Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some unclear phrases like 'keeping a general or profiting short stories'. To improve, try to be more precise and avoid repeating words. Also, keep your sentences clear and concise, and check for grammar errors.

Example: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially for work. I often write reports, emails, and essays, which help me improve my writing skills. In my free time, I enjoy writing creatively, such as short stories. Writing helps me organize my thoughts and express myself clearly.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and repetitive, especially with phrases like 'like things which happen in my life' and 'express my myself clearly'. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid repeating words.

Example: I like to write short stories and personal reflections about my life because it helps me express my thoughts clearly and creatively.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many hesitations and grammatical errors. To improve, try to form complete sentences and express your ideas clearly. Use linking words to explain your reasoning logically.

Example: In my opinion, the things I write will change over time because as I experience new things, my thoughts and ideas evolve.

Suggestion: Your answer is confusing due to incorrect word choices like 'type handwriting' and 'new birds vocab'. To improve, clarify your preference and explain your reasons with correct vocabulary and sentence structure.

Example: I definitely prefer typing when I write because it is faster and helps me learn new vocabulary. Typing also allows me to edit my work easily.

Suggestion: Your answer has many hesitations and unclear phrases. To improve, try to speak more fluently and organize your ideas clearly. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

Example: I often keep a diary because I like to record everything that happens in my life, including my experiences and the people I interact with daily.

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but contains some hesitations and minor grammar mistakes. To improve, try to reduce filler words and use more precise vocabulary and sentence structures.

Example: Nowadays, there are many ways to record our lives, such as using mobile phones to take photos or videos. However, I still prefer writing in my diary because I enjoy putting my thoughts into words.

× I often write reports, emails and essays which helps helps me improve my writing skills.

✓ I often write reports, emails and essays which help me improve my writing skills.

The verb 'help' should be in the base form 'help' because it follows 'which' referring to plural subjects 'reports, emails and essays'. The original sentence incorrectly uses 'helps' twice, which is redundant and grammatically incorrect.

× I also enjoy writing creatively like keeping a general or profiting short stories in my free time.

✓ I also enjoy writing creatively like keeping a journal or writing short stories in my free time.

The phrase 'keeping a general or profiting short stories' is incorrect and unclear. 'Keeping a journal' is a common expression, and 'writing short stories' fits the context. 'Profiting' is not appropriate here.

× Writing is a great way for me to organize my thoughts and express.

✓ Writing is a great way for me to organize my thoughts and express myself.

The verb 'express' requires an object to complete the meaning. Adding 'myself' clarifies what is being expressed.

× I prefer to write a lot of things, like short stories, like things which happen in my life and my thoughts, to express my myself clearly.

✓ I prefer to write a lot of things, like short stories, about things that happen in my life and my thoughts, to express myself clearly.

The phrase 'my myself' is redundant; only 'myself' is needed. Also, 'like things which happen' is better expressed as 'about things that happen' for clarity and correctness.

× Is according to my opinion, the things which I write, it would be changed because umm because the time in changing I get a lot of things are changing time by time so.

✓ In my opinion, the things I write will change because over time many things change.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. Simplifying and restructuring it improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I definitely prefer type handwriting when I when I am writing because this is very useful for me.

✓ I definitely prefer typing to handwriting when I am writing because it is very useful for me.

The phrase 'prefer type handwriting' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer typing to handwriting'. Also, 'this' is vague; 'it' refers clearly to the activity.

× I can enhance my writing skills as well as get to know about the new birds vocab.

✓ I can enhance my writing skills as well as learn new vocabulary.

The phrase 'new birds vocab' is incorrect and unclear. 'Learn new vocabulary' is the correct expression.

× I often keep my Diaries because I like to record my, uh, record my everything like which the things, what happened in my life experiences and uh, about the people, which, uh, who's with? I talk every day.

✓ I often keep my diary because I like to record everything that happens in my life experiences and about the people I talk to every day.

'Diaries' should be singular 'diary' here. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct pronoun use, replacing 'which, uh, who's with?' with 'I talk to'.

× In the contemporary era, there are a lot of, uh, different ways to record our life. Like we can record on mobile phone, everyone, everybody have a mobile phones.

✓ In the contemporary era, there are many different ways to record our lives. For example, we can record on mobile phones; everyone has a mobile phone.

'Our life' should be plural 'our lives'. 'Everyone, everybody have' is incorrect; it should be 'everyone has'. 'Mobile phones' should be plural when referring generally.

× However, still I like to record my life in my diary because I like to write the things.

✓ However, I still like to record my life in my diary because I like to write things down.

The phrase 'write the things' is awkward; 'write things down' is a natural expression. The sentence is reordered for better flow.