Part 1
Examiner
Do you write a lot?
Candidate
Yes, of course I'm person who preferred to write something on the paper every day just for my daily plans, schedules in some sort about the life. I just keep it done on the paper or in my journal. I find really good to write in my daily life.
Examiner
What do you like to write? Why?
Candidate
Well, when I need to write, I prefer to some Diaries in my daily life. It can record my memories every day, even after years I back to see it. I will remember the time that that day and my feelings that I will never have in order. So this is freely just for me to to.
Examiner
Do you think the things you write would change?
Candidate
Well, yes, when I was a child I just read some easy stories or I just even try to eat a small novel in my childhood. But now as I go to the university, I need to change what I write. I will write some academic essays and find all the sources to build it.
Examiner
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Candidate
Well, absolutely handwriting because I think when whenever I have to make some schedules my on my daily life, I prefer to write it because it's more logically widely and I think typing at the computer, I think it has some distance of me into the article.
Do you write a lot?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: 回答中语法和表达不够自然,句子结构混乱,建议简化句子,使用更自然的表达方式,并注意时态和冠词的使用。
Example: Yes, I write every day, usually in my journal. I like to plan my daily schedule and record important things on paper because it helps me stay organized.
What do you like to write? Why?
Score: 60.0Suggestion: 表达不够清晰,语法错误较多,建议使用更准确的词汇和句式,避免重复,表达原因时要更具体。
Example: I like to write diaries because they help me record my daily memories. When I read them later, I can remember how I felt and what happened on those days.
Do you think the things you write would change?
Score: 70.0Suggestion: 回答内容有些混乱,表达不够连贯,建议理清思路,使用连接词使句子更流畅,注意词汇的准确使用。
Example: Yes, my writing has changed over time. As a child, I read simple stories, but now at university, I write academic essays and research papers using various sources.
Do you prefer typing or handwriting when you are writing?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: 表达不够清晰,句子结构混乱,建议简化表达,明确说明原因,并使用恰当的连接词。
Example: I prefer handwriting because it helps me organize my thoughts better when I make daily schedules. Typing feels less personal and more distant to me.
× Yes, of course I'm person who preferred to write something on the paper every day just for my daily plans, schedules in some sort about the life.
✓ Yes, of course I'm a person who prefers to write something on paper every day just for my daily plans and schedules about life.
这里缺少冠词“a”,因为“person”是可数名词,单数形式前需要冠词。此外,“preferred”应为一般现在时“prefers”,因为描述的是习惯性动作。
× Yes, of course I'm person who preferred to write something on the paper every day just for my daily plans, schedules in some sort about the life.
✓ Yes, of course I'm a person who prefers to write something on paper every day just for my daily plans and schedules about life.
主语是第三人称单数“person”,谓语动词应使用第三人称单数形式“prefers”,而不是过去式“preferred”。
× I just keep it done on the paper or in my journal.
✓ I just keep it done on paper or in my journal.
“on the paper”中的“the”不合适,通常表达写在纸上用“on paper”更自然。
× I find really good to write in my daily life.
✓ I find it really good to write in my daily life.
缺少形式宾语“it”,使句子完整。
× I prefer to some Diaries in my daily life.
✓ I prefer to write some diaries in my daily life.
“prefer to some Diaries”结构不正确,应补充动词“write”使表达完整。
× even after years I back to see it.
✓ even after years I go back to see it.
缺少动词“go”,表达“回去看”的意思。
× I will remember the time that that day and my feelings that I will never have in order.
✓ I will remember the time of that day and my feelings that I will never have again.
“that that day”重复且表达不清,“in order”用法错误,应改为“again”表示“再也不会有”。
× So this is freely just for me to to.
✓ So this is just for me to be free.
句子结构混乱,表达不清,改为“just for me to be free”更符合语境。
× when I was a child I just read some easy stories or I just even try to eat a small novel in my childhood.
✓ When I was a child I just read some easy stories or I even tried to read a small novel in my childhood.
“try”应使用过去式“tried”,且“eat a small novel”应为“read a small novel”。
× But now as I go to the university, I need to change what I write.
✓ But now as I go to university, I need to change what I write.
“go to the university”通常表达去某具体大学,泛指上大学时用“go to university”。
× I will write some academic essays and find all the sources to build it.
✓ I will write some academic essays and find all the sources to support them.
“build it”用法不当,改为“support them”更符合写作语境。
× Well, absolutely handwriting because I think when whenever I have to make some schedules my on my daily life, I prefer to write it because it's more logically widely and I think typing at the computer, I think it has some distance of me into the article.
✓ Well, absolutely handwriting because I think whenever I have to make some schedules in my daily life, I prefer to write them because it's more logical and clear. I think typing on the computer creates some distance between me and the article.
“my on my daily life”语序错误,应为“in my daily life”;“some schedules”复数,代词应为“them”;“more logically widely”表达不当,应为“more logical and clear”;“distance of me into the article”表达错误,应为“distance between me and the article”。