Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「I don't like by hand」は不自然で、「I don't like writing by hand」が適切です。また、同じ内容の繰り返しを避け、より簡潔に答えることが望ましいです。

Example: No, I don't write much by hand because I usually take notes on my iPad during class.

Suggestion: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくい部分があります。例えば、「I like to write essay」は「I like to write essays」が正しいです。また、理由を述べる際に接続詞を使い、文をつなげると自然になります。

Example: I like to write essays because they allow me to express my feelings and thoughts freely, but I don't enjoy writing essays with strict limitations because they restrict my imagination.

Suggestion: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が不明瞭です。例えば、「absolute the knowledge from their life」は不自然で、「gain knowledge from life experiences」が適切です。より簡潔で明確な表現を心がけましょう。

Example: Yes, I think what I write will change in the future because as I gain more life experiences and knowledge, my ideas and perspectives will evolve.

Suggestion: 文法の誤りと不自然な表現があります。例えば、「I love to use typing」は「I prefer typing」が自然です。また、「grammatically wrong and spell messing」は「grammatical mistakes and spelling errors」が正しい表現です。

Example: I prefer typing when I write because it's easy to erase mistakes, and computer programs can help me correct grammatical and spelling errors quickly.

Suggestion: 文法の誤りと冗長な表現が目立ちます。「Diaries」は小文字で、「I never keep Diaries before」は時制が不適切です。より簡潔で正確な表現を使いましょう。

Example: I don't keep a diary because my days are quite similar and peaceful, so I don't have interesting events to write about.

Suggestion: 意味は伝わりますが、文法と表現に改善の余地があります。「I'm recording my life by taking photos」は「I record my life by taking photos」が自然です。また、「just push one button」は「just pressing a button」が適切です。

Example: I record my life by taking photos because it's easy and quick; you just press a button to capture a moment instantly.

× No, I don't like by hand because I usually use my iPad to take a note in my class.

✓ No, I don't like writing by hand because I usually use my iPad to take notes in my class.

The phrase 'like by hand' is incorrect; the verb 'like' should be followed by a gerund ('writing') to indicate the activity. Also, 'take a note' should be pluralized to 'take notes' to reflect the general action of note-taking.

× No, I don't like by hand because I usually use my iPad to take a note in my class.

✓ No, I don't like writing by hand because I usually use my iPad to take notes in my class.

The noun 'note' should be plural 'notes' because it refers to multiple pieces of information recorded during class.

× That's why I don't note by hand.

✓ That's why I don't write notes by hand.

The verb 'note' is not commonly used alone in this context; 'write notes' is the correct collocation. Also, 'note' as a verb is less common here, so 'write notes' is clearer.

× I like to write essay because in essay I can express my feelings and the way of thinking but I don't like to write the essay that have limitation in the world because that that limit my imagination.

✓ I like to write essays because in essays I can express my feelings and my way of thinking, but I don't like to write essays that have limitations in the world because they limit my imagination.

The noun 'essay' should be plural 'essays' when speaking generally. Also, 'have limitation' should be 'have limitations' to agree in number, and 'that that limit' should be 'they limit' to match plural subject.

× I like to write essay because in essay I can express my feelings and the way of thinking but I don't like to write the essay that have limitation in the world because that that limit my imagination.

✓ I like to write essays because in essays I can express my feelings and my way of thinking, but I don't like to write essays that have limitations in the world because they limit my imagination.

The pronoun 'that that' is incorrect; it should be 'they' to refer to the plural noun 'essays'.

× Yet I think the thing I would like would change in the future because by experiencing many things and absolute the knowledge from their life, the scene or the idea will come up with change frequently.

✓ I think the things I like will change in the future because by experiencing many things and absorbing knowledge from life, scenes or ideas will change frequently.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context. Also, 'would like' is incorrect here; 'like' is better. 'Absolute the knowledge' is incorrect; 'absorbing knowledge' is the correct phrase.

× Yet I think the thing I would like would change in the future because by experiencing many things and absolute the knowledge from their life, the scene or the idea will come up with change frequently.

✓ I think the things I like will change in the future because by experiencing many things and absorbing knowledge from life, scenes or ideas will change frequently.

The preposition 'from their life' is incorrect; 'from life' is more natural and general.

× I love to use typing when I need to write something, because you can erase the thing easily and by the function of the note in the computer you can know the grammatically wrong and spell messing immediately.

✓ I love to use typing when I need to write something because you can erase things easily, and the note function on the computer can immediately identify grammatical errors and spelling mistakes.

'You can know the grammatically wrong and spell messing' is incorrect; it should be 'identify grammatical errors and spelling mistakes'. Also, 'the function of the note in the computer' is better expressed as 'the note function on the computer'.

× That's why I love you typing.

✓ That's why I love typing.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; it should be omitted to say 'I love typing'.

× I don't keep Diaries because I spend similar day every day and by this there is no thrill at all and it is very peaceful.

✓ I don't keep diaries because I spend similar days every day, and because of this, there is no thrill at all and it is very peaceful.

'Diaries' should be lowercase unless part of a title. 'Similar day' should be plural 'similar days' to match the context.

× So I don't have the incident that can keep in the Diaries.

✓ So I don't have any incidents to keep in the diaries.

The phrase 'can keep in the Diaries' is incorrect; it should be 'to keep in the diaries'. Also, 'incident' should be plural 'incidents' to match the context.

× That's why I never keep Diaries before.

✓ That's why I have never kept diaries before.

'Diaries' should be lowercase. Also, the tense should be present perfect 'have never kept' to indicate experience up to now.

× I'm recording my life by taking photos because this is the major way I think and it is very easy because just push one button and you can record your life immediately.

✓ I record my life by taking photos because I think this is the main way, and it is very easy because you just push one button and can record your life immediately.

The present continuous 'I'm recording' is less appropriate here; simple present 'I record' is better for habitual action. Also, 'major way' should be 'main way' for natural expression.

× That's why I love to use taking photo.

✓ That's why I love taking photos.

The phrase 'love to use taking photo' is incorrect; it should be 'love taking photos'. 'Taking photos' is a gerund phrase used as the object of 'love'.