Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "I am" or "I'm" once) and use linking phrase if adding detail.

Example: I am currently a high school student, and I focus mainly on my studies. Therefore, I don't have time to work part-time at the moment.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence about past work, fix grammar (use past tense consistently), remove filler words, and add a specific detail such as hours or duties using a linking word for coherence.

Example: I used to work at a small cafe near my home. I worked there after school as a waiter, serving customers and helping with simple food preparation for about two hours each weekday.

Suggestion: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and compare clearly. Use correct comparative forms and give one specific reason (e.g., friendly staff, flexible hours, better pay).

Example: Yes, I thought it was a good place to work because the staff were friendly and the shifts were flexible. Also, the pay was slightly higher than other service jobs I knew.

Suggestion: Use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Avoid awkward phrasing like "which makes" twice; use linking words such as "because" and keep sentences concise.

Example: Definitely. I liked working there because it was convenient and the team was very supportive, which made the job enjoyable. The cafe was also in a pleasant neighborhood, so it felt safe and busy.

Suggestion: State your plan clearly with correct future tense and fewer repetitions. Use linking words to show sequence (e.g., "then", "after that") and add a specific reason or detail about why you want that career.

Example: After graduating from high school, I will apply to a college program in tourism. Then I hope to become a hotel manager abroad because I enjoy serving guests and learning about other cultures.

× Currently I'm a student in a high school and I I'm really focused on my study and I don't have time to work.

✓ Currently I am a high school student, and I am really focused on my studies, so I don't have time to work.

Use consistent present simple/continuous forms: 'I'm a student' -> 'I am a high school student' is clearer; remove repeated 'I'. Use plural 'studies' for general academic work (plural noun). Combine clauses with 'so' to show result. Use full forms for clarity in speaking transcripts. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I used to work in cafe which located to near to my home and after school, uh, I went to the cafe and uh, I used to be a waiter.

✓ I used to work in a cafe that was located near my home; after school I went to the cafe and worked as a waiter.

Fix article use ('a cafe'), relative clause ('that was located near my home' instead of 'which located to near to my home'), remove extra 'to' and unneeded 'used to' repetition. Use simple past 'worked as a waiter' to describe habitual past actions. This addresses sentence structure, article use and past tense consistency. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I used to work in cafe which located to near to my home and after school, uh, I went to the cafe and uh, I used to be a waiter.

✓ I used to work in a cafe that was located near my home; after school I went to the cafe and worked as a waiter.

Preposition 'near' does not require 'to' after it here. Use 'located near my home' rather than 'located to near to my home'. Also use 'in a cafe' and 'worked as a waiter'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× I used to work in cafe which located to near to my home and after school, uh, I went to the cafe and uh, I used to be a waiter.

✓ I used to work in a cafe that was located near my home; after school I went to the cafe and worked as a waiter.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before 'cafe' ('a cafe') and 'a waiter' is not used with 'be' in this context; say 'worked as a waiter'. Correct article usage clarifies countable nouns. Grammar problem type ID:22

× In my view, for me it was a really good place to work and also, uh, it has a good salary than other working places such as service or restaurants.

✓ In my view, it was a really good place to work, and it offered a better salary than other workplaces such as service businesses or restaurants.

Use comparative form 'better' not 'good' when comparing salaries. 'Has a good salary than' is incorrect; use 'offered a better salary than'. Also 'workplaces' is a better noun than 'working places'. Grammar problem type ID:25

× Would you like the place where you work?

✓ Did you like the place where you worked?

Question from examiner likely asks about past job; student should use past tense 'did you like' and 'worked'. Ensure tense matches the context of a past job. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Definitely, I really would like the reason is it's convenient and supportive team and which makes work more enjoyable and effective and also it's a really good area to work.

✓ Definitely. I really liked it because it was convenient and the team was supportive, which made the work more enjoyable and efficient; it was also in a really good area.

Split into clearer sentences, use past tense to match 'used to work'. Use articles ('the team'), correct relative clause 'which made', and better adjective 'efficient' rather than 'effective' for work processes. Remove redundant words and correct word order. Grammar problem type ID:26

× What are your future work plans?

✓ What are your future work plans?

This is the examiner's question and is already correct; no change needed. It uses present simple to ask about future plans which is acceptable. Grammar problem type ID:6

× After graduating the school and I I will apply to the college named tourism and then I want to be a hotel manager in foreign countries and I serve to other people.

✓ After graduating from school, I will apply to a college for tourism, and then I want to become a hotel manager in a foreign country where I can serve other people.

Use 'graduate from school'. Remove repeated 'I'. Use 'apply to a college for tourism' or 'apply to the tourism college'. Use 'become' for job aspiration and singular 'a foreign country' or 'foreign countries' with consistent article; here 'a foreign country' is smoother. 'Serve to other people' should be 'serve other people' (no 'to'). Use future tense 'will apply' and 'want to become' to express plans. Grammar problem type ID:7