Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 你的回答不够自然且有语法错误，表达不清晰。建议直接回答问题，避免使用口语缩写和不完整句子，保持句子简洁且连贯。

Example: No, I don't write much these days because I have been busy since graduating from college.

Suggestion: 回答中有重复和不完整句子，建议直接表达喜欢写旅行经历的原因，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

Example: Although I don't write often, I like to write about my travel experiences because they are memorable and special to me.

Suggestion: 回答较好，但有语法错误和口语填充词。建议减少口语词汇，改进语法，使表达更正式和流畅。

Example: Yes, I think I will write more about my feelings in the future because as I grow up, my emotions become more complex.

Suggestion: 回答中有语法错误和不自然表达，建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构，避免口语填充词。

Example: I prefer handwriting because writing on paper gives me a special feeling that typing on a phone cannot replace.

Suggestion: 回答中语法不准确，表达不够自然。建议使用简单句子直接回答，并注意单复数和词汇搭配。

Example: I don't usually keep a diary, so I rarely write about my daily life.

Suggestion: 回答不完整且有语法错误，建议完整表达观点，避免口语填充词，使用连贯句子。

Example: I prefer to record my life through emotions and vivid pictures because when I look back at them, I can remember my experiences clearly.

× Not gonna lie, actually I even didn't write a word these days looking bad things.

✓ Not gonna lie, actually I haven't written a word these days looking at bad things.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the simple past tense 'didn't write' for an action that extends to the present. The present perfect tense 'haven't written' is appropriate here to indicate an action that has not occurred up to now.

× I graduated from the, uh, college.

✓ I graduated from college.

The article 'the' is unnecessary before 'college' when speaking generally. Removing 'the' improves sentence structure and clarity.

× I can't tell I read one thing, uh, this year.

✓ I can't say I have read anything this year.

The phrase 'I can't tell I read' is incorrect. 'Can't say' is the correct expression, and 'have read' (present perfect) is used to indicate an action within the current year.

× As I said before, I didn't write a thing these days, but if I need to write something down, I think it will be the experience of traveling or something special to me.

✓ As I said before, I haven't written a thing these days, but if I need to write something down, I think it will be about my travel experiences or something special to me.

The phrase 'didn't write' should be present perfect 'haven't written' to indicate recent time. Also, 'the experience of traveling' is better expressed as 'my travel experiences' for clarity and naturalness.

× So I think it is a very, umm, favorite way to.

✓ So I think it is a very favorite way to express myself.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'express myself' completes the thought and clarifies the meaning.

× For sure, I guess I will prefer to write more about the feelings in the future because, uh, when you are grow up, the feelings can be very, uh, complex.

✓ For sure, I guess I will prefer to write more about feelings in the future because, uh, when you grow up, feelings can be very complex.

The phrase 'when you are grow up' is incorrect; it should be 'when you grow up'. Also, 'the feelings' is better as 'feelings' in general.

× I'm gonna to say handwriting, The feeling of writing on the paper is a very excellent feeling to me which cannot, uh, bated by the tapping on the phone.

✓ I'm gonna say handwriting. The feeling of writing on paper is a very excellent feeling to me which cannot be replaced by tapping on the phone.

'Gonna to say' is incorrect; it should be 'gonna say'. 'Writing on the paper' is better as 'writing on paper'. 'Bated' is incorrect; the correct word is 'replaced'. Also, the sentence was a run-on and is better split into two.

× Actually, I don't have a habit of writing a diary, so I can say that seldom do I write any things about a daily life.

✓ Actually, I don't have a habit of writing a diary, so I can say that seldom do I write anything about daily life.

'Any things' is incorrect; the correct word is 'anything'. Also, 'a daily life' should be 'daily life' without the article.

× When it comes to the recording, I guess I'll prefer to use like, umm, emotions and uh, vivid pictures to record my life because when I looking back these, uh, recordings, I can.

✓ When it comes to recording, I guess I'll prefer to use emotions and vivid pictures to record my life because when I look back at these recordings, I can.

'When it comes to the recording' should be 'when it comes to recording' without 'the'. 'When I looking back' is incorrect; it should be 'when I look back'. Also, 'look back these' needs the preposition 'at' as in 'look back at these'.