Names— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes — my name has a special meaning), then give one precise explanation. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect words (e.g., “returned” and “a lot of food from heaven”). Use linking words like “because” or “which” to connect ideas.

Example: Yes — my name has a special meaning. It comes from the Quran and is considered sacred by Muslims because it means “food from heaven.” For this reason, my family chose it to reflect our faith.

Suggestion: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and specific details. Avoid unclear fragments and unrelated words (e.g., “A2 on a heater,” “our meter”). Explain briefly why you prefer modern or Persian names and use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

Example: I would choose a modern name for my children because I like names that sound fresh and international. For example, I prefer Persian names that begin and end with the letter A, such as ‘Ariana,’ because they are elegant and easy to pronounce in many languages.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then one clear reason with a brief detail. Avoid confusing phrases and unnecessary numbers. Use linking words such as “because” or “so.”

Example: No, nobody in my family has the same name as me. My name is unique and traditional, which is why my parents did not repeat it for other relatives.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific comparisons with examples and linking words. Say what has changed and why (e.g., trends, globalization, or celebrity influence). Avoid vague terms like “in ages” and be precise.

Example: Yes, there are differences. Today parents often choose modern or internationally appealing names because of globalization and media influence, while in the past they preferred traditional Persian or religious names that reflect family or cultural values.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid unclear comparisons and incorrect name examples. Use linking words like “for example” and “because.”

Example: Yes, some names are more popular in China today. For example, names that begin and end with the letter A, such as ‘Aisha’ or ‘Anya,’ have become trendy because they sound modern and are easy to pronounce internationally.

× Yes, my name is returned by a holy book which is Quran and for Muslims is so precious.

✓ Yes, my name comes from the holy book the Quran, which is very precious to Muslims.

The student incorrectly used 'a holy book' and omitted 'the' before 'Quran.' Use 'the' with specific, unique things like 'the Quran.' 'Is returned by' is unnatural; 'comes from' correctly expresses origin. Also 'for Muslims is so precious' should be 'which is very precious to Muslims' for correct word order and idiomatic phrasing.

× My name means a lot of food from heaven and its holy name from the book.

✓ My name means 'plenty of food from heaven' and is a sacred name from that book.

The phrase 'a lot of food from heaven' is awkward as a name meaning; use 'plenty of food from heaven' or put it in quotes. 'Its holy name from the book' incorrectly uses 'its' and word order; 'is a sacred name from that book' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× I prefer modern names, such as names which started with A and ends with A2 on a heater for example, and our meter.

✓ I prefer modern names, for example names that start with A and end with A.

The original sentence contains unrelated and garbled phrases ('A2 on a heater' and 'our meter') and inconsistent verb forms ('started' vs 'ends'). Use parallel structure: 'names that start... and end...' and remove irrelevant fragments.

× Those are Asians. Persian names.

✓ Those are Asian or Persian names.

Fragmented sentences should be combined. Use 'Asian or Persian names' to correctly categorize names; 'Those are Asians' incorrectly labels names as people.

× However in nowadays they're modern too.

✓ However, nowadays they are modern too.

Use 'nowadays' as an adverb at the start or middle and avoid 'in nowadays.' Also expand the contraction for clarity and ensure correct word order: 'nowadays they are modern too.'

× No, my name is so special because in those ages, I mean 18 names like law.

✓ No, my name is very special because in those times there were many names like that.

'Those ages' is unnatural; use 'those times.' 'I mean 18 names like law' is unclear and likely a wrong plural/specific number usage. Replace with 'there were many names like that' to fix plurality and clarity.

× Very unique but not modern in these days.

✓ It is very unique but not modern these days.

Sentence fragment should be complete and use 'these days' without 'in.' Combine with a subject 'It is' for grammatical correctness.

× I believe yes, because in ages some names become famous and more popular than past.

✓ I believe so, because over time some names become more famous and more popular than in the past.

Use 'so' after 'I believe.' 'In ages' is incorrect; use 'over time.' 'Become' is okay with present generalization but add 'more' and 'in the past' for correct comparison.

× As I said, in my country ancient Persian names are more popular and interested, such as Muslim names.

✓ As I said, in my country ancient Persian names are more popular and interesting, such as traditional Muslim names.

'Interested' is the wrong word form; use 'interesting' to describe names. Clarify 'Muslim names' by adding 'traditional' if intended. Maintain adjective order and clarity.

× In those areas, yes.

✓ Yes, in those areas they are more popular.

Fragment lacks a verb; add 'they are more popular' to complete the idea. 'In those areas, yes' is acceptable in speech but incomplete as a written sentence.

× As I said before, names start with A and ends with a are popular than traditional names such as Maeda or Goran holy names.

✓ As I said before, names that start with A and end with A are more popular than traditional names such as Maeda or Goran, which are sacred names.

Maintain parallel verb forms: 'start' and 'end' should both be base form following 'that.' Use comparative 'more popular than' and clarify 'holy names' as 'sacred names.' Add commas and conjunctions to fix sentence flow and plurality agreement.