Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 你的回答比较自然，但有些冗长且重复。建议直接回答问题，避免重复表达，比如“write a little diary to express myself”和“write something”意思重复。可以用更简洁的句子表达你的写作习惯。

Example: I don't write often since leaving school, but when I'm feeling confused or down, I write in my diary to express my feelings.

Suggestion: 回答内容具体且有逻辑，但句子较长且缺少连接词。建议使用连接词如“for example”后加逗号，分句更清晰。可以适当丰富词汇，避免重复使用“write down”。

Example: I like to write about my feelings, especially when I'm confused, for example, about my job or future. I analyze my thoughts to understand the cause of my bad mood.

Suggestion: 回答中有口头语“uh”，影响流畅度。建议避免使用口头语，句子结构可以更紧凑。表达观点时可以更直接，减少重复。

Example: I don't usually write creatively; writing helps me relieve stress and express emotions. Therefore, what I write changes depending on my life stage.

Suggestion: 回答中有多处“umm”，影响自然流畅。建议减少口头语，句子可以更简洁。词汇“way of relieve stress”应改为“way to relieve stress”。

Example: I prefer typing for work because it's efficient, but for expressing my feelings and relieving stress, I prefer handwriting.

Suggestion: 回答内容具体，但有语法错误，如“things happens”应为“things happen”。建议注意主谓一致，句子可以更连贯。

Example: I write in my diary only when I'm confused or sad, such as when looking for a new job or after an argument. This happens about once or twice a year.

Suggestion: 回答中有语法错误，如“stored it in my on my phone”不通顺。建议简化句子，注意时态和介词使用，避免重复。

Example: I record my life by taking photos and videos, especially when I travel abroad three to four times a year. I store these on my phone or computer to enjoy later.

× I haven't had the chance to write a lot of things in my daily life.

✓ I haven't had the chance to write many things in my daily life.

The phrase 'a lot of things' is acceptable but 'many things' is more appropriate when referring to countable items in negative sentences. Using 'many' fits better with the negative context here.

× I normally just like to write down my feelings, especially when I'm feeling confused, for example about my job, about my future or I'm having an argument with my boyfriend.

✓ I normally just like to write down my feelings, especially when I'm feeling confused, for example about my job, about my future, or when I'm having an argument with my boyfriend.

The sentence lacks parallel structure. The phrase 'or I'm having an argument' should be 'or when I'm having an argument' to maintain parallelism with the previous clauses starting with 'when'.

× I tend to write down how this happened and analyze my thoughts so that I will know what's the problem of my bad mood.

✓ I tend to write down how this happened and analyze my thoughts so that I will know what the problem with my bad mood is.

The phrase 'what's the problem of my bad mood' is incorrect. It should be 'what the problem with my bad mood is' to correctly express the issue and maintain proper sentence structure.

× I only write down my feelings in a diary when I'm feeling confused or sad. For example when I want to look for a new job or I have an argument with someone close to me. So that depends on when those things happens.

✓ I only write down my feelings in a diary when I'm feeling confused or sad. For example, when I want to look for a new job or have an argument with someone close to me. So that depends on when those things happen.

The verb 'happens' should be plural 'happen' to agree with the plural subject 'those things'. Also, the sentence 'For example when I want to look for a new job or I have an argument...' is better without repeating 'I' before 'have an argument' for smoother flow.

× Taking photos and video logs are definitely important methods for me to record my life.

✓ Taking photos and video logs is definitely an important method for me to record my life.

The subject 'Taking photos and video logs' is considered a single combined activity here, so the verb should be singular 'is'. Also, 'methods' should be singular 'method' to match the singular verb.

× I go traveling abroad maybe three to four times a year and during these trips I will take loads of pictures and then stored it in my on my phone or computer so that I can relieve.

✓ I go traveling abroad maybe three to four times a year and during these trips I take loads of pictures and then store them on my phone or computer so that I can relieve stress.

The verb 'stored' is incorrectly in past tense; it should be present tense 'store' to match the present habitual action. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to 'loads of pictures' (plural). The phrase 'in my on my phone' is incorrect; it should be 'on my phone'. The sentence ends abruptly; adding 'stress' clarifies the meaning.