Writing— Part 1 Report
Conversation
Part 1
Examiner
Do you write a lot?
Candidate
Honestly, I don't umm, right now I don't really have much time to just just sit and write. But when I was younger I used to keep these Diaries when I would check in with with them and write every so often about my day or about my feelings and my experiences. But uh, now I really don't do it much.
Examiner
What do you like to write? Why?
Candidate
Well as I said, when I do have the time to write I usually just enjoy writing, writing on my journals, just venting about my day or something that's just stressing me umm or my past days experiences. It just makes me feel kind of more umm released of my stress and my emotions to just write it off.
Examiner
Do you think the things you write would change?
Candidate
I mean, yes, absolutely. As we grow old and we evolve in our lives and our life experiences change, definitely the things that we are going to be writing about are going to change as well. It's just going to be in a in a proportion with the way that our life dynamics change.
Examiner
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Candidate
I guess it depends on what I'm writing. If I'm writing an e-mail then of course I I have to type it. But when I'm writing an essay or just my journaling, I prefer handwriting it. Just I feel much more comfortable expressing my feelings via hand rather than typing on a computer screen.
Examiner
How often do you keep diaries?
Candidate
Look, as I mentioned earlier, when I was younger I used to keep Diaries and journals. Umm I believe up until I was in high school I had a journal. But now my day has grown grown busier and I don't really have the time to keep a diary or a journal. So lately I I really don't keep one.
Examiner
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Candidate
Well, I keep my phone with me all of the time and that that is the, the, the, the method that I use to keep my life memories in check. So I just take a picture or a video or maybe write a message or like write something on my notes app. I really use my notes app to keep the memories.
Evaluation
Overall
Part 1
Do you write a lot?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: Përmirësoni rrjedhshmërinë duke shmangur përsëritjet dhe fjalët e panevojshme si 'umm' dhe 'just'. Përpiquni të jeni më të qartë dhe të drejtpërdrejtë në përgjigje, duke përdorur fjalë të thjeshta dhe të natyrshme.
Example: I don't write much at the moment because I am busy. However, when I was younger, I used to keep diaries where I wrote about my daily experiences and feelings.
What do you like to write? Why?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: Përpiquni të përdorni lidhëza për të bërë përgjigjen më koherente dhe shmangni fjalët e panevojshme si 'umm'. Jepni shembuj më specifikë për të mbështetur përgjigjen tuaj.
Example: I enjoy writing in my journals because it helps me relieve stress. For example, I often write about difficult situations I faced during the day, which makes me feel better.
Do you think the things you write would change?
Score: 75.0Suggestion: Përmirësoni strukturën duke shmangur përsëritjet dhe duke përdorur lidhëza për të bërë përgjigjen më të rrjedhshme. Përdorni fjalë më të thjeshta dhe të qarta për të shprehur idetë tuaja.
Example: Yes, I believe the topics I write about will change as I grow older because my life experiences and priorities will be different.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Score: 80.0Suggestion: Përpiquni të bëni përgjigjen më të përmbledhur dhe të qartë duke shmangur përsëritjet dhe fjalët e panevojshme. Përdorni lidhëza për të lidhur idetë.
Example: It depends on the task. For emails, I type because it's faster, but for essays or journaling, I prefer handwriting since it helps me express my feelings better.
How often do you keep diaries?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: Shmangni përsëritjet dhe fjalët e panevojshme si 'umm' dhe 'I I'. Përpiquni të jepni përgjigje më të qarta dhe të strukturuara mirë.
Example: I used to keep diaries regularly until high school, but now I am too busy, so I rarely write in a journal.
What other methods do you use to record your life?
Score: 75.0Suggestion: Përmirësoni rrjedhshmërinë duke shmangur përsëritjet dhe fjalët e panevojshme. Përdorni lidhëza për të bërë përgjigjen më koherente dhe jepni shembuj më specifikë.
Example: I always carry my phone to record memories. For instance, I take photos, record videos, or write notes in my app to remember important moments.
Grammar
× I used to keep these Diaries when I would check in with with them and write every so often about my day or about my feelings and my experiences.
✓ I used to keep these diaries when I would check in with them and write every so often about my day or about my feelings and my experiences.
The word 'Diaries' should not be capitalized here because it is a common noun, not a proper noun. Also, the definite article 'these' is acceptable if referring to specific diaries, but capitalization is incorrect.
× I usually just enjoy writing, writing on my journals, just venting about my day or something that's just stressing me umm or my past days experiences.
✓ I usually just enjoy writing, writing in my journals, just venting about my day or something that's just stressing me or my past days' experiences.
The correct preposition to use with 'journals' is 'in' rather than 'on' because you write inside a journal. Also, 'past days experiences' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'past days' experiences'.
× It just makes me feel kind of more umm released of my stress and my emotions to just write it off.
✓ It just makes me feel kind of more released from my stress and my emotions to just write it off.
The phrase 'released of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'released from' when referring to being freed from something.
× It's just going to be in a in a proportion with the way that our life dynamics change.
✓ It's just going to be in proportion to the way that our life dynamics change.
The phrase 'in a proportion with' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'in proportion to' when indicating a relationship between two things.
× Just I feel much more comfortable expressing my feelings via hand rather than typing on a computer screen.
✓ I just feel much more comfortable expressing my feelings by hand rather than typing on a computer screen.
The phrase 'via hand' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'by hand' to indicate the method of writing. Also, 'Just I feel' is awkward; 'I just feel' is the correct word order.
× Look, as I mentioned earlier, when I was younger I used to keep Diaries and journals.
✓ Look, as I mentioned earlier, when I was younger I used to keep diaries and journals.
The word 'Diaries' should not be capitalized and should be in lowercase as it is a common noun. Also, 'diaries' is plural and correctly used here.
× But now my day has grown grown busier and I don't really have the time to keep a diary or a journal.
✓ But now my days have grown busier and I don't really have the time to keep a diary or a journal.
The phrase 'my day has grown busier' is incorrect because 'day' is singular but the meaning implies multiple days. The plural 'days' fits better with 'have grown'.
× Well, I keep my phone with me all of the time and that that is the, the, the, the method that I use to keep my life memories in check.
✓ Well, I keep my phone with me all of the time and that is the method that I use to keep my life memories in check.
The repeated 'the' is redundant and incorrect. Only one 'the' is needed before 'method'.
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