Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答が少し不自然で冗長です。質問に直接答え、簡潔に書く頻度や理由を述べることが重要です。また、文法の誤りを減らし、情報を明確に伝えるために、より自然な表現を使いましょう。

Example: Yes, I write articles several times a week because I am a journalist covering science and development. I also conduct interviews to gather accurate information for my readers.

Suggestion: 回答が長すぎて焦点がぼやけています。質問に対して直接的な答えを述べ、その後に理由や具体例を簡潔に説明しましょう。また、語彙の選択を改善し、文法の誤りを減らすことが必要です。

Example: I enjoy writing detailed feature articles about health topics like cholesterol because it allows me to explain complex issues clearly and share different opinions with readers.

Suggestion: 回答が不明瞭で繰り返しが多いです。話す際は、無駄な間投詞を減らし、明確で論理的な説明を心がけましょう。具体的な例を使って、文章の意味をはっきりさせることが大切です。

Example: Yes, I believe my articles can influence change. For example, readers sometimes contact the people I interviewed, which can lead to new business opportunities or academic collaborations.

Suggestion: 表現が不自然で文法的な誤りがあります。理由を明確に述べ、接続詞を使って論理的に説明しましょう。また、語彙を適切に選び、簡潔に答えることが重要です。

Example: I prefer typing because it is faster and more efficient for writing many stories on the computer. Also, I can easily review and edit my articles, which is difficult with handwriting.

× I always like to separate articles in a week because I'm a journalist and I'm covering these stories about the science and development.

✓ I always like to write several articles in a week because I'm a journalist and I'm covering stories about science and development.

'Separate articles' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'write articles'. Also, 'these stories about the science and development' is awkward; 'stories about science and development' is more natural. 'Several' is a better quantifier than 'separate' here.

× Sorry, I have to meet a lot of people and conduct some interviews so that I can get a good information for the readers.

✓ Sorry, I have to meet a lot of people and conduct some interviews so that I can get good information for the readers.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should not be preceded by 'a'. The correct form is 'good information' without 'a'.

× I like to write a very longer feature at Cholesterol because I have to construct a lot of information and express my feelings and their opinions to others, which makes some people understand very complicated programs such as social issues or foreign affairs.

✓ I like to write a much longer feature on Cholesterol because I have to gather a lot of information and express my feelings and their opinions to others, which helps some people understand very complicated topics such as social issues or foreign affairs.

'Very longer' is incorrect; 'much longer' is the correct comparative adverb. 'At Cholesterol' should be 'on Cholesterol' as the topic. 'Construct' is not appropriate for information; 'gather' or 'collect' is better. 'Makes some people understand' should be 'helps some people understand'. 'Programs' is incorrect in this context; 'topics' or 'issues' is better.

× Yes, I think so. Umm, in some cases, some readers read my, uh, article and uh, choose to, uh, contact the people for I interviewed and after that, umm, new chance of the business or the Academy can be accurate.

✓ Yes, I think so. Umm, in some cases, some readers read my article and choose to contact the people I interviewed, and after that, new business or academic opportunities can arise.

'Contact the people for I interviewed' is incorrect; it should be 'contact the people I interviewed'. 'New chance of the business or the Academy can be accurate' is awkward and unclear; 'new business or academic opportunities can arise' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I prefer typing to handwriting because it's very useful and very efficient to lighten much more stories in the PC.

✓ I prefer typing to handwriting because it's very useful and very efficient to write many more stories on the PC.

'Lighten much more stories' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'write many more stories'. Also, 'in the PC' should be 'on the PC'.

× And after I like the articles I can recheck and modify the content which the handwriting cannot do in necessary.

✓ Also, after I finish the articles, I can recheck and modify the content, which handwriting cannot do when necessary.

Starting a sentence with 'And' is informal; 'Also' is better. 'After I like the articles' is incorrect; it should be 'after I finish the articles'. 'Which the handwriting cannot do in necessary' is ungrammatical; it should be 'which handwriting cannot do when necessary'.