Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, instead of repeating 'Thailand' and saying 'which only has other people live in', you can say 'My hometown is a small town in northern Thailand with a close-knit community.'

Example: My hometown is a small town in northern Thailand with a close-knit community. It is peaceful and surrounded by beautiful nature.

Suggestion: Improve your answer by using correct grammar and linking words. Instead of 'full of natural', say 'full of natural beauty' and connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: What I like about my hometown is that it is very peaceful because it is located in the middle of the mountains, so it is full of natural beauty.

Suggestion: Focus on correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to organize your answer logically. For example, 'I have lived there since I was born. I studied from elementary to high school there, but then I moved to another city to attend university.'

Example: I have lived in my hometown since I was born. I studied there from elementary school to high school, but then I moved to another city to attend university.

Suggestion: Make your answer more natural and grammatically correct. Avoid incomplete sentences and clarify your points. For example, 'Honestly, my hometown is not very suitable for young people because it is small and job opportunities are limited, which may result in low income.'

Example: Honestly, my hometown is not very suitable for young people because it is a small town with limited job opportunities, so they might earn a low income if they stay there.

× Yes, it is a very small town which only has other people live in.

✓ Yes, it is a very small town where only a few people live.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and word choice. 'which only has other people live in' is ungrammatical. The correct relative pronoun for places is 'where', and 'only a few people live' correctly expresses the intended meaning. Suggestion: use 'where' for places and ensure the verb phrase is correct.

× It is full of natural because it is in the middle of the mountain.

✓ It is full of nature because it is in the middle of the mountains.

The word 'natural' is an adjective and cannot be used as a noun here. The correct noun is 'nature'. Also, 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' to indicate the area surrounded by multiple mountains. Suggestion: use the noun 'nature' to describe natural environment and pluralize 'mountain' when referring to a range.

× Well, I lived here since I was born and I study here in from elementary to high school and then I move to the coin platform to study in university.

✓ Well, I have lived here since I was born, and I studied here from elementary to high school, then I moved to the city to study at university.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Since I was born' requires present perfect tense 'have lived'. 'Study' and 'move' should be in past tense 'studied' and 'moved' to match the time frame. 'Coin platform' seems a mistranslation; 'city' is more appropriate. Also, 'study in university' should be 'study at university'. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions continuing to present, past tense for completed past actions, and correct prepositions.

× It absolutely they will gain a low income so I don't recommend them to.

✓ They will absolutely earn a low income, so I don't recommend staying here for them.

The original sentence has unclear pronoun use and awkward phrasing. 'It absolutely they will gain a low income' is ungrammatical. 'Gain a low income' is unnatural; 'earn a low income' is better. The phrase 'I don't recommend them to' is incomplete; it should specify what is not recommended. Suggestion: clarify pronouns and complete the sentence meaningfully.