Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện sự rõ ràng và ngữ pháp: Tránh lặp từ, dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và cung cấp thông tin cụ thể. Ví dụ: nêu vị trí chính xác, đặc điểm nổi bật (bãi biển, khí hậu) bằng câu hoàn chỉnh và ít hơn 3 câu bổ trợ. Chú ý phát âm tên thành phố và dùng giới từ đúng (in Danang, in the middle of the country -> in central Vietnam).

Example: I come from Da Nang, a coastal city in central Vietnam. It is famous for its long sandy beaches and mild climate, which attract many tourists year-round.

Suggestion: Tập trung vào nội dung rõ ràng và tự nhiên: Tránh từ không chính xác và lặp âm (um, uh). Trả lời trực tiếp bằng một câu chủ đề rồi nêu 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: thái độ thân thiện, sự giúp đỡ lẫn nhau, cộng đồng gắn kết). Viết câu đúng ngữ pháp và dùng liên từ khi cần.

Example: What I like most is the friendliness of the people. Neighbours are always willing to help, and community events make it easy to meet new people and feel supported.

Suggestion: Trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng về thời gian, sau đó bổ sung chi tiết liên quan bằng cấu trúc rõ ràng. Tránh thông tin lộn xộn (ví dụ "surrounded by fuels" không rõ nghĩa). Nên nói: "I have lived there for X years" rồi mô tả sự thay đổi bằng liên từ (but, however) và ví dụ cụ thể (skyscrapers, new roads, tourist attractions).

Example: I have lived in Da Nang for ten years. When I was a child it was quite small, but now the city has become much more modern with new skyscrapers, bridges and popular tourist spots.

Suggestion: Trình bày quan điểm rõ ràng và cung cấp lí do cụ thể: Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề (Yes/No + reason), sau đó nêu 2 lý do với ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh câu chưa hoàn chỉnh và lỗi ngữ pháp. Dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, moreover).

Example: Yes, Da Nang is a great place for young people because it offers many recreational facilities. For example, there are modern parks, sports centres and shopping malls, which provide places to relax and socialise.

× Well, I live in Danang city, what is my hometown is located in the middle of my countries.

✓ Well, I live in Da Nang city; my hometown is located in the middle of my country.

The student used incorrect prepositions and plural form 'countries' which should be singular 'country'. Also sentence structure is awkward; use a semicolon or separate sentences. Use 'in Da Nang city' and 'in the middle of my country' for correct preposition and number agreement.

× Umm, it is the coastal city.

✓ Umm, it is a coastal city.

Using the definite article 'the' implies a specific coastal city already known; use the indefinite article 'a' to describe the city type.

× So uh, it's really famous for beach and some and some temperatures and some some.

✓ So, it's really famous for its beaches and warm weather.

The phrase 'famous for beach' needs possessive 'its beaches'. 'Some and some temperatures' is unclear; replace with 'warm weather' to convey climate. Correct plural 'beaches' and use appropriate nouns instead of vague repetition.

× Well, I'm relieved the thing of committee in my hometown, uh, there are people really, uh, friendly, umm, especially when you, uh, you meet their health tuition, they, uh, they will give you a hand.

✓ Well, I feel relieved in my hometown; people are really friendly, and when you meet them they will give you a hand.

'I'm relieved the thing of committee' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'I feel relieved in my hometown' expresses comfort. 'There are people really friendly' should be 'people are really friendly' to match subject-verb order. 'Meet their health tuition' is incorrect and unclear; replace with 'meet them' or 'meet locals'.

× Well, I have lived there, uh, for 10 years when my house, uh, still surrounded by fuels, but now my city is very modern with a lot of, uh, skyscrapers and famous, uh, place.

✓ Well, I have lived there for 10 years. When I was younger, my neighborhood was still surrounded by fields, but now my city is very modern with many skyscrapers and famous places.

Use 'When I was younger' to indicate past time; 'my house still surrounded by fuels' is ungrammatical and 'fuels' is wrong word—probably 'fields'. Use past tense 'was surrounded' for past state. 'Many' is correct quantifier and plural 'places' for multiple locations.

× Well, I think my hometown is really suitable for young people because it is, uh, in here is include many convenient place for young people such as a public park and a supermarket.

✓ Well, I think my hometown is really suitable for young people because it includes many convenient places such as public parks and supermarkets.

Remove redundant 'in here is'. Use 'includes' to indicate contains. 'Many convenient place' needs plural 'places'. Use plural for examples 'public parks and supermarkets'.

× So it can help young people increase in.

✓ So it can help young people improve their quality of life or social activities.

The phrase 'increase in' is incomplete and unclear. Provide a clear object such as 'improve their quality of life' or 'increase opportunities' to convey meaning.