Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to give a clear and direct response with correct sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

Example: My hometown is Shoryudgur, a small village near the city. It is very beautiful and peaceful, situated on a bend of the Asfor River, which adds to its charm.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and repetitive. Provide specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent and complete.

Example: I like the Patha River the most in my hometown. Since our village is located on its bend, the river provides us with water for farming and a beautiful natural environment.

Suggestion: Your answer is too long and confusing. Try to give a clear and concise response with proper sentence structure and linking words.

Example: I was born in the village and lived there until I was 8 years old. Then I moved to Dhaka for better education because the village has limited schooling options.

Suggestion: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better vocabulary. Use linking words to contrast ideas and be more specific.

Example: In my opinion, my hometown is a great place for children because of the fresh air and pleasant atmosphere. However, it is not ideal for young people since there are limited educational and job opportunities.

× Well, my hometown is in Shoryudgur, a small village Oscars of the city and it's very beautiful and peaceful atmosphere here and it situated on a bend of river name As for the which makes.

✓ Well, my hometown is Shoryudgur, a small village on the outskirts of the city. It has a very beautiful and peaceful atmosphere and is situated on a bend of a river named Asfor, which makes it special.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with unclear structure and missing prepositions. Breaking it into smaller sentences and adding correct prepositions ('on the outskirts', 'a bend of a river named') improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, in my hometown, I like mostly the river that is Patha.

✓ Well, in my hometown, I mostly like the river called Patha.

The phrase 'I like mostly the river' is awkward. Placing 'mostly' before the verb 'like' is more natural. Also, 'that is Patha' is better expressed as 'called Patha' for clarity.

× And our hometown is situated on the bend of Patha River and it gives.

✓ Our hometown is situated on the bend of the Patha River, which provides many benefits.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'and it gives' without completing the thought. Adding a relative clause clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.

× And this river is remarkably important for us since it gives us.

✓ This river is remarkably important for us since it provides water and supports our livelihood.

The sentence is incomplete and vague. Specifying what the river 'gives' makes the sentence meaningful and grammatically correct.

× But when I was so younger even I was born in the village but when I was 8 years old that time I came moved to Dhaka for better study since there is no better education system here as it's a very small village and so I lived.

✓ I was born in the village, but when I was 8 years old, I moved to Dhaka for better education since there was no good education system here because it is a very small village.

The original sentence has tense inconsistency and awkward phrasing. Using past tense 'was born' and 'moved' is correct. Also, simplifying and clarifying the sentence structure improves readability.

× In my opinion, it's a very remarkable place for child childhood and that's it gives a fresh air and the pleasant atmosphere, but not quite good for young people since they don't serve any better qualification, educational qualification and job.

✓ In my opinion, it's a very remarkable place for childhood as it provides fresh air and a pleasant atmosphere, but it is not very good for young people since there are no good educational qualifications or job opportunities.

The phrase 'child childhood' is incorrect; 'childhood' alone suffices. 'That's it gives' is ungrammatical; 'as it provides' is correct. Also, 'they don't serve any better qualification' is incorrect; the corrected sentence uses appropriate quantifiers and clearer phrasing.