改为“words or sentences”。这是动词用法和句子结构的修正。

× So I prefer take photos and videos.

✓ So I prefer taking photos and videos.

动词prefer后应接动名词形式，故将“prefer take”改为“prefer taking”。