Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi dài dòng và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'I do a lot' không rõ nghĩa trong ngữ cảnh này. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và sử dụng câu ngắn gọn, tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp.

Example: Yes, I write a lot, especially for my school lessons like literature, biology, and history. I also practice writing daily to prepare for the IELTS test.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngập ngừng như 'uh', 'umm' và sửa lỗi ngữ pháp như 'keep my keep on my'. Hãy trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý muốn lưu giữ kỷ niệm.

Example: I enjoy writing diaries every day because I want to preserve my memories and read them again whenever I like.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời thiếu sự rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như 'I choose write a Diaries'. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

Example: No, I don't think what I write will change because I want to remember my life, family, and friends. Maybe in the future, if I become successful, I will publish a book about my life.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và thiếu sự rõ ràng. Bạn nên tránh dùng từ ngập ngừng và giải thích rõ lý do thích viết tay hơn, đồng thời sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết ý tốt hơn.

Example: I prefer handwriting because I am not good at typing. Also, when I use the computer, my family sometimes thinks I am playing games, so I like to write by hand instead.

Suggestion: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng thì đúng hơn, ví dụ 'I have been writing it since I was 15'. Hãy trả lời mạch lạc, tránh từ ngập ngừng và dùng từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý tưởng.

Example: I keep a diary every day. I have been writing it since I was 15 because I want to preserve my memories of family and friends, as time never comes back.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời không rõ nghĩa và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tránh dùng từ không phù hợp như 'become alive by writing'. Hãy giải thích rõ hơn về lý do bạn chọn viết để ghi lại cuộc sống.

Example: I don't use any other methods to record my life because I believe writing is the best way to remember and reflect on my experiences.

× I write every day, like on every lesson at school, like literature or biology, history, and especially the English.

✓ I write every day, like in every lesson at school, like literature, biology, history, and especially English.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'English' and 'lesson'. In English, subjects like 'English' do not require 'the'. Also, the preposition 'on' should be 'in' when referring to lessons or classes. Suggestion: Remove 'the' before 'English' and replace 'on' with 'in' before 'every lesson'.

× I write the writing test, you know, on IELTS every day.

✓ I write the writing test, you know, for IELTS every day.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'IELTS'. The correct preposition is 'for' when referring to tests or exams. Suggestion: Replace 'on' with 'for' before 'IELTS'.

× I enjoy writing the Diaries.

✓ I enjoy writing diaries.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'Diaries'. When talking about diaries in general, no article is needed. Also, 'Diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a title. Suggestion: Remove 'the' and use lowercase 'diaries'.

× I want to keep my keep on my, uh, memories in a book to uh, umm, to watch it again when I want.

✓ I want to keep my memories in a book to look at them again when I want.

The phrase 'keep my keep on my' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'watch it again' is inappropriate for memories; 'look at them again' is better. Suggestion: Simplify the sentence to 'keep my memories in a book to look at them again'.

× No I don't now I just want to recall all of my life, life, my family, my friends and I choose write a Diaries.

✓ No, I don't. Now I just want to recall all of my life, my family, my friends, and I choose to write a diary.

Missing punctuation causes confusion. 'Choose write' is incorrect; it should be 'choose to write'. 'Diaries' should be singular 'diary' here. Suggestion: Add punctuation, use 'choose to write', and use singular 'diary'.

× Maybe if I grow, if I grow up more and not become a successful person, I will release a book about my life.

✓ Maybe if I grow up more and become a successful person, I will release a book about my life.

The phrase 'if I grow, if I grow up more and not become' is awkward and redundant. Also, 'not become' contradicts the intended meaning. Suggestion: Simplify to 'if I grow up more and become a successful person'.

× I prefer handwriting first of all because I'm not good at tapping and uh, when I use the computer sometime my family don't think that I am playing game, so I want to try everything.

✓ I prefer handwriting first of all because I'm not good at typing, and when I use the computer sometimes my family thinks that I am playing games, so I want to try everything.

'Tapping' should be 'typing'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'My family don't think' should be 'my family thinks'. 'Playing game' should be 'playing games'. Suggestion: Correct these words and subject-verb agreement.

× I keep Diaries every day.

✓ I keep a diary every day.

'Diaries' is plural, but the context suggests a singular diary is kept daily. Also, 'diary' should not be capitalized. Suggestion: Use singular 'a diary'.

× I have been writing it when I was 15, I, I realized that I have to store all of my memories about my family, my friends, because the time, uh, never come back.

✓ I have been writing it since I was 15. I realized that I have to store all of my memories about my family and my friends because time never comes back.

'Have been writing it when I was 15' is incorrect; 'since I was 15' is correct for starting point. 'The time never come back' should be 'time never comes back'. Suggestion: Use 'since' for starting time and correct verb agreement.

× I don't use any method except uh become alive by writing because for me writing is the best way to recall on the on things like in learning and also recommend life.

✓ I don't use any method except becoming alive by writing because for me writing is the best way to recall things like learning and also recommend life.

'Except uh become alive' is incorrect; 'except becoming alive' is better. 'Recall on the on things' is incorrect; 'recall things' is correct. 'Recommend life' is unclear; possibly 'remember life' or 'reflect on life' is intended. Suggestion: Use gerund after 'except', remove unnecessary prepositions, and clarify meaning.