Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of saying 'all of these patient information and what to do this day shift to finishing time', you can say 'all the patient information and tasks during my day shift'. Also, keep your answer concise and within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I write a lot because I am a nursing officer. I need to document all the patient information and the tasks I perform during my day shift. This documentation is important for patient care and communication with other staff.

Suggestion: Focus on making your answer clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain why. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I like to write patient details because it helps me keep clear records of my work. Also, it ensures accuracy in my reports.'

Example: I like to write patient details because it helps me keep clear and accurate records. This is important to track the care I provide and to communicate with other healthcare professionals effectively.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and grammar. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then explain your reasoning. For example, 'I don't think the information I write changes because it is accurate and official documentation. Once recorded, it remains the same throughout the day.'

Example: I don't think the things I write would change because the documentation must be accurate and final. Once I record the patient information, it stays the same for the entire day to ensure consistency.

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent and grammatically correct. Use linking words to compare handwriting and typing. For example, 'It depends on the situation. Usually, I prefer handwriting because it is clearer and more convenient. However, typing allows me to make changes easily.'

Example: It depends on the situation. Usually, I prefer handwriting because it is clearer and more convenient for quick notes. However, typing is useful when I need to edit or share documents electronically.

× I need to be right on what I have did in my time and so I like it too.

✓ I need to be right on what I have done in my time and so I like it too.

The verb 'did' is the simple past form, but after 'have' we need the past participle form 'done'. So, 'have did' is incorrect; it should be 'have done'. This is a common error in using the present perfect tense.

× I need to document all of these patient information and what to do this day shift to finishing time.

✓ I need to document all of this patient information and what to do from this day shift to finishing time.

'Information' is an uncountable noun and should be treated as singular, so 'these patient information' is incorrect. It should be 'this patient information'. Also, 'all of these' is used for plural countable nouns, not uncountable nouns like 'information'.

× I need to document all of these patient information and what to do this day shift to finishing time.

✓ I need to document all of this patient information and what to do from this day shift to finishing time.

The phrase 'what to do this day shift to finishing time' lacks the preposition 'from' to indicate the time period. Correct preposition use is important to clarify meaning.

× I write a lot in my day in every time.

✓ I write a lot every day all the time.

The phrase 'in my day in every time' is incorrect. 'Every time' and 'in my day' are misused here. The correct expression is 'every day all the time' to indicate frequency.

× I like to write the patient details and it's made clear about my brief time and at the same time I need to be right on what I have did in my time and so I like it too.

✓ I like to write the patient details clearly during my brief time, and at the same time I need to be accurate about what I have done in my time, so I like it too.

The phrase 'it's made clear about my brief time' is awkward and incorrect. Also, 'be right on' is better expressed as 'be accurate about'. Pronouns and expressions need to be clearer and more natural.

× I don't think so, because I write that things it's a absolutely correct one or documentation that couldn't be changed at a overall the day.

✓ I don't think so, because I write those things; it's absolutely correct documentation that couldn't be changed throughout the day.

'That things' should be 'those things' (plural demonstrative pronoun). 'It's a absolutely correct one' is incorrect; 'absolutely correct documentation' is better. 'At a overall the day' is incorrect preposition and article use; 'throughout the day' is correct. Modal verb 'couldn't' is used correctly here.

× I don't think so, because I write that things it's a absolutely correct one or documentation that couldn't be changed at a overall the day.

✓ I don't think so, because I write those things; it's absolutely correct documentation that couldn't be changed throughout the day.

'That things' is incorrect; 'those things' is the correct plural demonstrative pronoun. Also, the sentence structure is improved by splitting into two clauses with a semicolon.

× Also can be a raise a cut in this way, but typing also can make changes.

✓ Also, it can raise a cut in this way, but typing can also make changes.

The phrase 'can be a raise a cut' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'it can raise a cut'. Also, 'typing also can make changes' is better as 'typing can also make changes' for correct adverb placement.