Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, you could say: "I don't write much by hand these days because I usually type messages on my laptop or phone."

Example: I don't write much by hand these days because I usually type messages on my laptop or phone. Writing letters or textbooks is rare for me now.

Suggestion: Your answer is difficult to understand due to incorrect word choices and grammar. Focus on using correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons using linking words. For example, "I like to write postcards when I travel because it helps me remember the trip and share my experiences with family."

Example: I like to write postcards when I travel to other countries, such as Japan. This helps me remember my experiences and share them with my family back home.

Suggestion: Your answer has several grammar and vocabulary errors that make it hard to follow. Use clear linking words and correct terms to explain your ideas. For example, "Yes, I think my writing will change as I gain more experience and knowledge. When I was younger, my writing was simple, but now I try to express my thoughts more clearly."

Example: Yes, I think my writing will change as I gain more experience and knowledge. When I was younger, my writing was simple, but now I try to express my thoughts more clearly.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your preference clearly and explain why using linking words. For example, "I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the feeling of writing on paper. It feels more personal and traditional compared to typing."

Example: I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the feeling of writing on paper. It feels more personal and traditional compared to typing.

× I often use laptop or cell phone to type in some word and send a message to others.

✓ I often use a laptop or a cell phone to type some words and send messages to others.

The sentence lacks articles before 'laptop' and 'cell phone', which are countable nouns and require 'a' in singular form. Also, 'some word' should be plural 'some words' to match the context, and 'a message' should be plural 'messages' to agree with 'others'.

× We don't.

✓ I don't.

The pronoun 'We' is incorrect here because the speaker is referring to themselves only, so 'I' should be used.

× I don't write a letter or a textbook.

✓ I don't write letters or textbooks.

When talking about general habits, plural forms without articles are used. 'A letter or a textbook' implies specific items, but the speaker means writing letters or textbooks in general.

× If I need to ride, I like to ride some postcard when I'm traveling to like other country for like Japan, I will write a postcard to send my back to my home.

✓ If I need to write, I like to write some postcards when I'm traveling to other countries like Japan; I will write a postcard to send back to my home.

The word 'ride' is incorrect; it should be 'write'. 'Some postcard' should be plural 'some postcards' to match the context. 'Like other country for like Japan' is awkward; it should be 'other countries like Japan'. 'Send my back' is incorrect; it should be 'send back'.

× And when I reserved it, it made me feel memorialized of why doing.

✓ And when I received it, it made me feel nostalgic about why I was doing it.

'Reserved' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'received'. 'Memorialized' is not appropriate here; 'nostalgic' fits better. 'Of why doing' is ungrammatical; it should be 'about why I was doing it'.

× Yes, I believe since I ride will change over time as I grew up and have more experiment and knowledge, my writing style and idea tend to be more mutual.

✓ Yes, I believe my writing will change over time as I grow up and gain more experience and knowledge; my writing style and ideas tend to be more mature.

'I ride' should be 'my writing'. 'Grew up' should be 'grow up' to match present tense. 'Experiment' should be 'experience'. 'Idea' should be plural 'ideas'. 'Mutual' is incorrect; 'mature' is the correct adjective.

× For instance, when I was young my writing was simple, but right now I'm trying to express my suit more clearly.

✓ For instance, when I was young, my writing was simple, but right now I'm trying to express my thoughts more clearly.

'Suit' is incorrect in this context; 'thoughts' or 'ideas' is appropriate. The sentence otherwise is correct in tense.

× I prefer to handwriting.

✓ I prefer handwriting.

The verb 'prefer' is followed directly by a noun or gerund without 'to' when expressing preference for an activity. 'To handwriting' is incorrect.

× I'm very observed in the feeling of writing on paper to write some contents on a.

✓ I'm very focused on the feeling of writing on paper to write some content.

'Observed' is incorrect; 'focused' or 'attentive' fits better. 'Contents' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'content' is correct. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; 'on a' is unnecessary.

× It made me feel very like old style and as a way to hide my feeling unnatural.

✓ It makes me feel very old-fashioned and is a way to hide my feelings of awkwardness.

'Like old style' should be 'old-fashioned'. 'Feeling unnatural' is awkward; 'feelings of awkwardness' is clearer. 'Made' should be 'makes' to match present tense preference.