Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat natural but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid trailing off. Also, be more specific about how often you write to make your answer clearer.

Example: Yes, I write quite often. Usually, I write about my daily activities and sometimes I write scientific blogs and papers to share my knowledge.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Try to finish your sentences and explain why you like to write about scientific knowledge. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

Example: I love to write about scientific knowledge because I want to share it with the general public to raise awareness about important issues.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to complete your thoughts and explain how your writing topics might change or stay the same. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: Actually, I'm not sure if the things I write will change, but I think I will continue to write about social issues and causes because they are important to me.

Suggestion: Your answer is too long and contains many fillers and incomplete sentences. Try to be concise and clear. Avoid using too many 'uh' and complete your sentences fully.

Example: I generally prefer handwriting because it is more convenient to use pen and paper. I can quickly jot down my ideas without distractions.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to avoid repeating words and complete your sentences. Also, explain why you keep diaries with more specific details.

Example: I keep diaries regularly because they help me remember important events and reflect on my experiences throughout the year.

Suggestion: Your answer has many fillers and is not very fluent. Try to reduce hesitation and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: I use my diary to record life events. Similarly, I use my mobile phone to keep track of day-to-day activities and memories.

× I would say I write quite often.

✓ I would say that I write quite often.

In English, when using phrases like 'I would say', it is common to include the conjunction 'that' to introduce the following clause for clarity and correctness.

× I usually write about my daily activities and I do write scientific blogs and papers.

✓ I usually write about my daily activities, and I also write scientific blogs and papers.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks proper conjunction usage. Adding a comma and 'also' improves clarity and sentence flow.

× So yeah, I.

✓ So yeah, I do.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb. Adding 'do' completes the sentence and makes it grammatically correct.

× What do you like to write?

✓ What do you like to write about?

The verb 'write' often requires the preposition 'about' when referring to the topic or subject matter.

× I love to write about the scientific knowledge which I have consumed.

✓ I love to write about the scientific knowledge that I have acquired.

The phrase 'have consumed' is unusual in this context; 'have acquired' is more appropriate when referring to knowledge. Also, 'which' can be replaced with 'that' for defining clauses.

× I would like to share among the general public for awareness for.

✓ I would like to share it with the general public to raise awareness.

The verb 'share' is followed by 'with' to indicate the recipient. Also, 'for awareness for' is incorrect; 'to raise awareness' is the correct expression.

× Actually, I I'm not sure about that.

✓ Actually, I'm not sure about that.

The phrase 'I I'm' is redundant; removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence.

× However, I would say that I will continue to write about the social issues and social causes and will.

✓ However, I would say that I will continue to write about social issues and social causes.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and will' without completing the thought. Removing the incomplete phrase makes the sentence complete and correct.

× I generally prefer handwriting simply because, uh, it is more convenient, uh, to use a pen and paper rather than mobile phones because uh, and it I can just jot down my ideas in.

✓ I generally prefer handwriting simply because it is more convenient to use a pen and paper rather than mobile phones, and I can just jot down my ideas quickly.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains redundant words and phrases. Correcting pronoun usage and sentence structure improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I keep Diaries all the time.

✓ I keep diaries all the time.

The word 'diaries' should not be capitalized unless it is a proper noun. Also, 'diaries' is plural and should be in lowercase.

× I maintain Diaries because I can just go back to the journal that I have written in the year.

✓ I maintain diaries because I can just go back to the journal entries that I have written throughout the year.

The sentence is awkward and unclear. 'Journal entries' is more precise than 'journal', and 'throughout the year' clarifies the time frame.

× I uh, use the diary for recording my life events.

✓ I use the diary to record my life events.

The phrase 'use the diary for recording' is less natural than 'use the diary to record'. The infinitive form is preferred here.

× Similarly, I do use uh, mobile phones for keeping the records of, uh, the day-to-day events.

✓ Similarly, I use mobile phones to keep records of day-to-day events.

The phrase 'do use uh' is unnecessary; simplifying to 'use' is better. Also, 'for keeping the records of' is better expressed as 'to keep records of'.