Hometown— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: My brother, your answer dey confuse small because e no too clear and some grammar no correct. Try to make your sentences short and direct, and use correct prepositions and articles. Also, avoid repeating words and make sure you mention your hometown name clearly and its location properly.

Example: My hometown is a small village called Hidalgo, located in the southwestern part of Nigeria. It is famous for its rich traditions and beautiful scenery.

Suggestion: You need to connect your ideas better and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to join your points. Also, try to be more specific about what makes your hometown comfortable and peaceful, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

Example: I like my hometown because it is a small and peaceful place with beautiful scenery and good landscapes. Also, many elderly people live there, which adds to the calm atmosphere.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and has many grammar mistakes. Try to give a clear and complete answer by stating how long you have lived there and mentioning your education and family life in simple, correct sentences. Avoid using words that are not clear or incorrect.

Example: I have lived in my hometown for about 29 years. I completed my education there from kindergarten to high school. Now, I live there with my family because it is a comfortable place.

Suggestion: Your answer needs to be more organized and clear. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences. Also, explain what kind of opportunities are available for young people in your hometown.

Example: Yes, my hometown is a good place for young people because many come from across Nigeria to find jobs and start businesses. There are many opportunities for growth and development.

× I'm a native of small village in state cold window.

✓ I'm a native of a small village in the state called Ondo.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'small village' and the definite article 'the' before 'state'. Also, 'cold window' seems to be a mishearing or typo; it should be 'called Ondo' to correctly name the state. Articles are important to specify nouns properly in English.

× You still just located in the southwestern part of Nigeria.

✓ It is located in the southwestern part of Nigeria.

The original sentence lacks a proper subject and verb agreement. 'You still just located' is incorrect. The correct form is 'It is located' to refer to the village's location.

× The name of my small beautiful villages Hidalgo.

✓ The name of my small beautiful village is Hidalgo.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' to link the subject and complement. Also, 'villages' should be singular 'village' to match the context.

× You Don't Know is known for his rich tradition and cultural heritage.

✓ It is known for its rich tradition and cultural heritage.

The pronoun 'You Don't Know' is incorrect here. The correct pronoun to refer to the village is 'It' and possessive pronoun 'its' for the tradition and heritage.

× Beautiful scenery on Fatherland.

✓ It has beautiful scenery and a rich fatherland.

The original sentence is a fragment without a verb. Adding 'It has' makes it a complete sentence. 'Fatherland' is used here to mean homeland or native land.

× Which is a relatively small but peaceful place.

✓ It is a relatively small but peaceful place.

The sentence is a fragment starting with 'Which'. It needs a subject and verb to be complete.

× Leaving this very very confortable because you.

✓ Living here is very, very comfortable because of you.

'Leaving' is incorrect; it should be 'Living'. Also, 'because you' is unclear; it should be 'because of you' or better 'because of its environment'. The sentence needs clarity and correct pronoun usage.

× You have fight outlined, you have good landscape and there is also a high percentage of elderly people.

✓ You have a beautiful outline, good landscape, and there is also a high percentage of elderly people.

'Fight outlined' is incorrect; likely meant 'beautiful outline'. Also, articles are needed before nouns. The sentence needs proper adjectives and articles.

× Since I've lived here.

✓ I have lived here since then.

The sentence fragment 'Since I've lived here' is incomplete. It needs to be connected properly to express duration.

× I had my alley. Education writing this down.

✓ I had my early education here.

The original sentence is unclear and fragmented. 'Alley' is likely a mishearing of 'early'. The sentence needs to be clear and complete.

× From kindergarten or true to high school and even my Tishari education.

✓ From kindergarten through to high school and even my tertiary education.

The sentence is fragmented and contains misheard words like 'or true' instead of 'through' and 'Tishari' instead of 'tertiary'. It needs correction for clarity and completeness.

× Alright, now I walk and I live here with my family.

✓ Alright, now I work and live here with my family.

'Walk' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'work'. The sentence needs to express current occupation and residence.

× Closest place is conducive.

✓ This place is conducive.

'Closest place' is unclear and incorrect. The sentence should state that the place is conducive (suitable) for living or working.

× In fact, we have a very high percentage of young people.

✓ In fact, we have a very high percentage of young people.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× From across Nigeria coming here.

✓ People from across Nigeria come here.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'People' as subject and 'come' as verb corrects the sentence.

× Just to find his means of source of livelihood.

✓ Just to find their means of livelihood.

'His' is incorrect as the subject is plural or general people. 'Their' is the correct pronoun. Also, 'means of source' is redundant; 'means of livelihood' suffices.

× My hometown is generally known for land with so much on.

✓ My hometown is generally known for land with so much on it.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'on it' clarifies the meaning.

× Limitless opportunities. So.

✓ It offers limitless opportunities.

The original is a fragment. Completing the sentence clarifies the meaning.