Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and repeated words such as 'I, I'. Also, make your sentences more concise and clear. For example, say 'I write a lot for academic purposes and enjoy writing poetry in my free time because it makes me feel comfortable.'

Example: Yes, I write a lot, mainly for my studies. In my free time, I enjoy writing poetry because it helps me express my feelings comfortably.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases like 'connect it, the book'. Use clear linking words and specific reasons. For example, 'I like writing poetry because it helps me express my feelings clearly and relax after studying.'

Example: I enjoy writing poetry because it allows me to express my emotions and helps me relax after studying hard.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to show contrast, e.g., 'When I was young, I preferred writing academic books, but now I also enjoy writing poetry and novels, which help me focus on my studies.'

Example: When I was younger, I preferred writing academic books. However, now I also enjoy writing poetry and novels because they help me concentrate on my studies.

Suggestion: Avoid grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'If I walking the time'. Use linking words for clarity. For example, 'I prefer both typing and handwriting depending on the situation. When I am on the move, I type on my phone, but at home, I prefer handwriting.'

Example: I like both typing and handwriting. When I am outside, I type on my phone, but at home, I usually write by hand.

Suggestion: Make sentences clearer and avoid filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'I keep a diary quite often because it helps me, as a student, to express my feelings, record daily activities, and plan my work regularly.'

Example: I often keep a diary because it helps me express my feelings, record my daily activities, and plan my work effectively.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and improve sentence flow. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, 'I use several methods to record my life, but mostly I use the notepad on my phone because it is convenient and helps me easily express my feelings and write down my plans.'

Example: I use different ways to record my life, but mostly I use the notepad on my phone because it is convenient and helps me express my feelings and plan my day.

× I often write for my academic purpose as well as I like writing Uh, so whenever I free, I also write poetry.

✓ I often write for my academic purposes as well as I like writing. Uh, so whenever I am free, I also write poetry.

The phrase 'academic purpose' should be pluralized to 'academic purposes' to correctly express multiple reasons or goals. Also, 'whenever I free' is incorrect; it should be 'whenever I am free' because the verb 'to be' is needed here to form the present tense expression of availability.

× I often write for my academic purpose as well as I like writing Uh, so whenever I free, I also write poetry.

✓ I often write for my academic purposes as well as I like writing. Uh, so whenever I am free, I also write poetry.

The noun 'purpose' should be plural 'purposes' because academic writing usually serves multiple purposes. Using singular here is incorrect.

× I, I feel like more comfortable when I write poetry.

✓ I feel more comfortable when I write poetry.

The phrase 'feel like more comfortable' is incorrect. The correct form is 'feel more comfortable' without 'like' because 'feel' is a linking verb here and should be followed directly by an adjective.

× As I mentioned earlier, uh, I like, uh, write poetry because it's really convenient for me as a student.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, uh, I like, uh, writing poetry because it's really convenient for me as a student.

After the verb 'like', the gerund form 'writing' should be used instead of the base verb 'write'.

× Uh, it helped me to connect it, the book as well as, uh, when I write poetry, I can really, uh, feel comfortable and I can easily exhibit my feelings.

✓ Uh, it helps me to connect with the book as well as, uh, when I write poetry, I can really, uh, feel comfortable and I can easily express my feelings.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used twice; 'connect it' is incorrect, it should be 'connect with the book'. Also, 'helped' should be present tense 'helps' to match the context. 'Exhibit' is not the best verb here; 'express' is more appropriate for feelings.

× I definitely when I was young, that time I prefer to write, uh, only academic book, academic books.

✓ Definitely, when I was young, at that time I preferred to write only academic books.

The verb 'prefer' should be in past tense 'preferred' to match 'when I was young'. Also, 'academic book' should be plural 'academic books'.

× But nowadays, uh, I also like to write poetry as well as, uh, novel, which helped me to focus on my study.

✓ But nowadays, uh, I also like to write poetry as well as novels, which help me to focus on my studies.

'Novel' should be plural 'novels' to match 'poetry' and the context. 'Helped' should be present tense 'help' because 'nowadays' indicates present time. 'Study' should be plural 'studies'.

× It depend on the occasion or depend on the situation.

✓ It depends on the occasion or depends on the situation.

The verb 'depend' should be in third person singular present tense 'depends' to agree with the subject 'It'.

× If I walking the time, uh, if I need to write anything that time I prefer to write in my mobile phone, uh, by typing.

✓ If I am walking at the time, uh, if I need to write anything at that time I prefer to write on my mobile phone, uh, by typing.

The phrase 'If I walking the time' is incorrect; it should be 'If I am walking at the time'. Also, 'in my mobile phone' should be 'on my mobile phone'.

× But if I stay at home, the time I prefer to handwriting.

✓ But if I stay at home, at that time I prefer handwriting.

'The time' should be 'at that time' to indicate a specific time. Also, 'prefer to handwriting' is incorrect; 'prefer handwriting' is correct because 'prefer' can be followed directly by a noun.

× It's a quite often I use Diaries because it's really important for student, not only student, but also everyone like uh, we can express our feelings and daily activity in the Diaries, uh, as well as plan uh, which helped me to uh, work regularly.

✓ I quite often use diaries because it's really important for students, not only students, but also everyone. We can express our feelings and daily activities in the diaries, as well as plan, which helps me to work regularly.

'It's a quite often' is incorrect; correct is 'I quite often'. 'Diaries' should not be capitalized. 'Student' should be plural 'students'. 'Daily activity' should be plural 'daily activities'. 'Helped' should be present tense 'helps'.

× There are a number of methods I can use, uh, to record my life, but most of the time I use notepad on my phone, uh, which is really helpful for me and convenient.

✓ There are a number of methods I can use to record my life, but most of the time I use the notepad on my phone, which is really helpful for me and convenient.

'Notepad' should be preceded by the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific app on the phone.

× Uh, I can easily showcasing my feelings and uh, as well as most of the time I can easily write down my plan.

✓ Uh, I can easily showcase my feelings and, as well as, most of the time I can easily write down my plans.

'Showcasing' is incorrect here; it should be the base verb 'showcase' after 'can'. 'Plan' should be plural 'plans' to indicate multiple plans.