Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "feelings" and "emotions" together, and "gazing my memories" is unclear. Try to use simpler, more natural expressions and limit your answer to about 4-5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I write quite often, mainly about everyday events and my personal feelings. Writing helps me reflect on my experiences, whether good or bad, and I enjoy reading my entries when I have free time.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and could be clearer. Avoid repeating "emotions" and "feelings" and try to organise your ideas logically. Also, the last part about selling a book is unclear and could be omitted or better explained.

Example: I enjoy writing diary entries because it helps me manage my emotions. Even on bad days, writing allows me to express my thoughts and reflect on my life experiences.

Suggestion: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid incomplete sentences.

Example: Yes, I believe what I write will change over time because people grow and have different experiences. These changes influence our thoughts and feelings, so my writing will naturally reflect that.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and contains unclear phrases like "heritage mass." Try to express your ideas more clearly and use appropriate vocabulary. Also, provide a balanced view with linking words.

Example: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and allows me to express myself better. In contrast, typing is faster but lacks the emotional connection that handwriting provides.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but could be more concise and natural. Avoid awkward phrases like "maintain your flow of emotion" and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: I usually write in my diary once a week since I don't have time daily. This helps me summarise my week and better understand my feelings.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be more concise. Use linking words to improve coherence and avoid redundancy such as "record my life" twice.

Example: Sometimes, I record videos or Instagram reels to share with friends. This visual method captures moments realistically and complements my written records.

× I write a lot, especially about novels and about some normal days, which is great for recording my feelings, my emotions and also gazing my memories.

✓ I write a lot, especially about novels and about some normal days, which is great for recording my feelings, my emotions and also gazing at my memories.

The verb 'gaze' requires the preposition 'at' when referring to looking steadily at something. Omitting 'at' is a preposition error (ID 11). Adding 'at' corrects the phrase to 'gazing at my memories.'

× Even though it's good or bad, I can still keep it as a record and I can just read over it when I feel like I have nothing to do as well.

✓ Even though it's good or bad, I can still keep it as a record and I can just read over it when I feel like I have nothing to do as well.

No modal verb error detected in this sentence; it is grammatically correct.

× I like to write a lot about some diary stuff because it helps me to soothe my emotions.

✓ I like to write a lot about some diary stuff because it helps me soothe my emotions.

The verb 'help' is often followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Using 'to soothe' is not incorrect but less natural. This is a style improvement rather than a strict grammar error.

× Even though if I have a bad day, I can still maintain to express my emotions, my feelings through writing a lot of things that relates to my life which maybe I can sell it as a book as well lately.

✓ Even if I have a bad day, I can still manage to express my emotions and feelings through writing a lot of things that relate to my life, which maybe I can sell as a book later.

The phrase 'Even though if' is incorrect; 'Even if' should be used (ID 16). 'Maintain to express' is incorrect; 'manage to express' is correct (ID 4). 'Relates' should be 'relate' to agree with plural 'things' (ID 1). 'Maybe I can sell it as a book as well lately' is awkward; 'which maybe I can sell as a book later' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× writing a lot of things that relates to my life

✓ writing a lot of things that relate to my life

The relative pronoun 'that' refers to 'things' which is plural, so the verb should be 'relate' not 'relates' to maintain subject-verb agreement (ID 1).

× which maybe I can sell it as a book as well lately.

✓ which maybe I can sell as a book later.

The pronoun 'it' is redundant because 'which' already refers to the previous clause. Removing 'it' corrects the sentence (ID 12). Also, 'lately' is not appropriate here; 'later' fits better for future intention.

× Yes, because people always change and it's normal, it's totally fine and especially people will experience a lot of ups and downs and also different experience will also shape a person differently.

✓ Yes, because people always change and it's normal, it's totally fine. Especially, people will experience a lot of ups and downs, and different experiences will also shape a person differently.

The original sentence is a run-on with multiple ideas joined improperly. Breaking it into two sentences and correcting 'experience' to plural 'experiences' improves clarity and grammar (ID 26 and ID 1).

× So I believe that it's a very normal thing to be happen and just keep it as.

✓ So I believe that it's a very normal thing to happen and just keep it as it is.

The phrase 'to be happen' is incorrect; it should be 'to happen' (ID 26). The phrase 'just keep it as' is incomplete; adding 'it is' completes the thought. This corrects sentence structure and pronoun use.

× If you do handwriting, you can feel the warmth inside the heritage mass and also it's better for you to express your own self because the way you write also represents the way you express yourself.

✓ If you do handwriting, you can feel the warmth inside the heritage mass, and also it's better for you to express yourself because the way you write also represents how you express yourself.

The phrase 'express your own self' is awkward; 'express yourself' is correct (ID 12). 'The way you write also represents the way you express yourself' is repetitive; changing the second 'way' to 'how' improves style.

× But typing lacks of such function.

✓ But typing lacks such a function.

The verb 'lack' is not followed by 'of' when used in this way. Also, 'function' should be preceded by an article 'a' (ID 11 and ID 22).

× I keep Diaries usually once a week because I don't have much time to write it every day, but I can just conclude my whole week by using words.

✓ I keep diaries usually once a week because I don't have much time to write every day, but I can just conclude my whole week by using words.

'Diaries' should not be capitalised (ID 22). Also, 'write it every day' is awkward; 'write every day' is better. 'Diaries' is plural and should be lowercase.

× And usually it's the best way to maintain your flow of emotion because it helps you to understand the way you feel.

✓ And usually it's the best way to maintain your flow of emotions because it helps you understand how you feel.

'Flow of emotion' should be plural 'emotions' (ID 1). 'Helps you to understand' is correct but 'helps you understand' is more natural. 'The way you feel' can be improved to 'how you feel' for clarity.

× I sometimes will try to record my life through some videos or Instagram reels because I can share it to my friend as well and it's also a great way to record things visually instead of writing because it can fully capture things with a realistic perspective.

✓ I sometimes try to record my life through some videos or Instagram reels because I can share them with my friends as well, and it's also a great way to record things visually instead of writing because it can fully capture things from a realistic perspective.

'Share it to my friend' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'share them with my friends' (ID 11 and ID 12). 'Things with a realistic perspective' should be 'things from a realistic perspective' (ID 11). Also, 'sometimes will try' is awkward; 'sometimes try' is better.