Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating your current status, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and fix tense/word choice errors (e.g. "maternity leave", "master's"). Use linking words like 'However' or 'Also' only if adding a new point.

Example: I am currently on maternity leave, but I plan to study for a master's degree after it ends. I already hold two bachelor's degrees—one from my home country and one I completed after moving to Canada—so pursuing a master's is my next goal.

Suggestion: Open with a direct, short answer stating your role and workplace, then give a specific timeframe and current situation. Remove fillers ('um', 'uh') and correct articles ('an assistant manager'). Use linking words like 'for' or 'before' to connect time information.

Example: I worked as an assistant manager at a gas station owned by a friend for about a year. Before my maternity leave, I was responsible for supervising staff and handling daily operations.

Suggestion: Answer directly and give specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Say why it is good (e.g. friendly management, flexible hours) and then use a linking phrase ('However' or 'That said') to acknowledge differences in preferences.

Example: Yes, it was a good place to work because the management was supportive and the hours were flexible. However, it might not suit everyone, since some people prefer quieter office jobs rather than busy customer service roles.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific features you value in a workplace. Remove hesitations and correct plurals/articles ('where employees are valued'). Use linking words like 'because' to explain why.

Example: Absolutely. I would like to work somewhere where employees are valued and their efforts are appreciated because that motivates me and improves teamwork.

Suggestion: Give a direct statement of your plan, then provide 1–2 specific reasons and optionally describe the type of remote work you seek. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' to show cause and effect.

Example: In the future I plan to look for remote work so I can spend more time caring for my baby because I prefer not to use daycare. Ideally I would seek part-time remote roles in administration or customer support that allow flexible hours.

× Well currently I am on member 20 leave but hopefully after my maternity is done I will pursue my higher education in masters.

✓ Well, currently I am on maternity leave, but hopefully after my maternity leave is over I will pursue my master's degree.

Sentence uses awkward and incorrect phrases: 'on member 20 leave' is incorrect and likely meant 'maternity leave'; 'maternity is done' is informal/incorrect; 'higher education in masters' should be 'pursue my master's degree'. Use present continuous 'am on maternity leave' (correct ongoing state) and future 'will pursue' for plan. Also add articles and possessive apostrophe in master's. Suggestions: replace incorrect phrases with standard collocations: 'on maternity leave', 'maternity leave is over', 'pursue my master's degree'.

× I have done 2 bachelors one back in home country and ones I when I came to Canada.

✓ I have completed two bachelor's degrees: one in my home country and one when I came to Canada.

Problems: '2 bachelors' should be 'two bachelor's degrees' (singular form with possessive), 'ones I when' is ungrammatical. Use 'completed' or 'earned' and clarify locations with 'in my home country' and 'when I came to Canada'. Suggestion: use numerals spelled out in formal speech and proper noun forms.

× So hopefully I will pursuing my masters in the future.

✓ So hopefully I will pursue my master's degree in the future.

After modal 'will' use base verb 'pursue', not the -ing form 'pursuing'. Also add possessive in 'master's degree'. Suggestion: use 'will' + base verb for future statements.

× Examiner: Where do you work?>

✓ Examiner: Where do you work?

The '>' character is extraneous and not grammatical. This is a punctuation/formatting issue. Remove stray characters to maintain proper sentence structure.

× Well, I have worked at SO as a assistant manager in one of the gas stations owned by one of my friends.

✓ Well, I worked at SO as an assistant manager at one of the gas stations owned by a friend of mine.

Use simple past 'worked' for a completed past job; 'have worked' suggests relevance to present but the context describes a past role. 'a assistant' should be 'an assistant' (article before vowel sound). 'one of my friends' can be 'a friend of mine' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use simple past when the action is finished and correct articles.

× Umm, so I was working there about a year.

✓ I worked there for about a year.

Use simple past 'worked' or 'was working' can be used but 'worked' is more natural here; use 'for about a year' rather than 'about a year' without preposition. Suggestion: use 'for' with durations.

× Then I, uh, went on a maternity leave.

✓ Then I went on maternity leave.

Omit the article 'a' before 'maternity leave' in standard English: say 'went on maternity leave'. Remove filler words. Suggestion: use concise phrasing.

× Well, according to my opinion, it was a good, it is a good place to work.

✓ Well, in my opinion, it was a good place to work, and it still is.

'According to my opinion' is incorrect; use 'in my opinion'. Mixing past and present without clarity is awkward: clarify that it was and still is good. Also remove redundant commas. Suggestion: use 'in my opinion' and keep tense consistent.

× Uh, However, it always depends person to person.

✓ However, it always depends from person to person.

Phrase should be 'from person to person' to indicate variation among individuals. Original misses 'from'. Suggestion: use set expression 'from person to person' or 'on the person'.

× Like some people do prefer to work in the customer really uh, service tool.

✓ For example, some people prefer to work in customer service roles.

Original is garbled: 'the customer really uh, service tool' is incorrect. Use clear noun phrase 'customer service roles' and avoid filler. 'do prefer' is unnecessary; 'prefer' suffices. Suggestion: simplify to 'some people prefer to work in customer service'.

× Otherwise some people do not like it, so it always depends.

✓ Other people do not like it, so it depends on the person.

'Otherwise' is not the best connector here; use 'other people'. 'it always depends' needs object: 'depends on the person'. Suggestion: use correct collocations 'depends on'.

× Absolutely. I would love to uh work, uh, somewhere, uh, where uh employee is valued and the employees efforts are appreciated.

✓ Absolutely. I would love to work somewhere where employees are valued and their efforts are appreciated.

Subject-verb agreement: 'employee is' should be 'employees are' to match plural 'employees'. Also 'employees efforts' needs possessive: 'employees' efforts' or better 'their efforts'. Suggestion: use plural subject with plural verb and possessive pronoun for clarity.

× So I would definitely love for this kind of workplace.

✓ So I would definitely like to work in this kind of workplace.

Phrase 'love for this kind of workplace' is ungrammatical. Use 'like to work in' or 'would love this kind of workplace'. Suggestion: rephrase for natural collocation.

× Well as I mentioned I'm on a leave currently so in the future I'm planning to look for the jobs like work from home jobs or remote work just to spend time with my baby and to look after him as I do not want to leave my child in the daycare.

✓ Well, as I mentioned, I'm currently on leave, so in the future I'm planning to look for work-from-home or remote jobs so I can spend time with my baby and look after him because I do not want to leave my child in daycare.

Use 'on leave' not 'on a leave'; 'work-from-home' hyphenated as adjective; 'jobs like work from home jobs' is redundant — use 'work-from-home or remote jobs'. Replace 'to look after him as' with 'because' for clarity. Remove extra articles: 'in the daycare' -> 'in daycare'. Suggestion: simplify, correct articles, and use standard collocations.

× So for the future I'm planning to uh look for the remote work.

✓ So, in the future I'm planning to look for remote work.

Avoid filler 'uh'; use 'in the future' not 'for the future' (both acceptable but 'in the future' more natural here). 'look for the remote work' should be 'look for remote work' without 'the'. Suggestion: use base verb and omit unnecessary articles.