Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors, such as 'write general' and 'admire from generals'. To improve, try to use clearer and more precise vocabulary, and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I write quite a bit on weekends, mainly about my daily activities and experiences during my placements. This practice helps me reflect on my growth and improve my productivity. I find writing to be a valuable tool for personal development.

Suggestion: Your answer has some unclear phrases like 'makes my time skills better' and 'reading my generals'. To improve, use more precise vocabulary and correct grammar. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide specific reasons for your preferences.

Example: I enjoy writing about my work and daily activities because it helps me develop personally. For example, by reflecting on my tasks, I have improved my time management skills and become more organized.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat confusing and lacks clarity. To improve, respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'might be' and 'it's unpredictable' without explanation.

Example: Yes, the things I write have changed over time. When I was younger, I focused on managing my schedule and staying organized, but now I write more about my experiences and personal growth.

Suggestion: Your answer is brief and contains unclear terms like 'write generals'. To improve, provide a clear preference with reasons, use linking words to connect ideas, and avoid filler words like 'uh'.

Example: I prefer typing on my laptop because it keeps my writing secure with a password. However, I sometimes write by hand when I want to brainstorm ideas more freely.

× Yes, on my weekends I write general on what I do, on my placements and it helps me to grow as a person and also for my productivity.

✓ Yes, on my weekends I write generally about what I do, on my placements and it helps me to grow as a person and also for my productivity.

The word 'general' is incorrectly used here; the correct adverb form is 'generally' to describe the manner of writing. Using 'generally' properly modifies the verb 'write' to indicate frequency or manner.

× There is something I always admire from generals.

✓ There is something I always admire about my journals.

The word 'generals' is likely a mispronunciation or misspelling of 'journals'. Also, the preposition 'from' is incorrect here; 'about' is the correct preposition to express admiration towards something.

× I like to write about my work and my daily activities, which helps me to grow as a person.

✓ I like to write about my work and my daily activities, which help me to grow as a person.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'my work and my daily activities' (plural), so the verb should be plural 'help' instead of singular 'helps' to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Uh, makes my time skills better and there's a lot of things that I have improved my in myself after reading my generals.

✓ Uh, it improves my time management skills and there are a lot of things that I have improved in myself after reading my journals.

The phrase 'makes my time skills better' is awkward; 'improves my time management skills' is clearer. Also, 'there's a lot of things' should be 'there are a lot of things' because 'things' is plural. The phrase 'improved my in myself' is incorrect; it should be 'improved in myself'. 'Generals' should be 'journals'.

× Might be because when I was younger I used to write about my schedule that how can I manage my schedule and how can I be very organized, but now things would have changed so far.

✓ Maybe because when I was younger I used to write about my schedule, how I could manage it and how I could be very organized, but now things have changed so far.

The phrase 'Might be' is incomplete; 'Maybe' is more appropriate here. The question form 'how can I manage' should be changed to the statement form 'how I could manage' to fit the past tense narrative. 'Would have changed so far' is incorrect; 'have changed so far' is correct to indicate changes up to now.

× So definitely it's unpredictable, but yes, I can.

✓ So definitely it's unpredictable, but yes, I think it can.

The modal verb 'can' alone is vague here; adding 'I think it can' clarifies the meaning. Also, 'it's unpredictable' is fine, but the sentence benefits from clearer expression.

× I used to write generals on my laptop because it is password protected.

✓ I used to write journals on my laptop because it is password protected.

The word 'generals' is incorrect; it should be 'journals'. The tense 'used to write' is correct for past habitual action. 'Is password protected' is present tense and appropriate here because the laptop's password protection is a current fact.