Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is quite long and a bit repetitive. Try to be more concise and clear. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. Also, correct grammar mistakes like 'alongside with' should be 'alongside' and 'personal essays poetic' is unclear.

Example: Yes, I write a lot. I started when I was nine, creating fiction stories with drawings to express my ideas. Over time, my passion grew, and I began writing personal essays as well.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and repetitive. Try to organize your ideas better and use linking words to clarify your preferences. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'many detailed information' and use correct grammar.

Example: I prefer writing essays on given topics because I enjoy exploring detailed information. Although I sometimes try personal essays, I find topic-based essays more engaging.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but has some repetition and minor grammar errors. Try to avoid repeating words like 'our the our' and use linking words to make your answer smoother.

Example: Yes, I believe my writing changes over time because our beliefs and perspectives evolve. For instance, when I read my writing from three months ago, I often disagree with it.

Suggestion: Your answer has some repetition and unclear phrases like 'allows me to my and my thoughts'. Try to be more precise and avoid repeating words. Use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

Example: Although many prefer typing, I have always preferred handwriting since childhood because it helps my thoughts flow more naturally onto the paper.

× I used to write fiction stories alongside with little drawings to express the stories more and my passion for writing began to grow more and more and I started writing about personal essays poetic.

✓ I used to write fiction stories alongside little drawings to express the stories more, and my passion for writing began to grow more and more, and I started writing poetic personal essays.

The phrase 'alongside with' is incorrect; 'alongside' should be used without 'with'. Also, 'personal essays poetic' is an incorrect word order; the adjective 'poetic' should come before the noun phrase 'personal essays'. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I used to write fiction stories alongside with little drawings to express the stories more and my passion for writing began to grow more and more and I started writing about personal essays poetic.

✓ I used to write fiction stories alongside little drawings to express the stories more, and my passion for writing began to grow more and more, and I started writing poetic personal essays.

The preposition 'with' is unnecessary after 'alongside'. 'Alongside' already means 'together with', so adding 'with' is redundant and incorrect.

× I started writing about personal essays poetic.

✓ I started writing poetic personal essays.

In English, adjectives usually come before the noun they modify. The correct order is 'poetic personal essays' rather than 'personal essays poetic'.

× I do like to try to write personal ones, but most of the time I take a given topic and I write many detailed information about that.

✓ I do like to try to write personal ones, but most of the time I take a given topic and I write a lot of detailed information about it.

'Information' is an uncountable noun, so 'many' is incorrect. The correct quantifier is 'a lot of'. Also, 'about that' should be 'about it' to refer properly to the topic.

× I do believe that our the our beliefs and the way we see some certain subjects or topics do change over time.

✓ I do believe that our beliefs and the way we see certain subjects or topics do change over time.

The phrase 'our the our' is redundant and incorrect. Also, 'some certain' is redundant; 'certain' alone suffices. Removing the extra words clarifies the sentence.

× I could go back and read what I wrote three months ago and I would not agree on that.

✓ I could go back and read what I wrote three months ago and I would not agree with that.

The verb 'agree' is followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating agreement with a statement or idea. Using 'on' is incorrect in this context.

× I do prefer handwriting and because it allows me to my and my thoughts to flow more into the paper.

✓ I do prefer handwriting because it allows me and my thoughts to flow more onto the paper.

The conjunction 'and because' is redundant; 'because' alone suffices to connect the clauses. Also, 'to my and my thoughts' is incorrect; it should be 'me and my thoughts'. Finally, 'into the paper' is better expressed as 'onto the paper' when referring to writing on a surface.