Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần chính xác và mạch lạc về địa danh; tránh thông tin mâu thuẫn và các lỗi ngữ pháp. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (vị trí địa lý hoặc điểm nổi bật). Tránh nhầm lẫn tên quốc gia/thành phố và dùng thì đúng. Ví dụ cải thiện nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng, không quá 5 câu.

Example: I come from Hangzhou, a coastal city in the north of Vietnam. It is known for its scenic coastline and mild climate. Many people there work in fishing and tourism.

Suggestion: Cần dùng từ vựng chính xác cho các đặc sản và danh từ (fruits, tea, cakes, attractions). Trả lời nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó dùng liên từ để liệt kê và mô tả cụ thể một vài món hoặc địa điểm. Tránh lỗi phát âm/viết tên địa phương không chuẩn; nếu không chắc, mô tả tính chất thay vì tên sai. Giữ tổng số câu không quá 5.

Example: I love my hometown mainly because of its local food and cultural sites. For example, it is famous for fresh tropical fruits and a mild tea called jasmine tea. In addition, there are many historic temples and pagodas that attract visitors.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời cần dùng cấu trúc đúng cho khoảng thời gian (have lived since/born) và số tuổi phải viết đúng. Nên trả lời trực tiếp rồi bổ sung chi tiết ngắn gọn về kế hoạch tương lai, có liên kết logic. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp (I-17) và thiếu mạo từ hoặc động từ hỗ trợ.

Example: I have lived there since I was born; I am 17 years old now. In two years I plan to move to another city to attend university and start working.

Suggestion: Cần nêu ý kiến rõ ràng với câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích với lý do cụ thể và có thể nêu một ví dụ hoặc đề xuất cải thiện. Chú ý ngữ pháp (do not -> doesn't, subject-verb agreement) và dùng từ chính xác (entertainment). Hạn chế câu quá dài, sử dụng liên từ để mạch lạc.

Example: I don't think it's ideal for young people because the town is small and not very modern. As a result, there are limited job opportunities and few entertainment venues like cinemas or clubs. Young people often move to larger cities for work and study.

× I was born and raised in Hangzhou City, which is Nepal city.

✓ I was born and raised in Hangzhou, which is a coastal city in Vietnam.

The original sentence misused 'Nepal' (wrong country) and 'city' repetition. Use correct adjective 'coastal' and include article 'a'. Also ensure factual correctness: Hangzhou is actually in China, but based on student intent to say a coastal Vietnamese city, rephrase to 'a coastal city in Vietnam'. Improve clarity by removing redundant 'City' after Hangzhou and adding the indefinite article before 'coastal city'.

× It is the city located in the north of Vietnam, close to the sea.

✓ It is located in the north of Vietnam, close to the sea.

The phrase 'the city located in' is awkward after already naming the city. Use 'It is located in the north of Vietnam' or 'The city is located in northern Vietnam'. Preposition 'in the north of' is acceptable, but more natural is 'in northern Vietnam'. Keep sentence concise and avoid redundant nouns.

× I really love my city because it has a lot of local specialities especially delicious fruits like light tea or longing and some traditional cakes such as Bengal or bang dosing.

✓ I really love my city because it has many local specialties, especially delicious fruits like lychee or longan, and some traditional cakes such as bengal or banh d?ng.

Use 'many' with countable nouns ('specialties') instead of 'a lot of' which is informal. Correct spellings of fruit names: 'lychee' and 'longan'. Use commas to separate items and include 'and' before the last item. If cake names are Vietnamese, use correct transliteration like 'banh' instead of 'bang'.

× Besides that there are plenty of exciting attraction like temple or pagodas.

✓ Besides that, there are plenty of exciting attractions like temples and pagodas.

Use plural 'attractions' to match 'plenty of' and plural forms 'temples' and 'pagodas'. Also include comma after introductory phrase. Use 'and' to join the items.

× I have lived there since I was born, now I-17, but in two years I will move to another city to study at university and work.

✓ I have lived there since I was born; now I am 17, but in two years I will move to another city to study at university and to work.

Present continuous/present simple needed: 'now I am 17' instead of 'now I-17'. Use semicolon or comma and conjunctions for clarity. Add infinitive 'to' before 'work' to parallel 'to study'. Maintain future 'will move' correctly.

× Well, I don't think so because my city is not a big and modern city, so it don't provide young people with career prospects and there are not many exciting places to entertain and relax.

✓ Well, I don't think so because my city is not big and modern, so it doesn't provide young people with career prospects and there are not many exciting places to relax and be entertained.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'it don't' should be 'it doesn't' for third person singular. Also 'not a big and modern city' is wordy; better 'not big and modern'. Reorder 'relax and be entertained' for natural phrasing.