Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat clear but incomplete and a bit repetitive. Try to complete your sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, you can say, "Originally, I'm from Ramita, but recently I have been staying in Kathmandu city because my college is there. Since my hometown is far from the city, I moved to Kathmandu to reach college on time."

Example: Originally, I'm from Ramita, but recently I have been staying in Kathmandu city because my college is there. Since my hometown is far from the city, I moved to Kathmandu to reach college on time.

Suggestion: Your answer has good points but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct prepositions and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, you can say, "I like the green nature of my hometown, which is especially good for hiking because it is in a hilly region. Moreover, I prefer to eat organic vegetables grown by my parents there."

Example: I like the green nature of my hometown, which is especially good for hiking because it is in a hilly region. Moreover, I prefer to eat organic vegetables grown by my parents there.

Suggestion: Your answer is incomplete and has grammatical mistakes. Try to complete your sentences and use correct grammar. Also, avoid repetition and clarify your ideas. For example, you can say, "I lived in Ramita for seven years. Then, my family migrated to Kathmandu because there were no facilities like transportation in Ramita. My parents planned the move to improve our living conditions."

Example: I lived in Ramita for seven years. Then, my family migrated to Kathmandu because there were no facilities like transportation in Ramita. My parents planned the move to improve our living conditions.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and incomplete with many repetitions. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, you can say, "Probably not, because as I mentioned earlier, my hometown lacks facilities, services, and transportation. These issues caused my family to migrate to Kathmandu. Therefore, I think it is not a good place for young people."

Example: Probably not, because as I mentioned earlier, my hometown lacks facilities, services, and transportation. These issues caused my family to migrate to Kathmandu. Therefore, I think it is not a good place for young people.

× Originally I'm from Ramita, however recently I'm staying in Kathmandu city because of my college.

✓ Originally I'm from Ramita, however recently I'm staying in Kathmandu city because of my college.

The sentence is grammatically correct in the use of present continuous tense 'I'm staying' to indicate a temporary situation. No correction needed.

× I have to reach at my college on time and my hometown is very far from the city so that is why I.

✓ I have to reach my college on time and my hometown is very far from the city, so that is why I do so.

The preposition 'at' is incorrect after 'reach'; the correct form is 'reach my college'. Also, the sentence is incomplete and needs completion for clarity.

× Well, obviously a green nature and and it's especially best for hiking because it's in hilly reason.

✓ Well, obviously green nature and it's especially good for hiking because it's in a hilly region.

The phrase 'a green nature' is incorrect; 'green nature' without 'a' is better. 'Especially best' is redundant; 'especially good' is correct. 'Reason' should be 'region'.

× So I always prefer to eat organic vegetables, which is grown by my parents in my hometown.

✓ So I always prefer to eat organic vegetables, which are grown by my parents in my hometown.

The relative pronoun 'which' refers to plural 'vegetables', so the verb should be 'are' not 'is'.

× Well, I lived there for seven years and then we migrated from Ramatab to Kathmandu because there is no such facilities such as transportation and lack of facilities.

✓ Well, I lived there for seven years and then we migrated from Ramita to Kathmandu because there were no facilities such as transportation and other services.

The sentence refers to past events, so 'is' should be 'were'. Also, 'Ramatab' seems a typo for 'Ramita'.

× So, so my parents plan to migrate and we will, we will have.

✓ So, my parents planned to migrate and we did.

Repetition of 'so' is unnecessary. The sentence is incomplete and awkward; it should be completed properly in past tense to match the context.

× Probably no, because as I as I mentioned earlier, there is a lack of facilities and services and lack of transportation which which made us to migrate from from there to Kathmandu.

✓ Probably not, because as I mentioned earlier, there is a lack of facilities, services, and transportation which made us migrate from there to Kathmandu.

'No' should be 'not' in this context. Repetition of 'as I' and 'which' is incorrect. 'Made us to migrate' should be 'made us migrate'.

× So I would so it is not good place for.

✓ So I would say it is not a good place for young people.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. It needs to be completed properly to convey the intended meaning.