Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 你的回答表达不够自然，语法和用词存在错误，且句子较长且不连贯。建议简化句子结构，避免语法错误，并且直接回答问题。

Example: I don't write very often. Usually, I only write letters to my close friends to share my thoughts, but I rarely write essays or public posts.

Suggestion: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，且句子不完整。建议使用正确的时态和表达方式，清晰说明喜欢写日记和信件的原因。

Example: I like writing diaries and letters to my best friend because I feel comfortable sharing my true feelings without worrying about strangers reading them.

Suggestion: 回答不够连贯，语法错误较多，表达含糊。建议简洁明了地说明写作内容会随着时间变化，并举例说明。

Example: Yes, my writing changes over time. For example, when I read old letters with my best friend, I notice that my thoughts and feelings have changed a lot.

Suggestion: 回答中语法和表达不准确，句子结构混乱。建议清晰表达喜欢手写的原因，并用连词连接句子。

Example: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate and imagine more. When I type, I often get distracted.

× I only write something occasionally as I'm not the kind of people who like to express 1's own opinions and I just share my opinion with my best friends with letters, so I never write some essays or destinations publicly.

✓ I only write something occasionally as I'm not the kind of person who likes to express my own opinions and I just share my opinion with my best friends through letters, so I never write essays or descriptions publicly.

这里“the kind of people”应改为“the kind of person”，因为“kind”后面接单数名词；“people”是复数，和“kind”不匹配；“like”应改为“likes”，主语是单数“person”；“1's own opinions”应改为“my own opinions”，代词使用错误；“with letters”应改为“through letters”，介词使用错误；“some essays or destinations”中“destinations”应为“descriptions”，语义错误。

× I prefer write some diary or write a letter to my best friend because I like this this kind of writing with no strangers notice it and it can spread my own really feelings.

✓ I prefer writing a diary or writing a letter to my best friend because I like this kind of writing that no strangers notice and it can express my true feelings.

“prefer”后应接动名词形式，故“prefer write”应改为“prefer writing”；“some diary”应为“a diary”，日记是不可数名词；“this this”重复，应删去一个；“with no strangers notice it”结构不正确，应改为“that no strangers notice”；“spread my own really feelings”表达不准确，应改为“express my true feelings”。

× Yes, definitely they are always changing and once a time I showed my friend, my best friend shared the letters I sent to her and we read these letters together.

✓ Yes, definitely they are always changing and once I showed my friend, my best friend shared the letters I had sent to her and we read these letters together.

“once a time”表达错误，应为“once”；“I sent to her”应使用过去完成时“had sent”，因为动作发生在过去另一个过去动作之前。

× We found that a lot of my thoughts have a big change and. MMM.

✓ We found that a lot of my thoughts have changed a lot.

“have a big change and. MMM.”结构不完整且“and”连接词使用错误，应改为完整句子“have changed a lot”。

× Well, I really prefer handwriting because of one I hand.

✓ Well, I really prefer handwriting because of one hand.

“because of one I hand”结构不正确，代词使用错误，应改为“because of one hand”，意为“因为一只手”。

× When I do some handwriting I have a lot of things to image and it can more concentrate on my writing.

✓ When I do some handwriting, I have a lot of things to imagine and it helps me concentrate more on my writing.

“image”应为动词“imagine”；“can more concentrate”结构错误，应改为“helps me concentrate more”；句中缺少逗号。

× But however when I typing some things I feel I was so disturbed.

✓ But when I type some things, I feel I am so disturbed.

“But however”重复使用转折词，应去掉“however”；“when I typing”应为“when I type”；“I was so disturbed”时态不符，应为“I am so disturbed”。