Flowers— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally natural and relevant, but it could be more concise and structured. Avoid repeating the question and try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, use correct pronouns and grammar, for example, say "My mom and I" instead of "Me and my mom."

Example: Yes, I absolutely love flowers. We have a garden in front of our house where I usually do gardening on weekends. My mom and I have been thinking about setting up a nursery once I have settled my career, and we might do it soon.

Suggestion: Your answer contains some redundancy and unclear parts. Try to avoid filler words like "umm" and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically and be more specific about the festival. Also, avoid repeating phrases like "absolutely love flowers" twice.

Example: Yes, my best friend Pankaj loves flowers too. He often tells me about nearby nurseries and plant groups he has joined on Telegram. He has taught me a lot about different species of plants and animals. In fact, he is planning to visit Bangkok soon to attend a flower festival.

Suggestion: Your answer provides good information but lacks coherence and has some grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect sentences and avoid repetition. Also, try to form complete sentences and be more specific about the types of flowers and the significance of the tulip gardens.

Example: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. I live in Kathua, a hilly area in the northern region of Jammu and Kashmir, which has beautiful landscapes and valleys. Many tourists from all over the country visit my state, especially in March, to see the unique tulip gardens that cannot be found anywhere else.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains some grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating phrases like "I used to" multiple times. Also, clarify your ideas and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Capitalize proper nouns correctly, such as "Peacocks."

Example: I don't take photos of flowers daily anymore because my schedule is very busy. However, during my college years, I often photographed flowers in the lush green gardens in front of my hostel, where peacocks also roamed. I used to share these photos with my family on WhatsApp.

Suggestion: Your answer covers the topic but is somewhat informal and contains filler phrases like "you know." Try to be more formal and concise. Use linking words to connect ideas and clarify the influence of modernization and social media on the practice of sending flowers.

Example: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to each other on occasions such as funerals, birthdays, anniversaries, and religious ceremonies like pujas. This practice was less common in the past, but with modernization and the rise of social media, sending flowers has become a popular and meaningful gift.

× Me and my mom really wanted to set up a nursery, you know, once I've sorted my career and we might do it anytime soon.

✓ My mom and I really want to set up a nursery, you know, once I've sorted my career and we might do it anytime soon.

The pronoun 'Me' is incorrectly used as the subject of the sentence. The correct subject pronoun is 'I'. Also, the verb tense should be consistent with the intended meaning; 'wanted' should be 'want' to match the future plan context.

× Yes, my best friend Pankaj, we absolutely love flowers.

✓ Yes, my best friend Pankaj and I absolutely love flowers.

The pronoun 'we' is incorrectly used without a proper subject connection. It should be 'my best friend Pankaj and I' to correctly indicate the subjects who love flowers.

× He always keeps on telling me about all the nurseries which are nearby and even all the plant groups that he has joined over telegram.

✓ He always keeps telling me about all the nurseries nearby and even all the plant groups that he has joined on Telegram.

The preposition 'over' is incorrectly used with 'Telegram'. The correct preposition is 'on' when referring to platforms or apps. Also, 'keeps on telling' can be simplified to 'keeps telling' for better flow.

× He has told me so much about the different kind of species of flora and fauna, both umm.

✓ He has told me so much about the different kinds of species of flora and fauna, both umm.

The phrase 'different kind of species' is incorrect because 'species' is plural, so 'kind' should be pluralized to 'kinds' to agree in number.

× So there there are several type of flowers.

✓ So there are several types of flowers.

The phrase 'several type' is incorrect because 'several' requires a plural noun. 'Type' should be pluralized to 'types'.

× A tourist from all over the country.

✓ Tourists come from all over the country.

The original sentence is a fragment without a verb. It needs to be restructured to form a complete sentence with a subject and verb.

× They visit my state specially during March to see Tulip gardens which are not found anywhere else.

✓ They visit my state especially during March to see tulip gardens which are not found anywhere else.

The adverb 'specially' is incorrectly used; the correct word is 'especially' when emphasizing a particular time or reason.

× It had a lush green gardens right in front of my hostel and there were several Peacocks and gardens.

✓ It had a lush green garden right in front of my hostel and there were several peacocks and gardens.

The phrase 'a lush green gardens' is incorrect because 'a' requires a singular noun. 'Gardens' should be singular 'garden'. Also, 'Peacocks' should be lowercase unless a proper noun.

× I used to capture it all the time.

✓ I used to capture them all the time.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to multiple items (flowers, peacocks, gardens). The correct plural pronoun is 'them'.

× I used to send it to my family group as well in the WhatsApp.

✓ I used to send them to my family group as well on WhatsApp.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect with 'WhatsApp'; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to refer to multiple photos.

× And it didn't used to be such a common practice in the past.

✓ And it didn't use to be such a common practice in the past.

After 'didn't', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'used' should be 'use'.

× But as we are modernizing with that, people have, you know, taken this approach like flowers could be a big gift with social media.

✓ But as we are modernizing, people have, you know, taken this approach that flowers could be a big gift with social media.

The phrase 'like flowers could be a big gift' is incorrect; 'like' should be replaced with 'that' to introduce a clause properly.