Writing— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrases, such as 'free dharm' and 'my box'. To improve, try to use clear and correct vocabulary, and keep your sentences concise and relevant. Also, avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

Example: Yes, I write quite often, especially on my personal website. I enjoy sharing stories about my life and sometimes I write fiction as well.

Suggestion: Your answer is difficult to understand due to incorrect grammar and unclear expressions like 'when I overwhelming' and 'help a lot of state writing is tell me to shut my energy'. To improve, focus on expressing your ideas clearly and logically, using correct grammar and vocabulary. Also, try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

Example: I like to write because it helps me relax and express my feelings. Writing allows me to share my personal experiences and clear my mind.

Suggestion: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases such as 'my writing skills each an overtime' and 'my personal experience is channel'. To improve, try to use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, provide a more detailed explanation to support your opinion.

Example: Yes, I believe my writing will improve over time because it depends on my personal experiences. As I grow older, I will have more stories to tell.

Suggestion: Your answer contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'adding head lighting'. To improve, use correct grammar and clarify your ideas. Also, explain your preference with specific reasons and linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: I prefer typing on my phone because it is convenient and saves time. Also, handwriting can be slower and less efficient for me.

× I love to write in my website, especially when I have a free dharm.

✓ I love to write on my website, especially when I have free time.

The phrase 'a free dharm' is incorrect; it should be 'free time' to express having available time. Also, the preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'website'; 'on' is the correct preposition here (related to preposition use).

× I like to spend my time to share my story in my box.

✓ I like to spend my time sharing my story in my blog.

The phrase 'spend my time to share' is incorrect; it should be 'spend my time sharing' (verb + -ing form). Also, 'in my box' is unclear and likely a misuse; 'in my blog' or 'on my blog' is appropriate for sharing stories online.

× Additionally, I love to write a fiction.

✓ Additionally, I love to write fiction.

'Fiction' is an uncountable noun here, so the article 'a' should be omitted.

× I love to write because when I overwhelming and help a lot of state writing is tell me to shut my energy and relaxing.

✓ I love to write because when I feel overwhelmed, writing helps me to release my energy and relax.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Overwhelming' should be 'feel overwhelmed' (verb form). The phrase 'help a lot of state writing is tell me to shut my energy and relaxing' is incorrect and unclear; it is corrected to express the intended meaning clearly.

× So I love to write because it helped me to expect about my feeling and share my personal experience.

✓ So I love to write because it helps me to express my feelings and share my personal experiences.

'Expect about my feeling' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'express my feelings'. Also, 'helped' should be 'helps' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Experience' should be plural if referring to multiple instances.

× Yes, I believe my writing skills each an overtime.

✓ Yes, I believe my writing skills improve over time.

The phrase 'each an overtime' is incorrect. The intended meaning is that skills improve gradually, so 'improve over time' is correct. 'Each' is unnecessary here.

× Because it depends on my personal experience is channel.

✓ Because it depends on my personal experiences and channel.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Is channel' is incorrect; likely intended to say 'and channel' or 'and my channel'. The conjunction 'and' connects the two ideas.

× When I go up, I have a lot of story in my life.

✓ When I grow up, I will have a lot of stories in my life.

'Go up' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'grow up'. Also, 'have' should be future tense 'will have' to indicate future expectation. 'Story' should be plural 'stories'.

× I prefer to typing in my phone because it convenient and save my time.

✓ I prefer typing on my phone because it is convenient and saves my time.

'Prefer to typing' is incorrect; it should be 'prefer typing' (verb + -ing form). The preposition with 'phone' is 'on', not 'in'. 'It convenient' needs the verb 'is'. 'Save' should be 'saves' to agree with singular subject 'it'.

× Additionally, adding head lighting is waste my time.

✓ Additionally, adding highlighting wastes my time.

'Is waste' is incorrect; the verb should be 'wastes' to agree with singular subject 'adding highlighting'. Also, 'head lighting' is likely a misspelling of 'highlighting'.