Work— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cevap net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamıyor ve karışık zaman kullanımı var. Ayrıca gereksiz tekrarlar bulunuyor. Daha kısa, doğru zaman ve dilbilgisi kullanarak doğrudan yanıt ver. Örneğin geçmiş/yakın gelecek zaman karışıklığını düzelt ve ‘graduate’ fiilinin doğru kullanımına dikkat et (I will graduate).

Example: I am currently a 12th-grade student, and I will graduate in two months. After that, I plan to go to university to study law because I want to become a lawyer.

Suggestion: Cevap çelişkili ve tekrarlı; önce 'I don't work' sonra 'I'm an associate' diyerek karışıklık yaratıyor. Konuya doğrudan ve tutarlı cevap ver; eğer şu an çalışıyorsanız rollerinizi kısa ve net açıklayın, değilse çalışmadığınızı söyleyin. Gereksiz isimlendirmeler ve tekrarları çıkar.

Example: I don't have a paid job at the moment. I help at my high school as an associate, mainly supporting teachers with administrative tasks, and I will graduate in two months before starting university.

Suggestion: Genel olarak iyi detaylar vermişsiniz fakat zaman uyumsuzluğu ve dil bilgisi hataları var (ör. 'it was' yerine 'it is' veya 'it has been' duruma göre). Ayrıca cümleleri daha akıcı bağlaçlarla birbirine bağlayın (for example, and therefore).

Example: Yes, it is a good place to work. For example, it offers flexible hours and training opportunities, and I have met some of my best friends there, so I would consider looking for a similar job in the future.

Suggestion: Cevapta amaç ve sebep belirtilmiş ama dilbilgisi ve sözdiziminde hatalar var ('a reach my full potential' yanlış). Bağlaçları kullanarak neden-sonuç ilişkisini netleştir ve bazı ifadeleri daha doğal hale getir (e.g. 'I don't feel I can reach my full potential').

Example: No, I don't like my current workplace because I don't feel I can reach my full potential there. It is noisy and crowded, so I would prefer a quieter place closer to nature where I can concentrate better.

Suggestion: İyi kişisel hedefler belirtilmiş ancak dilbilgisi (subject-verb agreement) ve kelime seçimi hataları var ('woman's voice' yerine 'women's'). Cümleleri mantıklı parçalara bölüp, bağlaçlarla ilişkilendirerek daha akıcı anlatın. Detay vererek planların nasıl gerçekleşeceğini kısaca ekleyin.

Example: I plan to become a lawyer to advocate for people's rights, especially women's rights. I also hope to open a theatre school in the future because I love acting and teaching drama, and I would like to combine these interests by offering practical classes and performances.

× And also I'm a student, but two months later I will be graduate and I wanna go to university.

✓ And I'm also a student, but in two months I will graduate and I want to go to university.

The phrase 'will be graduate' is incorrect because 'graduate' is an active verb here; use 'will graduate' for future simple. 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. 'Also' placement improved for natural word order. Suggestion: use 'I will graduate' and avoid informal contractions in formal speech.

× Now I'm just a student and I am 12th grade.

✓ Now I'm just a student and I am in 12th grade.

In English we say 'in 12th grade' to indicate school year. Missing preposition 'in' is a present-tense/state expression. Suggestion: include 'in' before grade level.

× Look, I don't work at that the moment I'm an associate at the high school.

✓ Look, I don't work at the moment; I'm an associate at a high school.

The original contains word order and article errors. 'At that the moment' is incorrect; correct is 'at the moment'. Use a semicolon or conjunction to separate clauses. Use 'a high school' unless a specific school is meant. Suggestion: reorder to 'I don't work at the moment; I'm an associate at a high school.'

× I graduate two months later.

✓ I will graduate in two months.

'I graduate two months later' mixes tenses and lacks 'in'. For future events use 'will graduate' or 'am graduating'. Suggestion: say 'I will graduate in two months.'

× I'll go, Jenny, I will graduate in two months and to talk about my plans.

✓ I'll go. I will graduate in two months and talk about my plans.

Redundant 'I'll go, Jenny' is unclear; remove or clarify. 'To talk about' should be 'and talk about' to join verbs. Use consistent future tense. Suggestion: separate ideas and use 'and talk about my plans.'

× I want to be a lawyer.

✓ I want to be a lawyer.

This sentence is correct; 'want' expresses present desire. No change needed.

× Work Yes, it was really good place to work.

✓ Yes, it was a really good place to work.

Missing article 'a' before 'really good place'. 'Work' at start is extraneous. Suggestion: say 'Yes, it was a really good place to work.'

× I received several benefits such as flexible hours and training and I saw I met with my best friends and so I would consider looking for similar job in the future.

✓ I received several benefits such as flexible hours and training, and I met my best friends there, so I would consider looking for a similar job in the future.

Awkward phrasing 'I saw I met' incorrect; likely intended 'I met my best friends there'. Add article 'a' before 'similar job'. Commas improve clarity. Suggestion: simplify clauses and use correct past participle/past simple forms.

× No, I don't like the place where I work because I want to be a reach my full potential and I feel I will prefer better in more natural settings.

✓ No, I don't like the place where I work because I want to reach my full potential, and I feel I would do better in more natural settings.

Phrase 'be a reach my full potential' is ungrammatical; correct is 'reach my full potential'. 'I will prefer better' is incorrect; use 'I would do better' or 'I would perform better'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'reach' and modal 'would' for hypothetical preference.

× My school's direction is so noisy and crowded and there's a lot of apartments in there so I would prefer a quieter place closer to nature.

✓ My school's location is very noisy and crowded and there are a lot of apartments nearby, so I would prefer a quieter place closer to nature.

'Direction' is incorrect; use 'location'. 'There's a lot of apartments' should be 'there are a lot of apartments' (subject-verb agreement and plural). 'In there' is awkward; use 'nearby'. Suggestion: use correct nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× My future work plans is to be a lawyer and to be people's voice and also mostly the woman's voice.

✓ My future work plans are to be a lawyer and to be the voice of the people, especially the voice of women.

Use plural verb 'are' to agree with plural subject 'plans'. 'People's voice' is awkward; 'the voice of the people' is clearer. 'Woman's voice' should be 'women' (plural) and phrased 'voice of women'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with subject and use natural noun phrases.

× And I have a one different plan.

✓ And I have one different plan.

'A one' is incorrect; use 'one' without 'a' or use 'a different plan'. Suggestion: say 'I have one other plan' or 'I have a different plan.'

× It is to open a school, open theater school because I really like theater and I really like to play, play and teach the theater.

✓ It is to open a theater school because I really like theatre and I really like to act and teach theatre.

Use gerund or infinitive consistently: 'to open a theater school' is correct. 'Play' is ambiguous; use 'act' for performing. 'Teach the theater' should be 'teach theatre' or 'teach theatre arts'. Suggestion: use 'act' instead of 'play' when referring to performing and keep spelling consistent (theatre/theater).