Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it can be more natural and effective by avoiding redundancy and adding a bit more detail. Try to combine your ideas into one coherent sentence and add a reason for your preference.

Example: Yes, I write quite often, especially in my leisure time when I enjoy keeping a diary to record my daily experiences and thoughts.

Suggestion: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, correct grammar mistakes and be more specific about what you write and why.

Example: I like writing in my personal diary because it helps me express my opinions and reflect on the events of the day, especially the moments that went well.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and includes an example, but it can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I think what I write can change because my opinions are not fixed. For instance, I might plan to wear a red dress, but if I find a more attractive yellow one, I would choose that instead.

Suggestion: Your answer covers the main points but is a bit long and repetitive. Try to make your answer more concise and use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: I prefer typing because it is easier and more convenient than handwriting. Also, I can carry my phone everywhere, which helps me keep my diary safe.

Suggestion: Your answer has good content but lacks clarity and correct grammar. Try to structure your answer better with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid vague phrases.

Example: I usually keep a diary when I travel because I like to record my memories, including both good and bad experiences. For example, once during a trip, my address got torn, and I wrote about that incident in my diary.

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammar errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use more natural expressions and correct grammar, and explain clearly how you use your phone to record life.

Example: Besides writing, I often use my phone to record my life. I take many photos with my camera to capture memories, which I can revisit anytime and share with my friends and family.

× I write about my personal opinions and the day that have been went alright, like writing about my own things.

✓ I write about my personal opinions and the day that has gone alright, like writing about my own things.

The phrase 'have been went' is incorrect because 'went' is the simple past form of 'go' and cannot be used with 'have been'. The correct past participle form is 'gone'. Also, 'have' should be 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'day'. So, 'the day that have been went' should be corrected to 'the day that has gone'.

× The other methods that I love to use to record my personal life is my phone.

✓ The other methods that I love to use to record my personal life are my phone and camera.

The subject 'methods' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, the sentence mentions only 'my phone' as a method, but later the student mentions using the camera as well, so including both makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× I can avoid them whenever I want and I can show it to my friends or my family members.

✓ I can review them whenever I want and I can show them to my friends or my family members.

The verb 'avoid' is incorrect in this context; the student likely means to say 'review' or 'look at' the memories. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'memories'. Using the correct verb and pronoun improves clarity and grammatical correctness.