Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding filler words like 'uh' and correcting grammar mistakes. Also, be more specific and coherent by linking ideas properly. For example, mention the location clearly and describe the city with relevant details without redundancy.

Example: My hometown is Chittagong, located in the southern part of Bangladesh. It is one of the most important financial cities in the country. The city has a mix of old and new buildings, especially in Sitakunda, which is famous for its natural beauty and historical sites.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details. For example, explain why the eco-friendly environment is appealing and describe the natural features clearly.

Example: What I like most about my hometown is its eco-friendly environment. It is full of greenery, with many trees and parks. Additionally, you can find beautiful natural spots like caves, lakes, and even eagles, which make the city peaceful and refreshing.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and filler words. Try to answer directly with correct grammar and clear information. Use linking words to organize your answer logically.

Example: I lived in my hometown for about 24 years. After my 24th birthday, my family and I moved to another city. Interestingly, my father was also born in the same hometown.

Suggestion: Avoid contradictions and filler words. Make your opinion clear and support it with specific reasons using linking words. Use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your ideas effectively.

Example: I don't think my hometown is a good place for young people because, although many young people live there, there are not enough facilities or job opportunities. Therefore, many young people have to move to other cities to find work and better living conditions.

× My hometown is Chittagong, which is located the southern part of Bangladesh and it is one of the most financial city in Bangladesh.

✓ My hometown is Chittagong, which is located in the southern part of Bangladesh and it is one of the most financial cities in Bangladesh.

The preposition 'in' is missing before 'the southern part'. Also, 'city' should be plural 'cities' because it refers to one of many cities, so plural form is needed.

× My hometown is Chittagong, which is located the southern part of Bangladesh and it is one of the most financial city in Bangladesh.

✓ My hometown is Chittagong, which is located in the southern part of Bangladesh and it is one of the most financial cities in Bangladesh.

The noun 'city' should be plural 'cities' because the phrase 'one of the most' refers to a group, so plural form is required.

× Moreover, uh, Sitakon is the place where old you find old and new buildings, uh, and also it is uh, known for.

✓ Moreover, Sitakunda is the place where you find old and new buildings, and it is also known for that.

The sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrasing. 'Old you find old' is incorrect; it should be 'where you find old and new buildings'. Also, 'Sitakon' seems to be a misspelling of 'Sitakunda'. The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion for clarity.

× The thing that I like about in my hometown is uh is the eco friendly place.

✓ The thing that I like about my hometown is that it is an eco-friendly place.

The preposition 'about' should not be followed by 'in'. Also, the sentence needs 'that it is' to be grammatically correct and clear.

× In this place it is food.

✓ In this place, it is full of greenery.

The original sentence 'it is food' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the intended meaning is 'full of greenery' or 'rich in greenery'. The adjective 'full' fits better here.

× In this city it is food with greenery and you can find lots of eagles, caves and also some lakes.

✓ In this city, it is full of greenery and you can find lots of eagles, caves, and also some lakes.

Again, 'food' is incorrect; it should be 'full'. Also, 'eagles' and 'caves' are plural and correct here.

× So I'll leave in, in my hometown around 24 years old after, uh, my birthday.

✓ So I have lived in my hometown for around 24 years after my birthday.

The sentence uses future tense 'I'll leave' incorrectly. The question asks about duration, so present perfect 'have lived' is appropriate. Also, '24 years old' is incorrect; it should be 'for around 24 years'.

× Uh, after one hour years of my birthday, we moved to another city to do these **** home in my home city.

✓ After one or two years of my birthday, we moved to another city, but I still have my home in my hometown.

'One hour years' is incorrect; likely meant 'one or two years'. The phrase 'to do these **** home' is unclear; assuming it means 'to live' or 'to stay'. The sentence needs clarification and correct past tense usage.

× And, uh, this is the city where my father also born.

✓ And this is the city where my father was also born.

The verb 'born' requires the auxiliary verb 'was' to form the passive past tense 'was born'.

× No, I don't think so. In my hometown is a good place for young people because I must enter my hometown.

✓ No, I don't think so. My hometown is not a good place for young people because I must leave my hometown.

The phrase 'In my hometown is a good place' is incorrect; it should be 'My hometown is a good place'. Also, 'must enter' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'must leave'.

× There are lots of population, but uh, though there is a lot of, uh, young people, but uh, they don't have any proper, uh, they don't have enough facilities or enough, uh, workplace.

✓ There is a large population, and although there are many young people, they don't have proper facilities or enough workplaces.

'Lots of population' is incorrect; 'population' is uncountable, so 'a large population' is better. 'A lot of young people' is correct but needs better sentence structure. 'Workplace' should be plural 'workplaces' to match 'enough'.

× So they have to move another place. So in this region, I think downtown is not good for you.

✓ So they have to move to another place. Therefore, in this region, I think downtown is not good for young people.

The phrase 'move another place' is missing the preposition 'to'. Also, 'So' at the beginning of the second sentence is better replaced with 'Therefore' for clarity and formality.