Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and a bit unclear due to run-on sentences and lack of punctuation. Try to make your response more concise and structured by using shorter sentences and clear punctuation. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

Example: Yes, I write a lot every day because I enjoy expressing my feelings. I usually write in my notebook, including stories and poems about my daily experiences.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat vague and incomplete. Try to provide a clear topic sentence and then add specific supporting details with linking words to make your answer coherent and complete.

Example: I like to write about my daily experiences and feelings because it helps me understand my emotions better. For example, I often write about situations I face and how I plan to handle them.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and explain your thoughts more clearly. Also, avoid vague expressions like 'that's it' and try to elaborate your points.

Example: Yes, the things I write often change because my feelings and experiences change over time. However, sometimes my writing reflects a consistent reality of my life without much change.

Suggestion: Your answer has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct sentence structures and clearer expressions. Also, provide a reason and a contrast to make your answer more complete and natural.

Example: I prefer handwriting because I feel it expresses my thoughts and feelings more personally. However, sometimes I use typing for convenience and speed.

× I write many kind of stories, poem and lots of.

✓ I write many kinds of stories, poems, and lots more.

The phrase 'many kind of stories, poem and lots of' contains singular/plural mismatches. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' to match 'many', and 'poem' should be plural 'poems' to be consistent with the list. Also, 'lots of' is incomplete and should be 'lots more' or 'lots of things' to be clear.

× I love to write every circumstance of things like what happened and what should I do and what I feel about this situations.

✓ I love to write about every circumstance, like what happened, what I should do, and how I feel about these situations.

The phrase 'write every circumstance of things' is incorrect; the verb 'write' is usually followed by 'about' when indicating topics. Also, 'this situations' should be 'these situations' to match plural form. The sentence structure is improved by adding commas and rephrasing for clarity.

× I love to write every circumstance of things like what happened and what should I do and what I feel about this situations.

✓ I love to write about every circumstance, like what happened, what I should do, and how I feel about these situations.

The word 'situations' is plural, so the demonstrative pronoun should be 'these' instead of 'this' to agree in number.

× Frequently its change, but sometimes it's been surreal and I don't feel that a change.

✓ Frequently it changes, but sometimes it's surreal and I don't feel that there is a change.

The verb 'change' should be in the third person singular present tense 'changes' to agree with the subject 'it'. Also, 'it's been surreal' is past perfect tense and inconsistent with the present context; 'it's surreal' fits better. The phrase 'I don't feel that a change' is incomplete and should be 'I don't feel that there is a change' for clarity.

× Frequently its change, but sometimes it's been surreal and I don't feel that a change.

✓ Frequently it changes, but sometimes it's surreal and I don't feel that there is a change.

The pronoun 'its' is possessive and incorrect here; the subject pronoun 'it' is needed. Also, the sentence benefits from clearer phrasing as explained above.

× I prefer handwriting because it's I feel it's came from heart, what I feel and what I think.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I feel it comes from the heart, expressing what I feel and what I think.

The phrase 'it's I feel it's came' is ungrammatical and confusing. 'It's' should be removed before 'I feel'. The verb 'came' is past tense and should be present tense 'comes' to match the present context. Also, 'from heart' should be 'from the heart' with the definite article.

× I prefer handwriting because it's I feel it's came from heart, what I feel and what I think.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I feel it comes from the heart, expressing what I feel and what I think.

The phrase 'from heart' is missing the definite article 'the'. The correct phrase is 'from the heart'.