Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答较为自然，但表达有些重复且不够精炼。建议减少重复表达，使用更丰富的词汇来描述写作习惯，使回答更简洁且有逻辑。

Example: No, I don't write much. Mostly, I send messages to friends and family via social media apps like WeChat and TikTok because writing detailed daily entries feels time-consuming and tedious.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议使用更准确的句式和词汇，避免重复“clearly”，并且使内容更连贯。

Example: I like to write memos on my phone to keep track of my daily schedule so I know what tasks I have. Additionally, I sometimes note down delicious recipes to try later.

Suggestion: 回答表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用更自然的表达方式。

Example: I don't think what I write will change much because my life after university is quite routine, so I usually write about simple and everyday things.

Suggestion: 回答较好，但部分表达略显重复。建议使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，同时丰富词汇表达。

Example: I prefer typing because handwriting takes more time and effort. Tapping on my phone screen is much more convenient and efficient for taking notes quickly.

Suggestion: 回答内容完整且有逻辑，但“depends on my age”表达不够准确。建议用更自然的表达方式，并适当使用连接词。

Example: When I was a child, I kept a diary almost daily to record activities with classmates. However, after graduating from university, I gradually stopped because I became busier.

Suggestion: 回答内容丰富，但句子较长且结构复杂。建议简化句子，避免冗长，同时使用更准确的词汇。

Example: I often use mobile apps to record my life. For instance, TikTok lets me share short videos and posts about my daily activities with friends and others.

× I usually send text messages to my friends and family through the social media platforms like WeChat and Tiktok.

✓ I usually send text messages to my friends and family through social media platforms like WeChat and TikTok.

“social media platforms”前不需要定冠词“the”，因为这里指的是一般的社交媒体平台，而非特指某些平台。

× I don't write a lot about my daily life everyday.

✓ I don't write a lot about my daily life every day.

“everyday”是形容词，表示“日常的”，而这里需要副词短语“every day”，表示“每天”。

× I think that's troublesome and time consuming so I spend less time on that.

✓ I think that's troublesome and time-consuming, so I spend less time on that.

“time consuming”作为复合形容词时应连字符连接，且“time-consuming”是形容词，修饰前面的“that”。

× I would like to write about some memorandums on the mobile phone to help me clearly record the schedule of my daily life so that I can clearly know what is going to do today.

✓ I would like to write some memorandums on my mobile phone to help me clearly record the schedule of my daily life so that I can clearly know what I am going to do today.

“memorandums”是复数，前面不需要介词“about”，直接用动词“write”加宾语即可；“on the mobile phone”应改为“on my mobile phone”，表示“在我的手机上”；“what is going to do today”缺少主语，应为“what I am going to do today”。

× What's more, sometimes I will write about some delicious recipes on my mobile phone to teach me.

✓ What's more, sometimes I will write some delicious recipes on my mobile phone to teach myself.

“to teach me”应改为“to teach myself”，因为动作的承受者和执行者是同一个人，需用反身代词。

× I don't think the things I write will change because after my graduation from my university, my life is usually tedious and common, so that's the important things I have to write about is always simple and usual.

✓ I don't think the things I write will change because after my graduation from university, my life is usually tedious and common, so the important things I have to write about are always simple and usual.

“that's the important things”主谓不一致，应改为“the important things ... are”；“my graduation from my university”中“my university”前的“my”可省略。

× I prefer typing since handwriting is time consuming and troublesome.

✓ I prefer typing since handwriting is time-consuming and troublesome.

“time consuming”作为复合形容词应连字符连接。

× I just need to tap my finger on the screen of the mobile phone to take notes rather than use my hand to write something.

✓ I just need to tap my finger on the screen of my mobile phone to take notes rather than use my hand to write something.

“the mobile phone”应改为“my mobile phone”，表示特指自己的手机。

× It is convenient and highly efficient for me to record everything I want to write down.

✓ It is convenient and highly efficient for me to record everything I want to write down.

该句无明显语法错误，符合语法规则。

× It depends on my age.

✓ It depended on my age.

根据上下文，描述过去的情况，应使用过去时态“depended”。

× When I was a child, I kept a diary almost every day to record my daily life, such as the activities with my classmates.

✓ When I was a child, I kept a diary almost every day to record my daily life, such as activities with my classmates.

“the activities”中的定冠词“the”不必要，去掉更自然。

× But after my graduation from my university, I gradually stopped the habit of keeping a diary because I'm getting busier and busier.

✓ But after my graduation from university, I gradually stopped the habit of keeping a diary because I was getting busier and busier.

“I'm getting”应改为过去进行时“I was getting”，与前文过去时态保持一致；“my university”前的“my”可省略。

× I usually use the applications on my mobile phone to help me record my life.

✓ I usually use applications on my mobile phone to help me record my life.

“the applications”中的定冠词“the”不必要，去掉更自然。

× For example, TikTok is a short video social media application which we can upload many interesting short videos and articles to share our daily life with our friends and family as well as the users.

✓ For example, TikTok is a short video social media application where we can upload many interesting short videos and articles to share our daily life with our friends, family, and other users.

“which”改为“where”更合适，表示地点；“as well as the users”表达不自然，改为“and other users”；“friends and family”之间加逗号分隔。