Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more clear and concise. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and repetitive phrases. Also, ensure your sentences are grammatically correct and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details.

Example: Yes, I write quite often. Every night before I go to sleep, I jot down my thoughts and the activities I did during the day in my notebook.

Suggestion: Focus on organizing your answer with clear linking words and avoid filler sounds like 'uh'. Also, clarify your points and use appropriate vocabulary to express your ideas more naturally.

Example: Firstly, I like to write about my feelings each day. Additionally, I sometimes record my expenses and daily activities. Lastly, I note down my favorite movies in my notebook.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and complete sentences. Avoid repetition and filler words. Clearly explain how your writing changes over time with specific examples.

Example: Yes, I believe the things I write change over time. For example, I once wrote about wanting to buy a yellow Zara bag, but later I changed my mind and decided to buy something else.

Suggestion: Clarify your preference clearly and avoid confusing phrases. Use linking words to contrast your choices and correct vocabulary (e.g., 'rush hour' instead of 'rice hour').

Example: It depends on the situation. If I have plenty of time, I prefer handwriting in my notebook. However, when I'm in a hurry, I prefer typing on my phone.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and sentence structure to express duration clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and provide a clear reason for keeping diaries.

Example: I have been keeping a diary for about 15 years since junior high school. I continue to do so because it helps me remember my childhood thoughts and experiences.

Suggestion: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid filler words. Be specific and clear about how you use pictures and videos to record your life.

Example: Besides writing, I sometimes take pictures or videos to remember my life. For instance, during senior high school, I often recorded my daily activities to capture those moments.

× Especially umm for example, last night before I slept I I watched something on my notebook like what I felt in that day and what does what did activities that I do?

✓ Especially, umm, for example, last night before I slept, I watched something on my notebook like what I felt that day and what activities I did.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Does' should be 'did' to match the past tense context. Also, 'that day' is more natural than 'in that day'. The phrase 'what did activities that I do' is ungrammatical; it should be 'what activities I did' to correctly express past actions.

× First thing first, I like to write what I feel in that day.

✓ First things first, I like to write what I felt that day.

The phrase 'First thing first' is incorrect; the correct idiom is 'First things first'. Also, 'what I feel in that day' mixes present tense 'feel' with a past time reference 'that day'. It should be past tense 'felt' to match the time frame.

× And the last one is sometimes I feel my MMM, favorite films on my notebook.

✓ And the last one is sometimes I write my favorite films on my notebook.

The verb 'feel' is incorrectly used here; the intended meaning is likely 'write'. Also, 'MMM' seems to be filler or unclear and should be omitted for clarity.

× I think so because I remember at the time I watched something on my my notebook like I wanted to buy a new bag like umm Zara bag which is which was umm a yellow color.

✓ I think so because I remember at that time I wrote in my notebook that I wanted to buy a new bag, like a yellow Zara bag.

The phrase 'watched something on my notebook' is incorrect; one does not watch on a notebook in this context. The correct verb is 'wrote'. Also, 'which is which was' is redundant; 'was' suffices. The sentence needs to be clearer and consistent in past tense.

× But now I change it. I I decided to buy.

✓ But now I have changed my mind. I have decided to buy something else.

The sentence 'I change it' is present tense but refers to a past decision; present perfect 'have changed' is more appropriate. Also, 'I decided to buy' is past tense but incomplete; it should be 'I have decided to buy something else' for clarity and tense consistency.

× If I have much time, I prefer to type on my notebook, I mean on handwriting.

✓ If I have much time, I prefer to write by hand in my notebook.

The phrase 'type on my notebook' is incorrect; 'type' is usually done on electronic devices, not notebooks. 'On handwriting' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'write by hand'. Also, 'in my notebook' is the correct preposition for writing in a notebook.

× But if I don't have much time in rice hour, I prefer to type on my phone.

✓ But if I don't have much time during rush hour, I prefer to type on my phone.

The phrase 'in rice hour' is a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'rush hour'. The correct preposition is 'during' for time periods like 'rush hour'.

× I think around 15 years because I did write my diary since I was in junior high school and I keep until now.

✓ I think for around 15 years because I have been writing my diary since I was in junior high school and I have kept it until now.

The phrase 'did write' is unnecessary; present perfect 'have been writing' is better to express an action continuing from past to present. Also, 'I keep until now' should be 'I have kept it until now' for tense consistency.

× I keep it until now because I want to keep remembering what I want when I was a child.

✓ I keep it until now because I want to keep remembering what I wanted when I was a child.

The phrase 'what I want when I was a child' mixes present tense 'want' with past time 'was a child'. It should be past tense 'wanted' to match the time frame.

× Sometimes I take picture or video to keep remembering me about my life, especially for example when I was in Senior High School, I always record umm my daily activities to remembering me about that moment.

✓ Sometimes I take pictures or videos to help me remember my life, especially for example when I was in Senior High School, I always recorded my daily activities to remember those moments.

The phrase 'take picture or video' should be plural 'pictures or videos'. 'To keep remembering me about my life' is incorrect; it should be 'to help me remember my life'. Also, 'to remembering me' is incorrect; it should be 'to remember'. The verb tense should be consistent; 'always recorded' is past tense matching 'when I was'.